|Reviews for In the dead of the day|
| Little Lucy Lulu chapter 2 . 9/14/2010
I really like your story. I am a massive Inspector Rex fan and I love that this story actually revolves around Christian...He can get a bit neglected in the actual series.
I don't actually know what the 'Pretender' is (TV, book series? I'll have to find out) but I still really enjoyed the two chapters that you have posted.
I hope you finish it off!
| The Gandhara chapter 1 . 4/11/2009
It's a decent beginning, but I find your style a bit dry. Most of what you wrote were bare facts, which isn't bad per se, but made me feel as if I was reading a report rather than a story.
The last paragraph was a bit overdone. It's good that instead of simply writing 'Christian was distracted' you wanted to give it a bit more flourish, but you went to the opposite extreme and made it too long. It overshadowed the main point of the paragraph, which was his death rather than him being distracted.
Lastly, don't get discouraged if the story doesn't get many readers. Neither of the two series is a big hit in fanfiction.