|Reviews for Assassin's Blood|
| thebeezekneeze chapter 10 . 12/28/2013
AGHHHH THEYRE GETTING CLOSER AND THEN THAT ENDING OMGERD I LURRRRVE DIS
| The Azure Heart chapter 10 . 2/9/2013
Here is mine! Review soon! I really like this!
| The Azure Heart chapter 1 . 1/30/2013
I'll give this a chance!
| WhiteHero chapter 5 . 1/25/2013
Tidus is very well-portrayed, good work!
| WhiteHero chapter 3 . 1/25/2013
*Scary voice* Intriguing...
| WhiteHero chapter 1 . 1/15/2013
| Austare chapter 1 . 12/20/2012
Well this was definitely an interesting chapter/prologue. I'll be quite honest; you changed quite a few things with regards to the canon plot, which, in my opinion, is a breath of fresh air! Having Jecht actually die in front of Tidus instead of simply disappearing offers plenty of story possibilities, a fascinating liberty to have!
Just one thing though, it may be so obvious that it'd be stupid of me to ask, but is Yuna's world and Tidus's world one? Since he's being sent to Besaid, though no one really knows what it is, has Sin not destroyed Tidus's Zanarkand? Sorry if this is a loaded question ...
Anyways, to give some commendations and critiques.
Way to make the Final Fantasy X world yours! I definitely enjoy it when people come up with something super creative, which you have from what I've seen thus far, instead of repeating in words how the game played out.
You portray a slightly more serious Tidus, which I can appreciate.
I'd love to see more character depth and other things. It's a story, so do take your time to fully flesh out your characters and paint us the environment. Though I'll assume that everyone who's reading this has or is playing through the game, it's still fun to see the writer's prospective on what Zarnarkand, Besaid, or any of the locations look like.
After you've finished writing your chapter put it aside and go do something else. After a couple of hours - heck, even a day - come back and review it carefully. There were some phrases here and there that sounded minutely awkward to me and some spots contained blatant spelling mistakes that may distract readers from the story.
Use vivid words. Yes indeed use them! I think if you went back through this chapter, I bet you could find a sentence and say, "Oh wow! Look here you! I can write you like this instead of this! ... Much better!"
I suppose what I was trying to say there was use words that can appeal to our senses as readers. I promise you that it'll make your story much more captivating! :)
To sum everything up, you've got a story that I'll definitely follow! Because I haven't read the other chapters yet, others may have already pointed out what I suggested. If so, just keep writing with those things in mind, and you'll have one heck of a story!
Looking forward to what other things you have in store!
| yunabesaid chapter 10 . 12/16/2012
What?! No! That can't be the end! Yes, nice on the fluff, and it wasn't too much or overly sudden, either. Good idea with the drink. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
| Capell chapter 10 . 12/16/2012
Wonder what Braska is trying to tell Tidus? Great job with the fighting scenes, I love it! Hope you post again soon!
| Gambit Hawk chapter 10 . 12/15/2012
Going along nicely. Glad you're not trying to rush the romantic aspect of the story. And great cliffhanger. Hope you post the next chapter soon.
| yunabesaid chapter 9 . 12/1/2012
Hey! Sorry it so long for me to get to reviewing, I've just been intensely busy. This chapter was interesting, suspenseful, and overall a good chapter. I understand that romance in stories has to take time to develop, but I'd like some T/Y fluff...please?
You are a good writer, and I know even though people aren't reviewing, they *are* enjoying the fruits of your labor, they are just being scrooges.
See ya next time!
| InsaneFFXPlayer chapter 8 . 11/4/2012
Can't wait to read the next chp! XD Amazing job!
| TheBoyFromTheManga chapter 8 . 10/23/2012
Really enjoying your story, and really hope it will be continued! :D
| SexyV chapter 2 . 8/19/2012
Huhuhu I really wish that you would update Anytime Soon! Ive been Reading ALL the CHAPTERZ 3 times Already T_T. Pleeeeease UPDATE SOON! Im Begging you
| Sexy Virus chapter 8 . 4/6/2012
Thanks for the UPDATE :). Please UPDATE MORE SOONER! I will be glad to Read it. I love Ur story so far! I LOVE THER ROLES and Characteristics!