|Reviews for Wanted Dead or Alive|
| BadWolfAt221B chapter 2 . 2/13/2013
| HANNAH chapter 5 . 10/25/2012
LLLLOOOOVVVVVVVEEEEEDDDDDDDD DD IT
| The Red Teardrop chapter 5 . 10/10/2012
| TinyBlackcurrant chapter 8 . 10/9/2012
Nicely done. Bah, I like too much detail.
Details are fun.
I liked how Cedric was alive, though, as… confused as I was by it at first. And Cho seemed friendlier than she did in the books, which was a nice change.
Only thing I would say is that McGonagall's speech seemed a tiny bit off in some scenes.
Instead of kids, try students.
Update soon :)
| James018 chapter 8 . 10/9/2012
Can't review while logged in because you can only review once per chapter... annoying rule :/
Anyway, great chapter! I liked the extra description, though you didn't have to do it, I think it did make the story a lot fuller. Way to solve the Floo problem, by the way! :) And Cedric's going to Forks, is he? Can't wait to see that!
| NomNomNom529 chapter 7 . 10/7/2012
Great fanfiction! Update soon!
| James018 chapter 8 . 10/5/2012
While we're on the subject of Floo Powder, really they shouldn't be able to use the Cullens' fireplace at all. As we saw with the Dursleys' in book four, you actually have to have the fireplace connected to the Floo Network to use it, and I doubt the Cullens' place is connected. (Heck, we don't know if America even has a Floo Network.) But hey, this is fanfiction! ;)
You're certainly doing very well considering you haven't read the books in a while though. I haven't found the characters too OOC, maybe a bit cliche as to how they're often portrayed in fanfics but that's about it.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
| Caitlin chapter 7 . 10/1/2012
I'm actually PhilosophersStone- 123, it wouldn't let me post, saying I'd already reviewed this chapter. Ah well, here I am.
How will they get round the Floo Powder thing? Wouldn't the Ministry be more actively watching the fireplaces, considering Harry, Ron, Hermione and Ginny slipped out right under Umbridge's nose? Then again, the Ministry was corrupted at this point, so I suppose they would be in that biased fantasy that Muggles are below them, so wizards therefore wouldn't bother wasting their time going to visit Muggles, especially foreign ones. I'd find it rather amusing to find out how they'd explain if Umbridge caught them... if that happens, please let the Cullens kill her. Save the centaurs a job.
The only things I would say are that you referred to the Cullens as though there are only one of them, when they should have been referred to in a plural... I think. Also, and this is just me being picky, but Harry seemed a little out of character in some scenes. And you don't need to say things like "a laugh bubbled from behind his lips" when you could just say "he laughed." I'm being picky, but p;ease don't view it as criticism. I'm very pedantic.
| Sapphire Serina Riddle chapter 3 . 9/15/2012
one little tiny mistake you mixed up your cahpter one and cahpter two they're switched.
| Raisa Cuan chapter 6 . 9/13/2012
Hi..i'm a frequent reader here...and have to say..i love your story...this is also my second time reading a crossover fan fic but the story is really good...i'm getting excited already to know what happens next in the next chapter...please don't stop...you're really good at this and it'll be a shame to stop now..again love your work)
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/11/2012
i just read the summary and wanted to tell you where you went wrong alice's powers with humans because she was one and they are thus familiar to her and with vampires because she is one they cant see the future if the shapeshifters the wolfs are playing a major role or if it involves renesmee and thus wouldn't be able to see anything involving wizards you cant just say "well the wizards are human" because so are the shapeshifters thus you can find that it wouldnt work on other species of human the wizards
| lilgenious chapter 7 . 9/10/2012
What is the point of getting reviews if you delete anonymous reviews that are sent by people without an account? Are they not allowed to enjoy the story as much as everybody else or is it the fact that you want the useless reviews that tell you how much of an outstanding author you are without one ounce of critique?
I wasted my time on this story because I saw some potential in your writing. The way you bash your reviewers for leaving a review you do not agree with is despicable and I am not going to read any further.
| TinyBlackcurrant chapter 7 . 9/10/2012
Look, I wouldn't let these anonymous reviewers bother you. Like James018 said, its possible that most anonymus reviewers who bash storied are just trolls trying to upset or offend people. I don't get that many reviews, and I understand that's disheartening. I mean, I wrote a story which got over 200 reviews in 3 days, yet I only got two reviews. I get it - it's incredibly disheartening. But maybe ask in a a politer way, instead of saying "don't review, don't read."
