Reviews for Hidden Love
Rowena of Naxen chapter 1 . 3/24/2009
aw...this is really very cute. it's nice to see the in-between of when Numair falls for Daine (or should i say, realizes he loves her) and when he finally kisses her in RotG. It's nice to see that part where he loves her but can't tell her. you do need to go back over the grammar and spelling though.

-rowena
KrisEleven chapter 1 . 3/24/2009
I liked this. The last bit was incredibly cute and I think you have a good look into Numair's growing feelings as well as the other characters' mannerisms.

There were a few things wrong structurally with this. There are spelling mistakes in the summary, so maybe copy and paste that into a spell check program and make the changes. Your summary is what draws people into the story and since this is a good fic I think you should make your summary reflect that. Also, when you have dialogue, every time a new character speaks they get a new paragraph. New character, new paragraph. It gets unbearably confusing if you keep them on the same line.

Anyway, it was good and very sweet. Good job.

KrisEleven