|Reviews for Over The Top: Terror on Gay Street|
| Zikare chapter 5 . 9/26/2010
WHy did they not just drive away in the car at the beginning of this chapter? They could be having gay sex by now...
That's a gay car, we could catch AIDS!" -LOL, ROFLMDEO
And I think Jasper would be better in a fight than Edward...Eddy should have been the one squeling and Jasper fighting...
| Zikare chapter 4 . 9/26/2010
Wait, we're four chapters in and still no lemons? This is wrong...very wrong. Poor Jasper probably had blueball by now! And vietimeise fighters? How is that going to lead to lemons? I think you need to intersperse the fighting with lemons...or at least something a little lighter
| Zikare chapter 3 . 9/26/2010
All the religious stuff in this chapter was making my head hurt...
| Zikare chapter 2 . 9/26/2010
They just had to get saved before the rape? Come on now man, you could have at least waited until the middle of it to save them!
| Zikare chapter 1 . 9/18/2010
Wow, that was quite a twist...
It was also quite funny, and I like the gore, but are Jasper and Edward ever going to get around to having lemons?
| teambellaedward chapter 2 . 7/28/2010
that was cool :)
| teambellaedward chapter 1 . 7/28/2010
That was a great first chapter :)
| Shadows' Nightmare chapter 11 . 6/18/2010
lol If my fanfics include too much talking, then yours have LOTS of violence. XD
I can't say I like rape for comedy, but I LOVED the whole long, boring story Orcelot had Edward sit through before the actual action. I love how his minions are all rolling their eyes, the one Liquid Snake is getting out beer nuts and listening intently, Edward would almost rather the guy just get it over with than listen any longer, and, as Anderson says: "Somebodey kill meh now."
That. Cracked. Me. Up! XD
And I love all the weird and random humor that springs out of nowhere; like Vamp coming up and explaining that he was trapped under an exploded church for several days and survived on his family's blood. "But the reason they call me vamp is that I'm a bisexual."
Okay. . . XD
I love how Peter's gain comes to the rescue, though, and the cameo appearance of creepy Twilight children Jane and Alec, and the amergence of Bella Swan, and how she comes off as a big damn hero. One of the best partss, however, was the very end when she found the soldiers pointing guns at her, and her assuring "I didn't do it."
I can't wait to see what happens next; although, if I were Edward and or Jasper, I'd just be so fed up by this time. It's fun to read a new chapter every several weeks, but if all of this happened in one night, I'd just be like, "Whatever, I don't even care anymore; wake me when it's over."
Of course, I'd probably be dead for it, but damn! This is the night from Hell for them! Can't wait to see how it ends! :D
| Lion in the Land chapter 11 . 6/15/2010
"Nobody was going to interrupt one of his long as hell speeches." Hehe, I love that element to Ocelot. He's so just icky and despicable, but then you give him something like that that makes him seem more human.
I think icky is a good word to describe the first part of this chapter, which is what I think you were going for so it's a compliment...even that part wasn't my bowl of goulash. This entire chapter did have a surreal, video-gameish feel to it, so I very much appreciated the overt reference with the red and blue buttons. That made me laugh and also helped pull me out of the disturbing mire by thinking of it on a more manufactured plane.
"He seemed kind of clingy and annoying." Pretty good, pretty good, even if it was about Jazzpah.
I do not believe that I've ever actually said this before, but I feel it's the only comment I can make after that Batman cameo: Booty, WTF? O_o I sincerely want to know every thought that went through your head with that one.
Giving Jane and Alec video game character personae was genius. Especially Jane's alternative torture techniques.
I need a refresher on Bad News Anthony - how was he able to shrug off the bullet?
Stoner Bella - now there’s a part Kristin Stewart could play perfectly, no acting required.
Well, we've got the bad guys on the run, but...well, we'll see what NATO has in store for us. You never know with those guys.
