Reviews for My Big Brother
vampirelady13 chapter 9 . 1/27/2016
I understand that Daniel was her friend but to chock Jasper like she did. Is not something a mate would do. This is my opinion. Mates do not put other people first. She could of told them without hurting Jasper. This is the first chapter in the story that i am disappointed in.
Guest chapter 20 . 6/4/2014
This was awesome!
Guest chapter 2 . 5/4/2014
Jasper, duh! Edward is kind of a bitch
Guest chapter 15 . 2/11/2014
Hehdbhdbdbbqjhbjbshh bih
SAYAx13 chapter 2 . 1/21/2014
i think you should of made her into a human vamp drinker like peter nd char like a real Whitlock not a animal muncher ughh lol ...
Lulu222 chapter 5 . 3/31/2013
Awww... so CUTE
Love it :D :*
Lulu222 chapter 2 . 3/31/2013
Jasper nd de song is beautiful
VampWitchCat chapter 1 . 3/12/2013
So, I have read a few chapters into your story and I think the idea for it is great. It could be very interesting. However, I think your writing needs to develop a bit more. Also, the grammar mistakes were distracting. If you haven't already, I suggest getting a beta look over what you have written. From what I've read so far this story could go great places with a little editing. I wish you the best of luck with your future projects!
Girloveshugs chapter 18 . 2/28/2013
great story, hope there is a sequel
Dark chapter 4 . 9/23/2012
I did like this story at first but this chapter went way to fast but thats my opinion
Melly2014 chapter 1 . 7/19/2012
Love this story!
Steph A15 chapter 1 . 7/17/2012
I'm so excited to read this story!ยก! It sounds awesome.
SomeoneQuiteTall chapter 1 . 6/28/2012
I understand that the main characters in the beginning of this story are Bella and Emmett but if this is a Bella/Jasper story, why are they not listed as character A & B? I love this story by the way
Peta chapter 4 . 4/15/2012
I was reading your story but only got up to this chapter. I think you plot is a good one, but I find that your grammar requires work. Proper nouns (peoples names) should ALWAYS have a capital letter. You switch from them having one to not having one and I find that inconsistency makes it hard to read a story.
Ghoul99 chapter 20 . 4/10/2012
I love the book
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