|Reviews for Project Super Beast|
| The Flying Frog chapter 21 . 6/19/2009
Hello. I am greatly enjoying this story thus far. Some editing may help out with homonyms or misspellings, but nothing major.
I have a few theories I would like to bring up (feel free to respond at your leisure...or simply not respond should you feel the lack of need to do so). Considering Slade had been taken by Trigon after his death, I can very well see it happening again, but Trigon taking both Beast Boy and Slade...and Rage. I guess Beast Boy will make a reappearance sometime during the Brother Blood stuff, but far more powerful as he's turning into a demon. I mean Rage is already corrupting him from within, but Trigon's influence would be decidedly more powerful.
Raven and Supergirl will likely continue their rivalry. I can see Supergirl going back to the Watchtower but is so sad and depressed that she's given time off and she spends it with the Titans.
As for demonic animals that Beast Boy can turn into...I love how you've integrated mythology with Beast Boy's abilities and their is one very powerful monster in Norse Mythology that I think works great with Trigon. Garm. A giant hound...or hellhound, and guardian of Helheim, the underworld where people who died in beds, sickness, the cowards, went. And Garm was so powerful it took one of the Norse gods, Tyr the god of single combat, to die in order to kill it. Beast Boy turning into Garm, or having Garm as a pet upon his return would be absolutely fascinating.
| acosta perez jose ramiro chapter 21 . 6/13/2009
Whoa... very impressive fight scenes. BB and Rage's interaction is quite interesting.
The giant bettle was a funny and smart idea; yeah, that would be the only way to match SG's strength... unless Gar turns into a Kryptonian animal.
Keep the good writing.
| titanfan45 chapter 21 . 6/12/2009
That was great! Very action packed and very well written.
| youdon'tknow chapter 21 . 6/12/2009
Is the Hellhound suppose to be his ultimate form or what, I really don't know?
For a minute there I thought the bad guys were going to trick the Titans into think Beast Boy betrayed them. 1; he wasn't with them when they where attack, and 2; Jinx said they got their codes which could have meant a traitor.
Typical someone wanting revenge on someone else only to become the very thing they hated about that someone in the first place. I am amazed that you practically fused 3-4 episodes into this chapter like this.
I taking a guess that Beast Boy and Slade are going to work together to stop Terra. After all Beast Boy is used to working with his enemies (in your fic any ways).
| bonez1925 chapter 21 . 6/12/2009
you should never say sorry for a chapter being too long, it's just better for us readers.
Anyways, great job with this chapter. Hope you can update soon!
| darkwolf227 chapter 21 . 6/12/2009
(1)dont be sorry for makeing the chapter long i like it! (2)it was cool that sound glove thingy,awesome! (3) BEAST BOY DIES?(or is it thet think he dies?)
| chaostheory1989 chapter 21 . 6/12/2009
I've said this before but you need to look in to a beta, sloppy mistakes are ruining a very good story. I took a paragraph out at random and I'll show you what it should be like:
“The worst thing about this form, is the legend that surrounds it. If one happens to see the hellhound three times, he or she will die an abrupt and unseen death. But I never tested it, I think now is the a good time don't you? You've already seen me once so two more times should kill you.” Terra watched as Beast Boy changed back into his human form then went right back into his Hellhound form. “That's twice. Should we try it again?” Terra saw the Hellhound smile. “I think so.” Beast Boy changed into his human form, and Terra shot off like a rocket. She ripped a chunk off the earth and took to the sky away from the mountain area. “Where are you going? We haven't finishing testing yet.” Beast Boy changed into a Peregrine Falcon but under Rage's influence this falcon had four glowing red eyes.
I could have picked a worse paragraph, littered with simple mistakes. Get a Beta and improve this story, make it what it is meant to be.
| acosta perez jose ramiro chapter 20 . 6/6/2009
Very cool. Great retelling of the Tournament.
Keep the good writing.
| youdon'tknow chapter 20 . 6/5/2009
The fight scenes were short but good. It seems with out Gizmo in the game almost every one had to face a different opponent then they originally did.
That was a funny line Beast Boy said "This is power discrimination". Why did The Master of Games say to Beast Boy "you're no hero", I mean what does he care he himself is a bad person? I have to ask how did he escape from his amulet himself at the end of the episode.
I was hoping for an even greater form than a vampire! I have no idea what to expect it to be. I'm guessing that Rage was influencing Ravens nightmare this whole time, and now that she's in BBs mind rather than Ravens they stopped.
You know that idea I mention in my review of chapter 13 of there being an animal that is at least partially immune to magic (maybe you don't)? Well I just remember that the show already made one! In the episode where the Titans split up to find other heroes (don't remember the name) Raven ran into these alien octopus things that for some reason were immune to her magic. Now if Beast Boy can change into that Raven's toast during the next combat training against him.
| darkwolf227 chapter 20 . 6/5/2009
plz dont ever stop make this go on forever forever forever forever! plz plz plz plz plz.
| chaostheory1989 chapter 20 . 6/4/2009
I suggest you look in to getting a beta, the story is sound but you keep one mixing up words like founded for found and are for our. Keep an eye on your grammer too, homophones can be a pain and difficult to see at times.
The idea is great, you can come up with a good story, but the writing of it has let you down, if it gets cleaned up you'll have a real gem on your hands.
Don't get too knocked back by this, we all make mistakes, and since I usually write through the night I tend to make my fair share, but I try to pick them up. This looks like you didn't proof read.
| DreamStoryWeaver chapter 19 . 6/4/2009
RAGE IS LOOSE!
And now she trying to turn BB agaist Raven!
OMG is she going to push BB to leave with Supergirl just to separate him from the ohers?
What will Supergirl do to Raven when she finds out what she's been doing to BB at night!
Please post up the next chapter soon!
| darkwolf227 chapter 19 . 5/31/2009
no! moore more more! plz? plz plz plz. but plz if you will read the first chapter that you wrote,thanks! :)
| acosta perez jose ramiro chapter 19 . 5/31/2009
Good to see SG and the brothers back in action. Excellent fight scenes, and cool job with SG and Raven.
M... BB needs to talk with Raven about this Emotions' problem.
Keep the good writing.
| youdon'know chapter 19 . 5/30/2009
I gotta wonder from the fight with the Chrysalis Eaters how much power is BB actually holding back? In fact is that vampire form of his actually his strongest, or is there an even more powerful form that not even the Leagues aware of yet?
I can understand stand Terra wanting revenge for her Brothers death, but she is one of those people that do become blind and stupid from revenge. What I like still is that if she was right about what happened then it wound almost seem right wanting revenge. Unlike in the series where she had no reason what so ever wanting revenge on them (in the episode aftershock part 1 she told Robin she wanted revenge on them just in case you didn't know).
Now Beast Boy is a little aware of what Ravens been doing while hes been sleeping. It looks like it's going to be SG vs Raven Vs Rage to make Gar theirs.
P.S. I think that without Trigon's influence on Raven's rage she wouldn't be evil. After all just because your an angry person most of the time doesn't mean your a bad person right?