P.S. Standard section breaks no longer seem to be working in the Fanfiction software or whatever. It seems like there was at least one place where you'd intended one, so I'm just letting you know that it was removed. The only think I've found that works is periods separated by spaces.
| shallowswan chapter 11 . 6/15/2010
Oh you just start this all off epic with that first line, "putting it poetically, Edward's life was a piece of shit." Thats just writing genius right there. Your descriptions are quite wonderful in this chapter, your compairasions and detail really set up the scene in hyper vividness. I must say I laughed my ass off when Ocelot went to tossle Edwards hair, only the find that he was missing his arm. Served him quite right! That followed by "If anyone has to go to the bathroom, go now."
Ohhh thank you for having Batman flip everyone off! That has to be a crowning moment in Batman history. And the way Vamp kept a portable sex kit at his crotch, I can't recall, or havn't seen what Vamp is from from but that kink rack just same damn awesome writing. His tormemting was very cringe worthy as well. Over all just freaking awesome scene. But most of all I think my favorite part was the way you potrayed Alex and Jane as psycho drug/torture artists. That the most perfect complement to their orginal characters. I wasn't sure which was more awesome, Jane torturing Edward by excessive ball squeezing, or Alec with his syrgine armored suit. And then you finish it all up by bring in Bella as a gun wielding stoner. You really gave this chapter all you've got...it's a shame I don't know more of the Metal Gear characters, but I enjoy it all the same. Keep this up Master, your matchless.
| sleepsheep chapter 11 . 6/15/2010
As usual, nothing ever gets boring in this story, even after 11 chapters! I'm starting to wonder how much pain and damage every character can take before they finally die.. haha! Hopefully Edward and Jasper can make it out somewhat okay in the end though! I liked the Batman slowly raising his hand thing XD And where did he even come from?
The Vamp guy seemed quite scary.. and his history didn't sound very pleasant. But that's not why they call him Vamp, hahhaha! And thanks for the mention but I'm certainly not a talented writer ;) XD
| blacksand1 chapter 11 . 6/14/2010
Okay, let me be the first to say that THAT. KICKED. ASS! I mean, even more ass than the other chapters! This story has gone completely insane, and I am lovin' it. Batman's random appearance was hilariously random (a big lipped alligator moment, to be precise XDD), and the minute you mentioned Liquid and Mantis there I all but squealed like a fangirl. Though I winced when I saw how Liquid went down; I don't think Sniper Wolf's going to be happy about what they did to her boyfriend XDD I don't know how you can go any farther off the deep end than you already have, but I have a feeling you'll be able to. Out-fucking-standing my friend, out-fucking-standing.
*spazzes that she was mentioned at the very end*
| shallowswan chapter 10 . 3/24/2010
Master how do you do it? You always manage to post the most wonderful, rollover and die laughing chapters right when I need them! :D I think you've got an extra spidey sense for when to post your epic additions to your stories.
First of all...the Rammstein scene...it was epic on so many diffrent levals that I just can't mentioned everything that was so right about it! :D Was it just me, or was the whole thing suppososed to be resemblant to the scene in Bloodlust with the Marcus Brothers? There weapons where all beyond brillant...hell I can so see it, should the world come to an end and be filled with all the nasty monster of fiction, Rammstein would insantly become the biggest and baddest gang of monster hunters! And great work on the German, I must be better at it than I think becuse I got every other word they where saying.
As always your potryal of Anderson is matchless...he's so utterly evil and sadistic in this, just the way I see him in Hellsing. It's a amazinfg really, and I enjoy Edward and Jasper in this very much becuse it's so refreshing to see them helpless, instead of instantly kicking everyone ass, end of story. I am partically fond of Jasper in this story for some reason, and sympathise with him much more than I ever did Twilight. I almost feel like he's a bit deeper than he ever was in Twilight...I guess everyone trying to kick your ass every five minutes will do that to a guy.
I don't feel I have to say that the whole scene at the pasta table was priceless. :D Classic, and matchless humor that I can only find in one of your stories. The down to Earth, and wonderfully profane way you write characters is one of many things that keeps me hooked to everything you ever write. :)
Finally double kudos on Anderson, the decription you gave him at the end with his empty, souless eyes...it was chilling! :D It gave him a wonderful Alucard type feel, which is wonderful really, becuse they make for such good bitter enemies. I feel especally proud of this version of Edward every time he takes a stand for Jasper, like at the end. Man...for a second there I thought that Jasper really was going to be thrown into the wood chipper, thank Gott in Himmel for Edward! And finally Ocelot's last line with the greased chamber was killer! Great way to end another amazing chapter, I am dying to see what else you have planned for this one! :D
| Lion in the Land chapter 10 . 3/24/2010
I have ALWAYS wanted to know how to say "I hurt my balls" in German! This story is educational as well as entertaining. And don't think "Er ist klemmt!" isn't going to come in handy, too.
