Reviews for To Fly in His Arms
FreekyDisaster18 chapter 2 . 5/2/2009
Awwh, yay. That's the happy ending we wanted for Pierre :) Beautifully written!
scribblemyname chapter 2 . 4/12/2009
Like the new chapter! Normally I'm not much for potential mush, but this was really sweet anyway. I didn't have to half-close my eyes with a cringe and skip any spots (which I've been known to do). It was perfect. Keep it up!

Minor edits:

1st paragraph: You have really done a well job.

Should be "You have really done a good job."

2nd paragraph: “Well, you did pay me well for doing a well job!”

same word

Giving the necklace: “I was hers”

should be either "I was hers." or "It was hers."

Punctuation around quotes involves a comma separating the he/she said from the quotation. If the tag follows the quote, then it should be lower case. Examples:

“Do you miss her?” she asked in a low, sympathetic voice.

“Well, you did pay me well for doing a well job!” She laughed to ease the tension.

For the most part you did it right, but it got a little spotty in places, especially ending untagged quotes with periods.
scribblemyname chapter 1 . 4/7/2009
I like this piece a lot. It's sweet and interesting. But I thought she DID know dancing. I thought she was an instructor. I don't know. I could be way off on that. I liked this a lot. Very nice little journey into her head.