Reviews for Summer of Secrets
LVHamlet chapter 16 . 7/28/2009
It's a major step indeed, thought the session with the healer felt "short". Thought I honestly don't know about those things. Anyway, keep writing! Good chapter.
LVHamlet chapter 15 . 7/28/2009
The beginning of the change? I can only hope so. It was good to see her not mad, thought I really don't know if with the problems she is having she will feel so confident that Harry didn't betray her. Just wondering. Good work!
konii chapter 16 . 7/27/2009
This fanfic touched me... and i love it... i don't know why but there's something that i really like :D

hope to see a new chapter soon

Bye!
Yani7 chapter 16 . 7/27/2009
Another great chapter. The only mistakes I'm finding are the occasional grammar mistakes. Great job. One thing though, listening to what Juice14 (I think) said about Harry's current mental state would be a very good idea. It would introduce much more character development for many of the characters based around Harry, especially Ginny.

I did like the fact that you kept Harry and Ginny in character with:

"Ginny returned her arms full of books. Harry's instinct was to jump up and help her with the load but he knew Ginny wouldn't appreciate it."

Even just these two lines (or even just the last one) helped me get into the story so much more. This is because you showed that you were making sure the characters stayed true to themselves.

One thing I must say that could help improve your story though. The chapters are quite short. I find that just as I begin really getting into the chapters, they end. Lengthening the chapters may be a very good idea to help people get into the story and will allow you to include so much more detail that will help the story a great deal as well.

Anyways, sorry for the huge review haha. I just want to help you out. Keep up the great work. I'll be waiting for the next chapter.
juice14 chapter 16 . 7/27/2009
Good points. Indeed relationships are a 2 way street. Looks like Healer Seacrest can fix 2 birds with one stone. Maybe when all is better people can be impressed by this kind of healing. In JKR canon I've felt that healing of the mind was somewhat behind their Muggle counterparts. Pivotal point for Harry and Ginny, now they both know more about each other. Hopefully this will make them realize that facing problems head on and making tough decisions is also part of what it means to really love someone. Squeezing a lot of meaning into few words, good chapter!
Jenny129 chapter 16 . 7/27/2009
OMG! Love it! I'm so glad you updated quickly! I was wondring if there's gonna be anymore drama or if it'll just go up from here? I like healer chick. She's like phsycic. LOL! Anyways, love your stories / creativity / imagination / you!
ghostchicken chapter 16 . 7/27/2009
Admitting one has a problem is the hardest step, be it self-mutilation, drug addiction, emotional issues, or alcoholism. The next hardest step is doing something about it.

Sure, it'll get darker before it gets lighter, but that's all about getting down to the root of the problem and then working it out. It won't happen over night, there'll be the occasional setback triggered by whatever, but if Ginny stays the course, she'll come out on the other side. She has a strong support team, headed by Harry himself. His love for her is going to sustain her during some very dark times. And who knows? Maybe by the time this is over, he'll have exorcised a few of his own demons as well.

GOOD JOB!
SomeGuy chapter 15 . 7/26/2009
I havn't been reviewing on the previous chapters because i wanted to keep reading! I have some personal involvement with people around me causing pain on themselves to escape and I find this story very interesting. It is a good look into the struggle many people go through, as well as those around them. Thank you for creating this story and best of luck with future chapters!

SomeGuy
juice14 chapter 15 . 7/26/2009
Hmm let's see,

Can be improved: I felt Harry seemed remarkably well adjusted. Perhaps more could be made of his own suffering? Not much was included about his emotional state after Sirius's death. Same goes for Ron and Hermione with regards to their emotional depth. However, this does bring Ginny much more to fore. Did you intentionally make these characters more 'flat' to contrast Ginny's emotions? I really think you might want to look more into Harry's emotional pain at least. Maybe this will really show Ginny what he's going through?

