Reviews for Partners
RyMalice chapter 14 . 10h
Another glaring error. You said in a previous chapter that they arrested Rookwood when he was visiting home. Also, how the hell did Voldemort just waltz into Hogwarts? Did Dumbledore turn the wards off for him?
RyMalice chapter 12 . 11h they kill Snape and nothing happens? You even had them say "Dumbledore's not going to be happy about this." Yet nothing, no confrontation with the old man, nothing.
RyMalice chapter 11 . 12h
Lots of little issues with this chapter, like how the Boots had no reaction to their son/grandson/whatever being MURDERED. Also, that leads into the main issue with this chapter. When Hermione was attacked and Terry killed, you wrote that Malfoy was found to have cast the Killing why the hell was he back in school?
RyMalice chapter 10 . 12h
It seems as if the people in your fic outside of the main group have no common sense. Andromeda should have known she was a target and gotten better wards to protect herself long ago, but she didn't and now her husband is dead and she nearly died too. Amelia is complaining about the department heads not going along, well like Harry said, either they do their jobs or get replaced and the next person will have the same option. Hermione should have known better than to lower her guard, and now Terry Boot is dead. Which should be interesting to see how Lord and Lady Boot react to that.
cravingsforthesoul chapter 16 . 9/8
And Dumbledore gets away with everything! Wow, even JKR had the decency to kill that old manipulative bastard.
cravingsforthesoul chapter 5 . 9/8
This whole chapter seems to be for the sole purpose of establishing Amelia Bones' superiority. Despite bring valid points to the table, her tone was incredibly rude and arrogant, especially considering she was living under Harry's roof. Plus, there was no need to chide them in front of Susan and Neville and could have been done privately.
Chiku11 chapter 1 . 8/29
I completed 1st chapter...but i hope those animal dursleys get punished...i read enough stories which start with abusive dursleys (1000% more abusive than canon) and simply forget them after that without any punishment...i'm someone who believes in 'karma' the such fics disturbs my believes...anyway i have been reading haphne stories which is my new interest from past 1 yr and its a good start...
EdTheBeast chapter 16 . 8/27
An excellent AU HP/Daphne story. Summer fifth year till Voldy's death and epilogue! A sad ending, tears in my eyes. An enjoyable read!
EdTheBeast chapter 6 . 8/26
OK. Is it just me or does Bott, Abbott, Johnes, and McMillian not equal Black, Potter, Bones, and Longbottom... So how is Harry, Susan, and Neville a majority?
EdTheBeast chapter 4 . 8/26
A good story. So far the dating is screwed up as July 9, 1996 was a Tuesday not a weekend day. So starting Monday when it is already Tuesday and supposed to be Monday in a couple days throws a wrench into things!
Face Yourself chapter 1 . 8/20
That bout of kissing was extremely random and completely out of nowhere. There was no lead up, no indication of any feelings of that sort starting to creep up, and it was entirely unrealistic for people who barely even knew of each other, and have only actually been talking for a day or so. Could've stood to take things a whole lot slower, give them a few weeks at minimum.
Guest chapter 16 . 7/27
There's an inconsistency during vVoldemorts atrack at Hogwarts, Augustus Rookwood was captured during the raids by the DMLE and placed in the new 'prison', yet he was at Hogwarts during the atrack.
adityaconnect2007 chapter 1 . 6/27
The romance is extremly fast and veryv cringy. They just meet each other and a day later they are in love
Perfect Chaotic Life chapter 16 . 6/18
Wow. Overall, good story. Even for a whirlwind romance, it was a little fast. And making Harry lose the few things he had left of his parents in the first chapter almost made me not read the rest. Its devastating. Some inconsistencies here and there. But overall, good story.
enji-benjy chapter 11 . 6/15
erm... the use of an unforgivable curse on another human being is an automatic life sentence. So why is Malfoy still at Hogwarts after being caught using the Unforgivable killing curse to murder another student? It can't be his age that got him off if he's old enough for a duel to the death.
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