|Reviews for The Fallout|
| RingTheBella chapter 4 . 4/10/2009
I am certainly hoping, as I'm sure many others are, that when Charlie said that Bella was "gone" that it doesn't actually mean dead. Perhaps she ran away and is still human somewhere? Perhaps she got changed into a vampire and from Charlie's POV she just "went missing". I'm sure you don't want to answer that just yet. You probably want it to be a surprise.
Hmm. I think that's a good idea. What do you think about doing a chapter, (or a half-chapter) in Charlie's point-of-view? It could partially show us how Bella ended up "gone" without letting us know (yet?) if she is a live human somewhere, was killed or changed to a vampire.
| twilightluver chapter 1 . 4/10/2009
That was so god! Another writer had this on favorites and I read it from there. so glad i did! keep it up!
| Bratty-Vamp chapter 4 . 4/10/2009
I am completely, and hopelessly drawn into your writing.
I can't wait to see how this all plays out!
| ADanielle21 chapter 4 . 4/9/2009
Gosh if I didnt know any better I would have thought you lived through a time like this! haha
Seriously though, amazing job with the story! cant wait for an update!
| Tarinya chapter 4 . 4/8/2009
i really like your story... interesting plot. i'm very curious to learn about Bella's part in this story, though i really hope she's somehow alive.
i like how you name your chapters, it's much more satisfying than the "chapter 1", "chapter 2" etc. we know from other stories :)
| OhPleaseBiteMe chapter 4 . 4/7/2009
ohh me likes! I can't wait to see where you go with this.
| robyntj5998 chapter 4 . 4/7/2009
I am so sad for Edward. First, he had so much hope going to find Bella. I love your portrayal of Charlie and how he is uber-pissed at Edward. GOOD! He shouldn't have lied and left. I love that Charlie just starts railing on him. But where is Bella? Hmm...her truck is gone. That is telling. But where did she go?
I love the switching back and forth between 2006 and 2016. It gives a great perspective.
OH, and I loved the thoughts around Alice. She is utilized for her visions so often that it will be great to see her come into her own without them. If great is the right word, probably not, interesting probably works better.
Great update :)
| lcogle chapter 4 . 4/7/2009
Hey Em, wasn't that a little quick? I mean weren't they up there only 5 minutes?
Bella gone. Did she move to Jacksonville? Is that what he meant by losing her. Damn that would be the other side of the county. Not someplace to drive quickly.
I'm curious about the Pack and whether they're still around.
| LindyP chapter 4 . 4/7/2009
This story is really, really good! I wonder how they are going to get animal blood if all the animals are gone from their forest? And it is KILLING me that Edward is so sad. Looking forward to your next post!
| b3j02 chapter 4 . 4/7/2009
Good chapter! I can't wait to see what happens next! Have a good holiday!
| michellephants chapter 4 . 4/7/2009
You do a fantastic job with comic relief; each chapter I love Emmett more and more, and actually, I really really liked Rosalie's couple lines! She's so true to her character, which makes it strange that I would like her, but nonetheless, I find myself looking forward to her lines.
Edward's internal monologue is also an interesting mix of funny and painful. I never imagine Edward thinking things like "on the fritz," and yet when he does, they work brilliantly.
I wonder where Bella went? I'd guess Phoenix, but I guess you could always have her institutionalized for being catatonic ;).
I wonder if she's in Phoenix and that's Edward's next stop. Like just searchin' the world for his Bella before everything goes to shit.
I'm.. ranting. As per usual. So, good chapter! I enjoyed this one a lot :)
| Debussy-This chapter 4 . 4/7/2009
OCD. I love it. Really.
Actually, I'm suprised each time I read an update how *much* I like it.
Really. More. I need it.
| cesy1111 chapter 4 . 4/7/2009
can't wait for more
| Sheeijan chapter 4 . 4/7/2009
It's amazing how much pain you're able to convey with Edward in this new world. And his environment seems to match his emotional state, too. I wonder if he thinks that this move back to their old house is the beginning of the end for him? That from here the family will be relatively settled enough for him to move forward with his plans?
This new world is just so awful, I can't even imagine trying to survive in it. Luckily the vampires do have an edge, but trying to live out the centuries it will take to move past this... it exhausts me just trying to imagine it.
Thanks for the update! Your story has me so intrigued.
| bab1067 chapter 4 . 4/7/2009
So, where the hell did Bella go? God the torture Edward is putting himself through. Emmett is right, eternity is to long to hold that guilt. Edward truly is in his own hell. Hopefully he will find her...