|Reviews for Father|
| browneyednerd chapter 1 . 9/20/2009
I like Clay's backstory and your unnamed narrator.
| epalladino chapter 1 . 4/22/2009
I loved this. Clay was always one of my favorite secondary characters and I love the first name you gave to him. In fact, I would love to see a followup to this. Your OCs are really well done, as well as the scenes with Liz and John. Your hospital scenes seem plausible.
The FBI are a form of police, except at the federal level. I would assume that to check them out you should either find out the phone number of the closest FBI office, or contact your local police who would have that information.
P.S. This is very well written, but you have a few typos here and there. I'll send them in a PM, in case you'd like to fix them. All in all, this is a bravo performance and the typos not too distracting.
Love to hear more from you, Beth Palladino
| theghettocyborg chapter 1 . 4/21/2009
I really enjoyed this story. It's a nice look at a secondary character and how a BPRD agent might have an outside homelife.