|Reviews for Harry Potter and the Evan's Family|
| christinelbain chapter 1 . 12/27/2013
| Slygrifflepuffclaw chapter 19 . 8/1/2013
Absolutely love this story just wish it was finished
| GF quitting chapter 17 . 7/6/2013
Wasn't something said about the Queen had to let Harry know WHERE Potter Manor was. That ONLY she knew.
Then WTF are the Weasleys doing there BEFORE Harry even sees it ... And WHO is "deciding it's safer for them to go there"?
With the rest of two (note the spelling, TWO) chapters remaining, I'm going to quit this on principle. Plus, it's obviously going nowhere fast enough in those few chapters- to either be abandoned... or a major rush job to finish.
I'll take my leave.
| G Fawkes chapter 16 . 7/6/2013
So... based on the conversations given (and there is NOTHING else to go on) Harry and Susan portkeyed into a party, talked to Daphne and Theodore for MAYBE five minutes, and portkeyed out, and Susan left... nice date. Ya' think maybe they could have stayed longer, had a drink, made out, swam naked, limbo-ed, shagged in the bushes, ANYTHING but stay a few minutes and leave? WTF? That was SHORTER than his date with Cho, and he didn't have Hermione as an excuse.
And in that short time, Harry agreed to Theo being an advisor? Riiiiiiiiiiiiiiighhhhhhtttt!
The lesson of the day is: if you don't write it, it didn't happen... we don't ASSUME they mingled, talked to every person there, ate snacks, got drunk, or anything else OTHER than what YOU put on the page.
| GF again chapter 13 . 7/5/2013
' "Yes. I am flying on my broom. I am playing Quitich, which is a Wizarding sport. I am on the school team." Harry said as he explained Quittich.'
And now we finally figure out that this is one of those people that has written after WATCHING THE MOVIES BUT NOT READING THE BOOKS! B/c there is NO F#$%ing way you could NOT know how to spell QUIDDITCH, had you read SEVEN Harry Potter books
Sorry, everyone else... I am not trying to be the fanfic 'troll' or anything, here, but the mistakes are inexcusable enough, then add the complete LACK of common book based knowledge of the subject. Some may think the movies are ok, but they have completely bastardized the books, and I don't accept them.
| G Fawkes chapter 12 . 7/5/2013
' "I am afraid so. Dumbledore wanted you to meet a non-noble Gryffindor family very loyal to him. The /Wesley's/ were the perfect pick. Therefore, you and eventually Hermione Granger were placed in the /Weasley/ orbit.
The/ Wesley's/ are great people and they do care for you Harry. However ...'
Any takers on how to freakin' spell WEASLEY! Wrong- right- and wrong again in three sentences?!
Again... care much?!
Do you have ANY idea, the difference between to, two, and too?
(and I just went to the bio, to make sure you weren't a 'second language' writer, b/c THAT would be impressive... and this is ONLY a good story line, but the writing part needs about five Betas.
And finally, (for now) may I suggest learning when and when NOT to use a comma. I'm sitting here reading things over (comma), sometimes two and three times (comma), trying to make sense of your NON and WRONG punctuation.
Yes, you are American... try to NOT let the Euros laugh at us for being idiots!
| G Fawkes chapter 10 . 7/5/2013
Between 'Volderot' and 'Horology' , words that aren't going to be mis-spelled by any program, and plenty of others that are, it just shows a lack of CARING. Doesn't anyone proofread their stuff before posting?!
| G Fawkes chapter 7 . 7/5/2013
I thought it was funny that the driver stopped to buy him clothes, so as to be 'proper' and all, when he probably should have stopped and got him McDonald's, b/c the poor kid is STARVING!
| Reading is fun chapter 6 . 5/29/2013
Yay. I love a good Moody story. Normally when there is a bad Dumbledore story then they make Moody bad too. I like the uniqueness of this because he really is one of my favorite character. I like him being a constant good guy.
| Jasper's Southern Girl chapter 19 . 4/4/2013
I love how you brought Sirius back as a ghost. He is one of my favorite characters, and I hated the way he died in the books.
| james.hofstetter chapter 19 . 3/31/2013
Ooh is there going to be another chapter to this, I enjoyed reading it :)
| panther73110 chapter 18 . 3/16/2013
Is this story not going to be finished
| Lynn Potter1964 chapter 18 . 2/24/2013
Okay still love the story concept but please get a beta reader to proof your story. There are way to many errors in the story.
| Lynn Potter1964 chapter 19 . 2/24/2013
I absolutely love this story so please please please update soon!
| Dismayed chapter 19 . 2/13/2013
Well, I like your staffing choices. But the spelling and punctuation ... ergh.