|Reviews for The Fallout|
| readingmama chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
Another great chapter. I was surprised to see Rosalie as the voice of reason there at the end. i liked it. I loved the scene in Alice's mind, so well written.
I'm not even going to ask if Bella is alive this time...but if you want to tell me you can. : )
| lettiemae chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
I think that was the right choice to go to Alice. There is a bond there that is too strong to resist her needing him.
I loved the scene with them talking and her looking human. It was so intimate for her to share how she escapes from her visions. It pained me to have Edward leave her to go to Bella. So now what did Bella see? You got me there. I am hoping it is Edward but then why the alarm- I guess I will just have to be patient and wait...not easy you know.
Thank you for getting Edward to the point of realizing that his family needs him. I was starting to get mad at him and had the same thoughts as Rose...I don't see myself as the Rose type so this upset me even more.
Keep them chapters coming
| Batgirl8968 chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
So first, funny story. I had two stories open: this one, and Shadow Guardians, which I havent read yet. I went to go start this review, started reading the chapter, and was like "what the hell, Chapter 1 isn't EPOV, or called "the Beginning", it's the Prologue and JPOV". Proceeded to get really confused and to have mini panic attack, cause I'm an idiot and didn't think to check the TITLE, when I finally realized I just had the wrong tab open. The things that Internet Explorer Tabs can do to a person...
Anyway! REALLY enjoyed this chapter!
Edward choosing to go to Alice, instead of continuing to find Bella just makes sense. As important as Bella is to him, by going to her, he'd basically be hurting and in essence sacrificing his family and that's just something Edward wouldn't do and wouldn't be able to live with.
You're handling Jasper's emotional overload really well, too.
Esme's moment, where she defends Carlisle and tries to convince him it wasn't his fault...and this: "“You’re a good man.” I heard her whisper."...was really moving. That was a very well-written moment and you captured it nicely.
You write very vividly, and I'm always impressed. For example: "She spun around and the sight of her smile took my breath away all over again." As a reader, you can just FEEL that.
The entire Alice - Edward parallel world scene was really cool. Makes sense, since they both work entirely within their minds. Also, their moments were very sweet, and even though they talked about, y'know, the end of the world and zombie-Bella, I still enjoyed that part.
Inclusion of the Tybee Bomb, pretty cool how you worked that in. I'm a history major, so I basically just eat up anything like that.
I like how you chose Rosalie to follow after Edward when he ran. Interesting choice, but it worked and made sense, really. And how she pointed out that the family would keep fighting, making him realize what he was doing. Nicely done.
Overall, loovveed the chapter! The Alice scene was an unexpected surprise, and all around cool, and I just really liked it all! dude, you're awesome! :)
Sidenote: Noticed on your thread a little while back, the cowbell pic...and since you're a Canuck as well, I figured it couldn't hurt to ask: Are you a Sam & Fuzzy fan, or did you just randomly find that picture?
-Batgirl aka BelleBlack
| obieewok chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
Freaking loving this. I especially love the chapter names. They are so poetic.
I swear to all that is Holy (meaning Wide Awake or really good fanfic) if you break my heart and Bella is dead, well, I'll still read your stuff, but I'll be all snot filled from crying.
Keep typing!:) I need more!
ps...of course Edward didn't make the right decision-duh, when does that kid EVER make the right decision. Men...
| Anne Shirley-Swan chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
I favorited this a long time ago on a rec from I don't even remember where. I JUST started reading it yesterday, and lo and behold there is an update today.
I would just like to say, you have given me back faith in fan fiction. I am a ravenous reader, I have no talent for writing. Nothing I have come across (since Creature of Habit) has captured my imagination quite like your story.
My hubby read the entire series so he would know what I am talking about when I ramble on about fan fics... (mostly about Creature and Irritable Grizzly Adams) HE wants links to read this one. Kick A$$ girly.
I get very absorbed in both 2006 and 2016. I immediately "got" the whole Seth thing. My theory, Bella is Maria's ace in the hole. My theory is Maria is looking to be the "new" Volturi. This story is gonna get soo good soo fast, it will be a sight to see. I absolutely cannot wait for what you do with this and where you take this.
