|Reviews for My Life Without You|
| elizabeth bennette chapter 30 . 8/28/2011
great plot- is it someone already in the story?
| Robpattzlover1 chapter 37 . 6/20/2011
OMG that story was awesome. Is there going to be a sequel.
| KJHN chapter 20 . 6/12/2011
Well another thing y'all do well? The dirty talk. The smutty lyricism. Sexy as all sin. The irrational, confusing shifts and mood swings are exhausting. But when they're naked and grinding and sweaty and wanting...the way they talk to each other? Not like two virgins one would expect. As insecure as they are with their burgeoning relationship and feelings, they are solid in their verbal porn. Niiiiiice.
| KJHN chapter 15 . 6/12/2011
Hi there. I found about your story on ADF as I was looking at the suggestions for a fic featuring a love-hate relationship between E and B. I'm just now reviewing because I flew through the earlier chaps seeking redemption. Here's the thing: you gals write some golden MOMENTS. The pacing and the plot and the humor are pretty spot on and enjoyable. I was surprised and of course saddened when we learned how it was that Bella and Edward were thrown together (no cliched car crashes). Also, I was impressed with the levels of introspection that they both had...Sporadically. MOMENTS.
Te rest of the time, I'm thrown by events or ideas that leave me uncomfortable or puzzled and not exactly eager to move on. I've a few observations for construction of future stories. At times I felt the grief that Bella was experiencing was simply forgotten and not realistically handled (I'm a psychotherapist by trade so I'm aware of how these crucial moments are written, but I'm aware not to take things too seriously), and Edward's selfishness and erratic mood swings REALLY became distracting more than engaging. Due to his age?
Bella did grieve and rage ...for one afternoon...and her thoughts were impressively deep, but this 17 year old girl just witnessed an extreme trauma and lost her only family as a result of it and suddenly, it's not mentioned anymore?
I also don't see one positive factor in this arrangement. It is harmful and hurtful and more damaging to EVERYONE for them to pretend to hate each other and sneak around. I am not exactly sure why nor convinced why Bella wants this to happen nor why Edward agrees. Again, their immaturity? Bella is immature in her creation of the plan and suddenly Edward is the more sympathetic character. Maybe that was your goal-to create compassion for Edward. But the way these two are so callous and erratic with their feelings for each other and unwillingness to be honest with people who love them (including each other) is just begging for destruction, and an unsatisfactory story conclusion. I say this because I've read A LOT of FF. And I am in a fic discussion group with 30 women and I couldn't say that I'd recommend this story to them as satisfactory. Not at this point anyway. Maybe the next chapters and conclusion will persuade another result?
Lastly, I caution you in lightly throwing around the terms "cripple" and "retard" as often as you have, and to use them in joking manner. Both terms can be extremely offensive, especially to someone who has disabilities-which, in some ways, we ALL do (we all have shortcomings and challenges, right? Some are more permanent than others, and some can be overcome. Others cannot).
I plan to keep reading, because I try to finish every story I ever start, and also because like I've said, you have innovative ideas and moments of pure gold. I do like witnessing the evolution of these young kids in their thinking and maturity-though he's growing much more gracefully and sympathetically than she is at this point-and the dialogue and banter between them glimmer with wit. Having said all that, I thank you and applaud you for the courage to share your work, and I hope you continue to develop your creations.
| browneyedgirl122 chapter 37 . 5/29/2011
This story was AMAZING! I cried, I laughed, and I got angry. It was the best of both worlds. Great job!
| GoldEyedAngel chapter 37 . 5/6/2011
nice stry at the beginning i thought he fell out of love with bella and fell for some other chick and had already purposed to her. man, i have a wild imagination
| Andi 31 chapter 37 . 4/15/2011
Great storY I really enjoyed it
| MyNae chapter 16 . 3/13/2011
Great chapter! To be honest with you, I usually do not like to read stories of Bella and Edward in high school. I'm so glad that I'm reading this one though. High school crushes and first love, oh the good ole days. This story makes me smile!
| MyNae chapter 15 . 3/13/2011
This story has pulled me in. I don't really understand Bella's logic on keeping her and Edward's relationship a secret. The game that Bella is insisting they play with Mike and Tanya is dangerous and could potentially pull them apart. I hope not.
| Julie.Ann.777 chapter 1 . 3/7/2011
| Dazzled By Edward 205537 chapter 20 . 1/17/2011
awwwwwwwwwwwwww thats sooo sweet
| lovedavidbeckham chapter 37 . 1/15/2011
I just found this story yesterday and finished it and absolutely loved it from beginning to the end. That proposal was just so them
| Dazzled By Edward 205537 chapter 17 . 12/22/2010
AWWWW thats so cute. he should give her a promise ring!
| Dazzled By Edward 205537 chapter 16 . 12/22/2010
awwww thats so sweet. u gotta love edward 3 love the story good chappy
| Dazzled By Edward 205537 chapter 14 . 12/22/2010
good chapter love the story its really good!