Deserves praise: Very good use of the English language. That's half the batlle won. For the same reasons I mentioned earlier, your Ginny comes across as very real. Easily one of the most lifelike characterization of her I've seen.
juice14 chapter 1 . 7/25/2009
Very Gryffindor of you to admit that this topic is something you're struggling with. While I can't say I've been in such a situation personally, i've met such people. In my capacity as a Catechist (Catholic Sunday School) I once had a student who did these things and attempted suicide once. While this had happened before I met her, I found that she appreciated honesty and a listening ear. Now she's doing well i think, we've lost touch but I occasionally bump into her since she stays near my fiancée. So I'm saying that it's good that you have a creative outlet here to vent. In my limited capacity as a reader I will try to give honest opinions heh.

Story wise is a good start. Nice bit drawing parallels between Harry and Ginny. Writing style supports this and am looking forward to reading on. :)
Ashley Elizabeth Malfoy chapter 15 . 7/25/2009
'LOVING it . Fantastic cant wait fer the next Chapter!

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DrkVrtx chapter 15 . 7/25/2009
This is definitely an interesting, profound read, no less due to the topic around which it revolves. This is the first time Ive come across a story of this nature so I cant really review it as I would any other; in terms of the romance between Ginny and Harry, I think you have carried it off very well, the intimate scenes are QUITE steamy but you've managed not to write pornography: the emotional as well as physical aspects are conveyed in equal measure.

In regard to Ginny's self-harming (please forgive me if I say anything offensive, it is wholly unintentional), I think that the scenes could be a bit more...descriptive, perhaps delving more into her emotional struggles during the act as well as afterwards when discovered by Harry. In some instances, it seems rushed, however, since I am not familiar with this issue unlike yourself, the author, I cannot say with authority what should or should not be.

Once again, this is a pleasure to read and I will more than certainly be following its progress as you continue with it :)
ghostchicken chapter 15 . 7/24/2009
Okay, so I had most of it right. At least-at this point-no one's threatening to separate Harry from Ginny. I wonder if that's due to Healer Seacrest's request that Harry take part in the session in Dumbledore's office. However...who knows what that will bring?

Harry stayed true to his word. He said he'd only tell if there was another problem. There was another problem and he told. They say the third time's the charm. In this case, that has some rather horrifying implications.

You're doing very well with this. I can't praise it enough. You know you've done your job as a writer when you spur your readers to speculate. GOOD JOB!
ghostchicken chapter 14 . 7/24/2009
I saw this coming. The rope just snapped. I can see it all now: You KNEW about this, Mr Potter, and you said nothing? What were you thinking? I must report this to your Head of House and the headmaster. You'll have a lot of explaining to do, Mr Potter, and you too, Miss Granger! Or something like that...

I think Harry can take the anger and disappointment from the staff, but not Molly and Arthur...and the rest of the family. To be scorned and separated from Ginny-and the only family he knew-will break him. Again, that could be messy all around. Guilt. Brooding. Heartache and heartbreak. Anger. Destruction.

Let's hope the charms Harry put on that ring will help with this too. What worse curse is there than the one we place on ourselves? Her pain is his and her death would be his too. Bonds have that effect.
ghostchicken chapter 13 . 7/24/2009
After all the sweaters were being worn by their respective owners Fred and George passed out the remaining gifts.

That's a rather awkward sentence. Try this instead:

Once everyone had donned his or her respective Weasley sweater, Fred and George passed out the remaining gifts.

This was a lovey chapter-all full of the warmth a family shares at Christmas. Harry's and Ginny's time by the river was especially sweet, since they gifted one another with another aspect of physical intimacy which involves a copious amount of trust and affection.

Too often, oral love is cheapened by gratuitousness, but it's a beautiful thing when love and trust are shared between the partners. Physical love is very special to begin with, and should never be taken for granted, but the oral aspect is far deeper emotionally and psychologically. There are really no words to describe it.

The love and thought Harry put into the charms on that ring empower it even more than it already is. Love is the most formidable force in the universe and when something is done in and with love, it's power is astronomical. Harry extended his promised protection over Ginny with the giving of that ring and the enchantments placed upon it. How romantic is that, I ask you? How precious? There is no way to place value on something like that.

By the way: Glad you found another boyfriend. I hope this one is worthy of you. GOOD JOB!
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