Reviews for Things
Brightly75 chapter 1 . 9/15/2009
Well done. It is incredibly difficult to write in the second person. Very few people do it well. Good show.
Citrus Fever chapter 1 . 5/24/2009
Awesome one-shot! I love how Alice just plain out asks Bella if she's masturbating (like she wouldn't know anyway lol). Good job!
kooltayuya4 chapter 1 . 5/7/2009
I really liked this. I wished the ending was a little more but it was still good
quintin grey chapter 1 . 4/21/2009
i found it funny and nice.. i love this couple so much. you did a great job
xXxSourdoughxXx chapter 1 . 4/15/2009
ha! that was really fun! i felt like i was reading a naughty choose your own adventure book in 4th grade...not that they made naughty ones, or at least they didn't have them at my school's library, but you know what i was scandalous in that pre-sex education way. in other words, fun!
Marimint chapter 1 . 4/14/2009
Think you're trying too hard, mate. Maybe you ought to stop having so much cyber sex and try to get laid for real, yeah? No offense, but your asking of what color is such a dead give away... it was cute is a smutty way, but I would just leave this as a wet dream.
Jocelyn Torrent chapter 1 . 4/13/2009
The only thing I have to critique on are author's notes in the story. They're very distracting. And be sure to start a new line every time someone new speaks. Other than that a very sensual one shot and the second person was refreshing

Alexawynters chapter 1 . 4/12/2009
love it it made me smile. more please?
Naomi DC chapter 1 . 4/12/2009
Okay, I admit it. I am really confused. But, it was interesting. Keep it going. Unless its a one shot. Then... I dunno. But its good though!
kenyon87 chapter 1 . 4/12/2009
ooh bet edward is gonna be pissed, prob ably even try to kill alice, but great keep iy up and post more soon, rock on! peace:)