Reviews for Achieving Clarity |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I'm truly surprised that this is only 50k words long. It seemed to get through So much. Kudos for the vanishing cabinet trick, and keeping the battle interesting. You even managed to make the death impactful, but not a negative to the story; Very hard to do. The harem didn't seem too forced, and went the path of, just believe it mostly. Could be much worse. all in all, could use some polish, 8.5/10 |
![]() ![]() ![]() its alright, prob should have had harry stay angry for longer, doesn't do well to just say he is, but being happy a moment later doesn't show it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lemon is fine, but I dropped because Harry has made no effort to improve himself, even after being told he is being set up to die and has been a lax poor student. Humping like bunnies all day is fine, if his goal is death. |
![]() ![]() ![]() After 9th chapter I was thinking to drop your story, coz I thought that Luna are manipulating Harry to be defeated in the end. I’m glad that I didn’t. I like harem stories like this and think you’ve make an a great job on it. Harry stupid as well, girls best of the best but Hermione to much AU for me but it still works. Thanks you for sharing this with us |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice for an one shot. Greating, Nounours4 |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you for your story. I was always wondering if on can make a reasonable story where Voldemort is duped into some serious longlivety magic, powered by death eaters and their offspring, so that he lives for thousands or millions of years, but as a tree or a creature of the deep sea hot water vulcans with a much slowed down perception of time like one second for him is 100 years for humans. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() fantastic story, and I appreciate how you handled Narcissa. though it really says something that due to how she viewed her son she chose to believe the polyjuiced Neville was said son than Draco himself. kinda do hope for an eventual follow-up/epilogue. curious how the various professors (cause if all those first gen wixen left and and there is a state of emergency then I have to believe Hogwarts cannot truly hang on in any meaningful way) and other friends and family will proceed. With all the Commandoes swearing to serve Harry and all the kids they will likely soon have they alone basically need their own school, bring in DA members and there'll likely be more then enough for a new Potter Institute or what have you. (Plus they're four very intelligent and capable people, so they could easily form their own "Four Founders" deal. Also, will there still be a Teddy Lupin? will Filius and that other teacher (sorry I was listening to the text reader on the app, and I'm more visual than auditory for remembering names) that went to deal with the Werewolves end up together, because I felt like there could be a spark there? Will Ginny use her Basilisk money to found a new all-girl quidditch team wherever she moves too (and will it be named the "something" Basilisks)? Will Percy stick with that failing Ministry? will the Weasley family leave Britain? Will Parvati avoid a similar fate to the one Padma talked about was planned for her? Will Hagrid get a job at the Romanian Dragon Preserve if he leaves Hogwarts/England? Lots of little questions build up if the whole society of Wizarding Britain is shown to be falling apart/into Diaspora. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very enjoyable indeed. |
![]() ![]() ![]() An excellent tale! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for sharing ! |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's a pity you killed Lavender, she's a good girl after all! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Really enjoyed reading this! Happy to have found it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good and most enjoyable wrap-up to this one. I daresay wizarding Britain will still take a good while to come to the obvious answer of the necessary reforms to persuade muggle-borns, and, likely, half-bloods too, to stay in Britain. |
![]() ![]() ![]() That appears ooc for Luna - then again fanfic is by definition AU. |