|Reviews for Breathe|
| Guest chapter 3 . 10/1/2013
Your story sucks too.
| jjkostenko chapter 5 . 7/21/2013
You really should have stopped while you were ahead. Terrible use of content, like a little kid trying to be a grown up with no understanding of what they are doing. It had potential, but it was so choppy and unrealistic that I just gave up trying to read it.
| SleeplessInSpokane chapter 13 . 6/1/2013
This story had way too much action going on in a short amount of time period. It was spastic and there wasn't much focus. It has real potential but it was rushed and you changed the Point of view (like 1st person, 3rd person, etc.) so that they didn't mesh. I thought that I would like this, but honestly ... I didn't; I'm sorry.
| Guest chapter 1 . 4/27/2013
Within the first 4 chapters Bella is cheated on, faints, screams unnessecarily twice, gets a makeover that she would never actually get, and is raped by her ex. This story is a piece of work. you should think about editing it to make it more believable.
| Guest chapter 14 . 4/10/2013
you are a not a great writer. You have the potential to be but you need some work. a little more imagination in your dialogue and a little bit more description. The idea of the story was great but it seemed unfocused. Also, lots of spelling errors and grammatical errors. It jumped all over the place.
| xoxocullenluverxoxo chapter 13 . 4/1/2013
Wow this story was just crazy. I would highly recommend getting a beta to reedit this story.
| xoxocullenluverxoxo chapter 11 . 4/1/2013
Notice the huge mistake in this line?
"We do your honor. The people find Edward Cullen guilty-" I didn't wait to hear the rest. I ran out of the room. Bella was laying in Edwards arms. She wasn't looking to well.
I can actually find two mistakes.
| xoxocullenluverxoxo chapter 3 . 3/31/2013
Well that was dramatic.
| ElleBelle chapter 13 . 3/26/2013
that ended quickly
| MusicLovingQt08 chapter 14 . 3/24/2013
This wasn't as good as I thought it would be
| MusicLovingQt08 chapter 1 . 3/24/2013
Ok I have only read one chapter and I've already got the feeling that this is going to be really good it's sooooo soooo much better then the last emmett Bella story I tried to read
| Anonymous chapter 12 . 3/21/2013
Unfortunately this has been an alright theme however with all the spelling errors, and horrible sentence structure I couldn't really enjoy it :( maybe proof read it?
Otherwise it will be alright
| Yasmoni chapter 13 . 2/14/2013
I really liked this story but my only thing with it was that you had some points where you spelled things wrong or didn't finish the word but over all i really enjoyed it :D
| yo chapter 13 . 2/12/2013
i will die if you don't carry on...
| yo chapter 13 . 2/11/2013
... YOU BETTER FINISH THIS OR ELSE... I WILL STEAL YOUR BACON!BACON IS LUSH! AHHHHHH. BAAAACCCCOOOONNNN!