Reviews for Phoenix Feathers
SuperSaiyanTeemo chapter 81 . 4/29/2012
Took me 2 days to read it but I'm done and all i can say is, are u going to come back to this? Hope you continue writing because they are great works of art. One advice i can give though is whenever you switch to another person's point of view, if you don't want to confuse your audience, can u say whose point of view it is? Other then that I have no complaints.
NanoCarp chapter 5 . 12/8/2011
I do believe that the phrase we are looking for in this situation is "Sh*t just hit the fan." :)
Bits chapter 81 . 9/25/2011
Dammit, I'm outta chapters to read... Which took me like a week since I just found out about this story recently (like a week ago?) I don't usually review often but I was like god dammit this story deserves it, you know? Now I'm mega stoked for more. Holy sweet Jesus this story Is genius, just gonna lay that on the table, also maybe you should make the point of view more clear... Sometimes I'm like "what the hell?" cause Tyrone is being held up against something by Karen and biting her leg at the same time or something weird like that... But anyway... 'til next chapter or whatever.

alkizor chapter 81 . 9/8/2011
first off great story but i was wondering if you could put whose p.o.v. it is in each time you change perpective because it is very confusing when reading the story
Silvermist464 chapter 25 . 8/8/2011
Alright, I've got to say I'm confused. If it's possible, and not too hard to do, could you tell me who all the characters are, I'm having problems knowing who's who...
Nalaiscool chapter 40 . 7/28/2011
As long as it continues to be archived... ALNM WILL NEVER DIE.

I continue to read it, it's that good.

Even if i have to buy the rights and put it in print...

I will keep it alive, even if nobody else will.

A little night music FTW. NO EXCEPTIONS.
Nalaiscool chapter 34 . 7/28/2011
"(That's good. I was afraid that Adian had put you in a comma.)"

A comma? o_0

This is a Comma... -,-

You are thinking of a COMA. Just one M.

Also, We are outta Tp, and Liquid Plumber.


...And the circuit breaker just got tripped...
Nalaiscool chapter 33 . 7/28/2011
Ryudo-kin: *Imagines Nanashi Chimera in a jester suit...*

Ryudo-kin chuckles.


but it'd be a nice jester, Like saying "hi" to random people on the street.


"Do you take me for a FOOL?"

...Yes, Yes I do.


Gesture is the word you are looking for. A Jester is also known as a Fool, or a Joker.
Nalaiscool chapter 30 . 7/28/2011
One typo, In the surfer bum dictionary...


not Dudet.



"He likes Pink!"

"He likes Blue!"

"He wants to be Cute!"

"He wants to be Pretty!"

"(I want to be Dead!)"


Is Enough to earn your "Epic Winsauce!" (tm)

Nalaiscool chapter 24 . 7/28/2011
You'll eat my Soles?...

*Ryudo-kin thinks about that*

(Images in head)

Nanashi Chimera: "Tastes like Feet..."

*Ryudo-kin watches him chew his shoes with amusement...*

*...And Mild disgust*

(Image fades away)

*Ryudo-kin Shudders*
Nalaiscool chapter 62 . 6/12/2011
*salutes the flag, as taps is played*

Rest in peace, Ursa...

*As taps ends, you see a single tear fall from my eyes*

You Will Be Missed...

(I never Knew Ursa, But my sentiments are shared. May she rest in peace.)
Nalaiscool chapter 61 . 6/12/2011
Note to Nanashi: You are out of Orange Juice, Breakfast Cereal,

Coffee, AA Batteries, and Fabric Softener as well.

You might want to pick up some more Paper towels as well, due to the "Tomato Sauce" incident we are almost out. I'll come up with the rent soon, don't worry.
Nalaiscool chapter 53 . 6/12/2011
Ryudo-kin: I Made him the announcer!

*Freckles Nanashi Begin throwing random objects at Ryudo-kin*
Nalaiscool chapter 50 . 6/12/2011
Manor: A mansion, spacious estate, or huge house.

Manner, definition 1: A way of bearing oneself, or acting.

Manner, Definition 2: A Social grace, or courtesy.

I hope this helps to correct your past and current spelling errors.
Nalaiscool chapter 45 . 6/12/2011

Also, "Bouels" is spelled "Bowels"

I've noted several Misspellings of the latter, in two of your Fics. If you are ever unclear as to what word to use, send me a note. I'll help ya out.
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