Booty, this is how you can know with certainty that you have a gift: I don't like action. I put up with it on occasion if it's intermixed with a meaty plot, but this story is 100% action-I think even you'll admit there's not a whole lot of plot going on here-and yet...and yet...I can't get enough! Every chapter is just as enthralling as the last, and I don't have the least inclination to skim, which is my usual modus operandi when it comes to action scenes. So that, my boy, is why we need to get Tarantino on the phone and put this thing on the big screen. Seriously.
What specifically did I like? I'm glad you asked. :) Firstly, Rammstein. Why was I thinking it was a bus load of German students from a high school band touring America when you said "German Band"? I dunno, but that moment of nerdiness made for an excellent surprise when you revealed who it actually was! And fighting with their instruments/weapons was hilarious. Love the bits of Rammstein trivia, like the guy being a licenced pyrotechnitian. I'm just going to assume that he pee'd all over everyone when the fight finished.
The pasta table, as you know, I enjoyed terrifically. Helen is a stitch, and the dynamic between Sweet and Daddy Kopayanis was precious-it naturally has me wondering how much of that scene is based on the reality of life in a Greek family... Ah, and don't let me forget to mention the Kenyan and the donuts-just so marvelously weird and quirky.
But I think Anderson is again your crowning glory. You give the massive man's misguided righteousness so much depth. "a cloud of zealotry that could choke infants" - It's this kind of creative and vivid description that sets you apart and above in the writing community. I remember writing "vivid" in an early review of your work, and that is something that has stayed consistent throughout. Do you even try? Or do these things just come to you? I swear, I would have to sit and think for about half an hour to come up with a phrase like that.
Anyhow, back to Anderson. That wood chipper scene was intense, from him turning down the dial so Jasper could hear every word to "The other end of the chipper spat out a few strips of leather." You did an excellent job with suspense. With Edward at the tree, too. And then you end it all with "But you'd know all about well greased chambers, wouldn't you Edward?" Brilliant. :D
| Shadows' Nightmare chapter 10 . 3/23/2010
O.O . . . This has got to be . . . the best Gay Street chapter EVER! I'm serious; this was so well-writen. It has just the right combination of action, humor, dialogue, and plot advancement; you've REALLY outdone yourself this time.
I loved the Rammstein encounter with The Body. "Ich hat mein hoden gekranken.' Till ignored his comrade's injured balls for the time being." Those made me laugh out loud! XD I love how their weapons run parallel with their music specialties. (A drumstick crossbow, an electrical keyboard, sharp guitars, etc.) I think it's my favorite battle scene. XD
I loved the whole encounter at the Pasta Table, too. I love how she was blissfully unaware of the war going on around her until her husband was hit, to which she lovingly responded "Fuck you, I'm serving pasta here!" only to be hit by a drumstick bolt and go down "like a harpooned whale." XD Peter and his boys are always hilarious, I need not repeat.
Edward and Jasper's fight against Anderson was the most suspenseful battle I’ve ever read from you. I’m serious, I was literally sitting at the edge of my seat, I was so worried. The wood-chipper scene frightened me so much that I literally forgot to breathe.
You also captured the essence of Anderson’s insanity beautifully. “Behind those green eyes, Jasper could see a soul that was completely empty. The devil's greatest trick was not to make humanity believe that he did not exist, it was to put on the markings of God and call himself holy.” This was so wonderfully written, you deserve what the TV Tropes call a “Crowning Moment of Awesome.” Truly, I was blown away.
I was so worried when Jasper nearly got thrown in the wood-chitter, my foot turned numb just reading it. Edward’s heroic exploit did not go unnoticed, but just when he nearly gets killed by Anderson, Revolver Ocelot steps in! DX
This was incredible Master of the Boot, please update soon.