|Reviews for That Look|
| Muahahahahahahahahahahahahahah chapter 68 . 12/7/2013
HOLY FUCKING MACARONY!
that took some hell-ish time for ya to fuck her now do a good job with her!
| Muahahahahahahahahahahahahahah chapter 25 . 12/7/2013
| xXDJzimXx chapter 70 . 11/30/2013
i really like your story hope you make a new chapter
| Sjstaudt chapter 19 . 11/27/2013
I'm sure you weren't going for the vibe you had but the amount of time spent with and the acceptance Naruto received from "Chichi" came across as an almost devotional thing when I read it. Sure he loves the Hokage too, but the Hokage is a busy guy. He sees him maybe twice a month? MiniAnko is everyday. Ripping that away from him, telling him you probably won't love him, and bringing up sexual partners and then mentioning that he's incapable of satisfying you all seem like they would fuck Naruto up kinda bad mentally.
| Sjstaudt chapter 3 . 11/27/2013
Just thought I'd mention that perhaps the whole Gaki bit you have Anko doing at the start is a little overdone. On one hand you have an unstable Jinchuuriki who's suffered severe verbal and mild physical abuse and on the other a trained Kunoichi (albeit eccentric) who is casually insulting him constantly. I get that maybe that's just how she is and Naruto is so starved for a friend that he wouldn't mind but I always thought Anko would have to be particularly clever to be picked as Orochimaru's student and that doesn't really seem like a smart thing to do
| CTITICALREVE chapter 70 . 11/18/2013
As for clarification on my last post, the money thing? yeah, that was an assumed opinion of the subject, you'd think growing up they'd share some dreams of married life outside of being shinobi, so what better way for a "ghost" like naruto to impress a girl for a special event than giving her a dream wedding that would not only take a long time to prepare but cost quite a bit to get the details to mesh.
that is unless it was all a lie from the start, don't lead a guy into a commiting relationship if the commitment is not mutual. love is not a two way street, it's either flow or crash, in this case the crashes outdo the flow.
Nice twist by the way; having Anko revert to ChiChi's persona to get Naruto to doubt his dicision of breaking their relationship, after having Tsunade perform an relationship intervention aside from not knowing how badly Anko and the rest of her bed buddies had screwed over Naruto into following their example.
I may be critical about the relationship thing but if Konoha's ehtics are to screw anything with a stick or a hole while disregarding the consequences of commiting adultery, then Tsunade has become the biggest monopolizing pimp in the entirety of the naruto universe, where instead of giving out shinobi missions, it should've been more beneficial for her to be selling out her shinobi to the highest bidder for a cheap bed under the pretense of it being a mission.
as in chapter forty during Naruto and Anko's fight she said that naruto had become a hipocrite, for indulging is the same thing hat made her happy. so i assume that meant while she was with naruto there was never a shred of love or happiness she had for him or their relationship other than expecting him to be home waitng on her like a naive house dog, after she'd already slept with half of the village, or maybe even a few mission bedside encounters. way to prove your sorry for betraying someone who loved you.
| Wondering Knight chapter 70 . 11/18/2013
Love this story and hope you finish it.
| CRITICALREVE chapter 61 . 11/18/2013
Long delayed? more like denied, and for kakashi's part i hope he burns in hell. teach a kid that you can betray the one person you love for a quick f#*k and act like there's no such thing as consequence. and here i thought a man practially raised by a devoted husband to a devoted wife would've known better to set a better example.
As for Anko, there is no words to describe the disapointment Naruto can possibly explain for her betrayal. He made a love confession to her by masking it with a gamble that staked their entire lovey relationship on the line, for which the price for Naruto's loss would've been that he'd be friendzoned forever; and when it was FINALIZED by the sandaime hokage about their marriage, what happens Anko ditches Naruto to go spread her hole to the nearest horndog instead of sitting with naruto to set their future plans together. and worst yet when Naruto gave her a last chance for redemption after confronting her about the ultimatum of either becoming an honest WIFE or be a whore she chose to be a whore to Kakashi who decided to follow his dick and screw a drunk teetering on the edge of losing everything her husband had promised her, and she'd only regreted it after Naruto "released her" via divorce and all of their honest friends began to sprun her for her betrayal. worst yet the money Naruto had spent to pay off the prostitute was THEIR wedding money he'd been saving to give Anko the dream wedding.
Personally i would not be surprised if the outbreak of war had been orchestrated by naruto as part of some clan law about punishing unfaithful limpnoodles who sought out a CLAN wife for a lay when their wives would not put out. for example choji was the first to die because Naruto had found out the Cho-Ino-Shika fathers had slept with Anko during the course of their marriage, so naruto responds by taking away their first borns as the price they pay, try explaining to your wife that your child was killed because you broke your marriage vows by risking some whore getting pregnant, by hiring Suna to do the job during chunin exams only for the plan to be derailed by the invasion, by hatefilled revenge ino dies after the skip when shika became a target of circumstance, and that naruto's return. to check up on progress.
the whole "die tomorrow, old enought to drink, fu k, kill" is nothing but a load of stink some casanova thought up to screw as many females as he could when the chances of dying on a mission is not a 90 precent death rate but more like 1 out of every twenty. because of his success everyone though that they could do the same. what a load of crock.
| Loner Kid chapter 1 . 11/13/2013
ur first novel is AWESOME! LOVED IT! Hope u will write more cant wait XD
| RickDeckard chapter 1 . 11/12/2013
Wow. This is a deep and good story. I hope it continues. It deserves it's 7,400 reviews and should be continued to it's likely epic conclusion. Keep it coming please!
| imortalshadows chapter 60 . 11/10/2013
lol bringing down the hamma !
THUD love your work and the attitude your awesome
| imortalshadows chapter 3 . 11/9/2013
the thing you do with her toungue... really way to make her sound like a slut... good story btw
| KinZer0 chapter 69 . 11/8/2013
Having an entire series worth of buildup and tension end in what couldn't be more than 150 words is pretty anticlimatic.. Their reconciliation left a lot to be desired to me.. Just my opinion though. Don't blow up at me over it.
| btnerb chapter 37 . 11/8/2013
Minor contradiction: in chapter 5: Anko had "been the top girl in her class all the way through. (Which had been what drew her to the attention of Orochimaru.)
In this chapter, you clearly present Anko as having been the dead last of her class.
Honestly, this actually parallels the character development for Anko. Initially she was a hyper-competent chunin and that was a dominant personality trait. Now that Anko is a bit more of a character, it is much easier to believe that she might have had some trouble in the academy. However, the fact that she was so competent and excelled when she was in the academy informed much of her thoughts in the first ten or so chapters.
Basically, I'm saying it is a very simple edit to fix the surface problem, but there is a less blatant cause behind it. Were this a more professional format, I would strongly encourage you to revise out that minor problem in your initial revising process.
Anyway, the reason I've reached ch. 37 of your story is because I like it. When I get caught up to current I'll comment again, but I wanted to note the contradiction while it was still fresh in my mind.
| moneygreen932 chapter 70 . 11/8/2013
this story is awesome although it has its flaws it is very very interesting and comical to read, and it's one of the very few (that at least i seen) that has Naruto and Anko actually being themselves will romantically involved with each other and also the characters are at their correct and believeable levels and not OP'd.. this was a terrific story and i hope to see it continued and hopefully you update soon