|Reviews for International magic|
| steffon22 chapter 27 . 4/6
Talk about a cliff hanger but I'm loving this
| steffon22 chapter 11 . 4/6
I love those so much and love that Ron is doing well with Japanese. Also hope there will be more development with Harry, Ako and Makie..like them attempt to teach him Japanese
| Bob nox chapter 1 . 12/26/2016
2016 GET THIS FUCKING STORY UPDATED
| Mernom chapter 26 . 7/23/2016
Don't tell me... The headmaster wants to marry Harry to Konoka?
| Mernom chapter 25 . 7/22/2016
Did Akira grab Harry's wand when she extracted him? Also, great Omake.
| Mernom chapter 20 . 7/22/2016
This was rather funny... Cue Ron headshotting Voldemort with a pen.
| Mernom chapter 12 . 7/21/2016
I see. Those 2 discovered magic by becoming slaves, so Making this happened is a nice canon continuity nod.
| Mernom chapter 11 . 7/21/2016
Ron is the furthest ahead on the new language front... And ironically he's usually the one who is described the most close headed one, the type who wouldn't bother learning a foreign language. I find this quite delicious.
| Mernom chapter 7 . 7/21/2016
Calling... OK, I got nothing. Best guess is Jiraya.
| Mernom chapter 1 . 7/21/2016
Sounds good so far... Allow me to nitpick for a moment, IIRC muggleborns have a professor delivering their school letter, a different guide them to the magic side of England. And McGonagall is apparently the one who deals with it... So she should already be familiar with the Grangers.
| ramunes chapter 27 . 12/1/2015
Please continue the story really in joyed it
| xion930 chapter 27 . 11/1/2015
good story i hope it will continue
| Guest chapter 13 . 9/13/2015
Is there a point to this fic, as in are were ever going to an actual story? Is something ever going to happen or is this just endless chapters of filler? Seriously, except for the very start where they left the UK and then arrived in Japan, almost nothing has happened. Sorry but 10 out of the first 13 chapters being filler is too much for me. The idea was interesting and if you had ever gotten around to telling a story or an actual plot it might have been enjoyable. It's not bad but it doesn't go anywhere. Bye.
| Jesternz chapter 27 . 8/15/2015
International Magic by Zephyrus Anemnoi Fiction
Rating: 7.5 out of 10
Pros: First of all, this is an excellent concept for a story! I really enjoy the idea of Harry and company going to Japan to escape the 5th year debacle. I also, honestly enjoy how Ron Weasley is portrayed in this story. Yes, he gets OOC, but he is given a reason to get OOC. And this particular Ron is actually one of the better Ron Weasleys I have read. Furthermore, I enjoy how the author attempts to blend the two worlds together to create a cohesive universe.
Cons: Mechanically, this story has some flaws. While far from illiterate, there are enough issues to trip you up as you read it. Of particular note seems to be the author’s tendency to confuse homophones: “Out of site” instead of “Out of sight”. Continuing on the technical issues, , the author does have some problems with Japanese honorifics. Specifically, he has Hermione refer to Setsuna as –sempai repeatedly when referencing lessons that Setsuna is teaching her about Kendo (In the Shimmieryu school nonetheless). Mokoto would have a fit! The honorific –sempai is used for someone who has seniority over you, and its counterpart is –kohei. For example, Fred and George Weasley would be Weasley-sempai to Harry’s Potter-kohei. The honorific that the author is looking for is actually –sensei (unless it was Ku teaching her martial art, then it is –sifu). The –sensei honorific is used for someone who is educated (like a doctor) or someone who is educating you (like a teacher or martial arts instructor). The honorific –sifu is actually the Chinese equivalent. Lastly there is the whole boya thing. I know Evangeline A.K. McDowell has a tendency to call him boya, but Asuna actually call Negi ‘Negi-bozu’ instead of ‘Negi-baka’. Baka, as any good anime fan knows means ‘idiot/fool’ and is generally considered extremely rude. The –bozu honorific means ‘little boy’. I know that the honorifics can be confusing , and I lived in Japan for 3 years!
Another major issue for me is that the author has a tendency to get distracted from the story he is writing and ends up wandering into the unnecessary. Every chapter is bracketed by Authors Notes. In this case I would ask that if you have something to put into Author Notes, either do it at the beginning of the chapter or at the end. Doing both comes off as self-promoting. The author also has a tendency to get distracted IN the story itself. For one thing, the author focuses on things at the oddest times. Why do we have so much information on American Dust Bunnies? Or why did you need to tell me that an American magical suit-thingy was $200 (and I assume you meant USD? Given that none of the characters in that scene are familiar with USD?) I also think he is playing a game with the readers by dropping references to some of his favorite things in the story to be picked up on. At best, like when he does the Freakazoid reference, it is kind of annoying but short enough you can push past it. At worst, when he plugs his friend’s webcomic , it actually completely derails the chapter. While I appreciate the humor he is trying to bring about, it takes a good story and makes it way too cracky. This story is over 67k words, and I honestly feel like way too much of it is unnecessary. The author even admits that he has written a couple of ‘filler’ chapters.
Speaking of the filler chapters, the author includes two of them for character development. One of them, the chapter dedicated to Ron Weasley is actually pretty important to the story. I understand and appreciate that the chapter was necessary for Ron to fill into the role the author wants him in and I am really ok with that! Ron needed that growth, and I loved reading it. What I didn’t love was the filler chapters beforehand, nor the other character development chapter. They weren’t needed because they do nothing for the story. Instead of giving us filler chapters, why didn’t the author gives us maybe some P.O.V vignettes for the principle characters to help develop them more. Instead it feels like the author is expecting every reader to have an in-depth knowledge of Negima, Negima?!, both animes and a passing knowledge of Harry Potter.
I guess that leads to my biggest complaint about this crossover: It’s not a crossover. It is Negima story with some Harry Potter cameos. You will go chapters in this story with only a reference to ANY of the Harry Potter characters. When they Harry Potter characters DO show up, they are treated unevenly. Ron, he gets developed. His ‘Not learning ninja’ training would be something I actually would WANT in a ‘filler’ chapter, as it shows the character growing and stepping out of his normal shell and into the environment that he has found himself in. Hermoine learning kendo is random, but cool I guess. Harry, though, is almost a static figure. Here in the South we would say Harry, in this story, is ‘as useless as tits on a boar hog.’ In 27 chapters, he only features in 3. Furthermore, in one of his three appearances, he gets molly whopped! By Chapter 27, I have honestly stopped caring about the Hogwarts Trio in this story. When Harry does show up and take over in Chapter 27, it is a shock.
Overall: This is a good story with some pretty big flaws for me. I would love to see more of the story, but as it hasn’t been updated in almost a year, I am not holding out hope for a new chapter. Sad, as this tale has a LOT of potential.
| Ashmole chapter 3 . 7/30/2015
I am pretty sure that Harry would side with Hermione at some point because Ron can really be an Abrasive A$$