|Reviews for Far Away|
| Mary WoT Freak chapter 1 . 2/24/2011
nice ) I like it
| rara999 chapter 1 . 11/21/2009
A note on song-fics: The formatting could be better - it's probably best to italicise the writing, and to centre it. Line breaks which look like this "_" are not necessary.
You needed a couple more commas in your dialogue, and you also had some other grammar issues. We suggest a beta.
We appreciate the pathos of this story - and it was a scene which was realistically portrayed, so well done!
However, it's hard for us to envisage the two protagonists as Harry and Draco because we have not seen their past (e.g. the start of their relationship).
It is then hard for us to mesh what we know of Harry and Draco (Draco cowardly, snobbish, hates Harry, proud and a little bit evil, Harry brave, nice, awkward and hates Draco) with this fic, and so we recommend writing another chapter as a prequel.
That said, you have made conscious reference to the text, which is always appreciated as it adds realism.