|Reviews for Giving Birth|
| Bee chapter 1 . 4/26/2010
not bad, except just because a baby has it's ambelicle chord wrapped around it's neck doesn't mean it dies. Sometimes it may happen, it's usually nothing, though, or, the most common thing to happen is cerebral palsy. Just a note for the future...
| Becky.xo chapter 1 . 4/9/2009
Aw poor Jenny what a silly boy (Nate)
I look forward to seeing where you go with the story
| ChuckBass chapter 1 . 3/27/2009
Its Soo Short But It was Great,
It was so sad I felt so sorry for Jenny
And Nate 1 word Idoit it should of been his fault more like
he was the one who knocked her up.
| twin who likes to travel chapter 1 . 3/27/2009
I totally agree with enunciate.
| enunciiate chapter 1 . 3/26/2009
I love the idea, but I have a question.
Wouldn't Nate have known that Jenny was pregnant?
I mean, it's not something you can hide.
He wouldn't have guessed the baby was his only when her water broke in art class.
The concept of the story was great though! I hope you will continued the story (although I know you have it as a one-shot).
I just wanted to mention that when you write dialogue, the proper format is usually:
"What do you mean?" he asked.
"I gotta go. I can't stay here any longer," he told her quickly...
You use a comma at the end unless it happens to be a question or exclamation.
Just thought I'd let you know. )
It would also be smoother if you fixed some spelling mistakes.
But I really love the story, so please continue! D
| TheKRose chapter 1 . 3/26/2009
what. poor jenny. she should punch him in his face... keep going it is really good...