|Reviews for the love betwee the kidnapped and kidnapper|
| Secret chapter 1 . 7/8
You have potential, but the grammar made it so hard to read
| rachel chapter 1 . 6/9/2013
Yo you got to work on your spelling. How old are you ?if your over ten girl work on it, take my advice please. Bedsides that it was good especially the ending alright so keep up the good work.
| kidnap lover chapter 1 . 12/16/2012
this was not the best ive seen.
your story progresses too quickly. you ended up doing 8 different things in one sentence.
slow it down. provide the details and imagery your readers need to see the story you see.
| jazzberryjuice chapter 1 . 5/24/2009
I like your plot, but you talked to much about the girl being tied up. No offense, but it was almost like you wanted to be tied up YOURSELF. I've been through that phase when I was 8, don't worry. Also you sort of raced through the story. Everything happened so quickly! I was going to write a story like this and post it on here, but I thought better of it. I wonder if it would have turned out anything like that.
Overall, nice job! Hope you're not too offended. (see, I can criticize, but I don't even listen to my OWN criticism)