|Reviews for Homecoming|
| Lexarius chapter 10 . 2/9
Go on, please.
| Lexarius chapter 1 . 2/9
Very interesting point of view.
| Guest chapter 10 . 12/18/2015
| Demon Lord Cashmere Snow chapter 10 . 5/27/2014
Give us more, for we find ourselves bereft of good reading. On behalf of all the others, I do humbly request thee to continue.
| Primus2021 chapter 4 . 5/14/2013
The 10th Doctor, David Tennant said that word ALOT!
| Primus2021 chapter 1 . 5/14/2013
I like this version of this Bible tale my self.
I thunk it's Shinji.
| MS60Cutter chapter 10 . 12/23/2012
I am become death, the destroyer of worlds...
This chapter has evoked...emotion. Very, very good. There is anger, then sadness.
Good luck on your job hunt, though this is a year or more in the past. I hope you are doing well, even if I have to suffer for it.
| MS60Cutter chapter 8 . 12/23/2012
So far, this is captivating.
Structure and grammar are polished and flow seamlessly, which provides fewer distractions to enjoy the overall effect. And your use of Fuyutsuki as a foil sparkles. And that doesn't even mention the anticipation of seeing Gendo Rokubungi challenging the oldest of manipulators. Perhaps I am reading too much into this. It isn't, however, too late to mention that this story idea was inspired and you have done it proud to this point.
Two more chapters and I'll have reached the last one available.
| MS60Cutter chapter 5 . 12/23/2012
One thing that I have found, in regards to AU Shinji, is the abruptness transition during the initial stages of his arrival. Two or three stories have handled this well but, normally, his acceptance seems a trifle forced. Sometimes the reason for this becomes apparent in later chapters. Perhaps it will be in this case.
I am enjoying Doctor, although his dialogue, as it floats through my skull, is done with a British accent.
I am posting this at the end of this chapter which I have read for the first time today, the day before the day before Christmas, as an experiment. My views on stories is very subjective. If I don't like a Character then I generally drop the story. So far, so good. This Shinji is a little more morally ambiguous than others, or he simply has differing views on personal property, but he has not yet deviated from the one thing that defines, to me, Shinji. He has not, yet, been shown to be unkind. Because kindness defines Shinji. An unkind Shinji has sacrificed the one thing that makes him attractive.
I am finished rambling. This is the second of your stories that has captured my interest. The last chapter of both was done in 2011 and it is now at the end of 2012, which did not, despite certain auguries from central America, mark the end of western civilization. I don't hold out much hope of seeing a conclusion to these, but hope springs eternal. C'mon, thrill me.
| MS60Cutter chapter 3 . 12/23/2012
And now, we begin.
Good start. I like it. The dialogue is crisp and flows like dialogue should. Too many times dialogue in a fanfic is simple exposition. My old GM was like that. We'd start to tell him what our characters were saying and to whom and he would hold up his hand and say, "say it in character." We would be forced to view ourselves and the npcs in three dimensions rather than two.
You...three dimensional. Most definitely, three dimensional.
As the optimist said, "all right, so far."
| MS60Cutter chapter 2 . 12/23/2012
What an engaging fellow.
However, if you have listened to the Stones then you know that they offer no Sympathy for the Devil. If anything, he sounds like he's bragging.
Forgive me, please, I have only just found this site and began to explore. Many gems, now defunct, I have found, and am still finding. This, I believe, could be one of them. And you're only now getting through with the previews. Sweet.
Also, I cannot believe that your use of the honorifics Doctor and Master are inadvertent.
| Wing Zero Alchemist chapter 10 . 10/23/2012
Update, or you wil be EXTERMINATED! EXTERMINATE! EXTERMINATE! EXTERMINATE!
| Rose1948 chapter 10 . 11/27/2011
Weirdly awesome? Awesomely weird? Either way, I like this! I like this a LOT! Please continue as soon as you can. I understand that real life comes first. ::chuckles:: So, whenever you can spare a minute or three...
| Rose1948 chapter 1 . 11/27/2011
Quite an interesting beginning. ::nods:: I like.
| lazyguy90 chapter 10 . 9/26/2011
Fascinating. I look forward to the next update. Keep at it.