I am 100% enraptured by your story, and I am so grateful for you putting yourself out here. I am also grateful to all of your help, you have the best of the best behind you. That should tell you something. And I am so proud that you are Canadian. You have quickly become a top 5 for me. I will lap up anything you care to put out here to share. Thanks!
| RingTheBella chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
You know, I have told myself several times that I should stop reading this story and wait until it's done so I can read it straight through without stopping. Then a new chapter comes out and I read it anyway. :)
| mexicandi chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
you are such a sweetheart for replying to your feedback! that made me feel so special ;)
I am SO glad you didn't split the past and present into two stories. it makes total sense; you execute it beautifully! I think your mastery of flashbacks sets this fic apart from the rest (among other things, of course).
and I TOTALLY got why Seth was Charlie's son. the hints that Charlie and Sue were into each other in BD was the first thing I thought of, so it made complete sense to me!
now on to this actual chapter... I LOVED the exchange between Edward and Alice. it felt very real, and not cheesy at all. and poor Carlisle! your fic is the only one that has ever made me get a little teary-eyed. absolutely HEARTBREAKING. but in a good way (kinda?). anywho, I love it and I love you! keep it up! I'm already anxious for the next chapter :)
| LaStack chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
Again I must say how much I love this story! It reminds me a bit of Jericho, you've heard of it yes? If not its this show cbs had (and canceled the bastards) about a small town after a nuclear fallout and its amazing. Love all around.
I don't want to believe bella is dead, mostly because I'm a hopeless romantic and i just have this feeling she's going to show up eventually. Anyways I'm done with my rambling. Please update soon
| spargelkun chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
The image of human Alice alone in the dark... just... wow. Sad an pretty and a bit scary and that alone is worth Edward going. 'That' being my sick pleasure. But... I think it was the right thing, given the information he had.. for Jasper's sake, at the very least.
Not to be all 'where is Bella?' or anything, but where is Bella? I can't wait to find out.
I tried really hard to find you a white cherry slushie, because, well, I have certain feelings about them, but google image is way fail on that front so instead let me express my gratitude in an Ode to the Volturi slushie line up:
| sherrie cherries chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
i totally understand why edward choose to go to Alice...but it still saddens me...but Alice told him to go to Bella...gotta love the love between this family. they will do anything for each other.
can't wait for more
| Rabid Tofu chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
fucking amazing, again i swear
i loved the alice part
although i think the Dr C calling edward "son" everytime is a bit, eh, un dr c'ish?
this is BY FAR one of my favorite fics tough :D
ps, if you drag thiks out for like more then a few months i dont think id be able to take it...
| LovesTheHeat chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
i think edward did the right thing with going to alice - she needed him in that moment and he did what he could to help her and himself... he got information from her.
i love this story. awesome...
please update soon! i'm dying for the next chapter.
| Twilight-GG chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
I cannot wait for the next chapter!
This story is amazing and addicting
| mhgood chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
Wow-I love the Alice-retreats-into-the-innermost-sanctum-of-her-mind part. I read another story that used that device, a while ago. Ugh. I can't remember what it was. But anyhow, I like it and you don't overdo it at all. That's a sweet interaction between siblings, too.
The explanation about the bomb is very believable. The little details like that and the Latvian flags-excellent.
Yes, Edward made the right choice by going to Alice, under the circumstances. He didn't know for sure when the bombs would go off, so he had to tend to his siter before trying once agian to track down Bella. He had no way of knowing that he only had three days left.
From Alice's vision, it seems that Bella was in Phoinix when the bombs go off. Hm. You have me worried!
| MeiSun chapter 8 . 4/29/2009
*Did Edward make the right choice by going to Alice? What do you think?
well, yes and no... i'm thinking Bella is now a vampire somewhere in the south, and that's what Jasper sees in Maria's... coven? So, if Edward waiting with Alice instead of going to rescue Bella led to that outcome, then that's all good, right? a long as Edward doesn't off himself before he finds her... or she him.
can't wait for the next update!