Maybe say something along the lines of "Could you please review instead of just reading and favouriting? I like to know you like it, but I'd like some feedback, instead of just knowing you like it." Or something like that. I said something like that on one of my stories and I got the most reviews I ever got - three. :) Ah well.
Anyway, if you're rewriting this, I'd like to point out one thing. Bella's technically a Muggle, so therefore if wizards used magic in front of her they would be breaking the International Statute of Secrecy. Just something I thought I'd point out. Keep writing, though.
| James018 chapter 7 . 9/10/2012
I can't see the offending anonymous review/s, did you delete them? I think most anonymous reviewers who bash stories are trolls deliberately trying to upset people. By doing what you've done you've probably played into your assailant's hands, I'm afraid.
In light of the previous review by lilgenious I want to say that I personally really like this story and have no problem with it. I think his/her comments are, while constructive, a little harsh.
Certainly I think, looking back on your author's notes, some of your requests for reviews are a little extreme ("if you do not review, do not read"). But I doubt too many people would be put off by them. In fact, I doubt many readers pay a heap of attention to author's notes (I don't unless they're long). May be better to tone it down though, just for those who are picky/easily offended.
Like I've said in a previous review, this crossover is of a much better standard than many out there. It's not perfect of course, heck, no story is perfectly airtight. But I can certainly see you're trying to make it as realistic and interesting as possible, which is fantastic. There are a few small spelling/grammar errors but they aren't really significant. A beta wouldn't be strictly necessary, though still a good idea if you can get one. (It could even be a friend checking the chapter over for you before you post it.)
Anyway, like I said, really enjoying this story and I look forward to seeing more - please keep writing!
| lilgenious chapter 6 . 9/9/2012
I am writing this review because I could no longer contain myself and not say anything about what is on my mind as I am sure there are a lot of people who agree with me on this opinion I have.
The first thing that I have to say is that the characters for Harry Potter seem a little off to me. I am a big fan of seeing canon in canon and I have written my fair share of Harry Potter stories in the past, I have to say that Voldemort is extremely out of character if you think he'd accept help from a vampire. He is the type of baddie that prefers to do things on his own and he loves to use his Death Eaters to achieve what he wants. This is seen by the way he treats them and the way he acts towards them when a) he does get what he wants and b) things don't go the way that he planned. I don't think that he would want outside help as sooner or later he'd see them as a threat to his power.
I don't have anything wrong with crossovers with Twlight, it's just that this story has all the characters from both fandoms help each other mutually and I don't like that because both fandoms do not need that.
Your writing is good, I have nothing wrong with it at all. I think that you are a great writer but there are times when I have to question my judgment because of all your authors notes and the way you pretty much ram it in your readers faces that you want reviews before you get this chapter posted.
As a writer myself, I have to tell you that is a major no no. Your readers should not feel obligated to review if they want to read the story and doing it the way that you are doing it now will force the majority of your readers away. On this site you gain a reputation and judging from what I've been hearing about you through the grapevine, yours is already tainted. You never say to your readers: "If you don't review, don't read". Not only does this make you appear full of yourself, this also makes me as a reader feel that you are only in this to massage your ego. From what little I've seen of your writing, I know you withhold chapters if you don't get this amount of reviews and I don't like that at all.
To me writing means that you enjoy it, you're not in it because you want reviews and if you don't have any then you're going to throw a fit and not upload any new chapters. I love writing and let me tell you a little personal story: I write for a fandom that doesn't get any attention until a movie comes out. I don't write just because I want reviews, I write because I love the characters and love everything about the storyline. I've been writing in the Alexandre Dumas fanbase since 2009 so I know what it is like to get lesser reviews than what you have going. Each review I get means the world to me because I know that the reader is sending it to me out of the goodness of their heart and not because they feel obligated to do so.
You really need to fix the characterisation of the story, to me Voldemort has lost all his bad glory and I highly doubt he would have went to Victoria for help, even if it were the other way around and Victoria wanted it. These two villains work by themselves and prefer to keep their armies to themselves. They would not receive outside help from anybody.
You also need to work on your spelling. In past chapters, I've noticed a lot of spelling mistakes that were overlooked before posting and it annoyed me a lot. I understand that my English is poor as I am a French speaker, but I have found myself a beta who is more than willing to help me out. I urge you to get one. Also, I tend to find that you are a little too wordy with description, which forced me to skip large amounts of paragraphs because it went on and on about something.
Also have you ever considered the possibility that your anon reviewer doesn't have an account? Bashing a reviewer who said something negatitive to you about how you treat your readers is another no no, and will set your reputation in a very bad way.