|Reviews for Slow Dancing in a Burning Room|
| Ava Whitlock chapter 11 . 10/29/2012
The story is too swift-paced. We see no character development of this "Dallas" person. Also, it seems like Bella was too quick to proclaim her undying love for said character. I just find it difficult to wrap my head around the fact that she would, in spite of her past experience with love (coughEdwardcough) be so fast to just let herself take the jump, fall over from the precipice, so to say. Where's the internal conflicts, the second guessing and the hesitations? And, as for the rest of the Cullens, it seems a little unlikely that they would just forget Edward. Out of sight, out of mind, eh? Without having passed the test of trust the answers to which only time can tell, Cullens accepted Dallas into their coven, just after their first encounter, forsaking any further adieu. That doesn't settle well with me.
Like I said, the story isn't bad and the plot is worth the time of the day, but you need to slow down and let it slowly unfold to present an awesome story.
Peace, this is not a "flame", just constructive criticism. :)
| I made this for you chapter 26 . 6/9/2010
This is very good! I can't wait to read the sequel. I was torn between Bella/Dallas and Bella/Edward. But either way there was a half happy ending for Bella. It kind of made me think of a quote from the Harry Potter books 'Neither can live while the other survives' which in this story of course means Edward and Dallas. One more thing that really bothered me was 'Dallas and I's' it should have been Dallas and mine's' Well anyway I will reveiw the sequel tomorrow! Can't wait!
| vamplover14 chapter 2 . 2/22/2010
| vamplover14 chapter 1 . 2/22/2010
:) love it so far
| Stefy101 chapter 8 . 2/7/2010
Emmetts such a goofball
| Stefy101 chapter 4 . 2/6/2010
thats so cool! Awesome story
| Stefy101 chapter 2 . 2/6/2010
Aw, this is really god!
| Stefy101 chapter 1 . 2/6/2010
That was SO col
| lucidscreamer chapter 4 . 2/5/2010
Telepathy is mind-reading (Edward's ability). Moving objects with your mind is called telekinesis.
| goofy gurl chapter 3 . 2/4/2010
okay okay already im reviewing... this story is something id like to continue reading i hope she gets edward back!
| Disney101 chapter 2 . 2/4/2010
| JUCIFICS chapter 25 . 2/4/2010
the sequel title should be where it was dark. i love carlisle pls dont make him horrid when is the sequel comin out xoxo
| Mysterious Soula chapter 25 . 12/25/2009
I like Cause none of us were angels and where it was dark
| Twilight44 chapter 25 . 12/25/2009
Stay away from the haunted heart
| EdwardBellaCullenFan chapter 25 . 12/23/2009
Hi For The sequel I Like Three of the titles here are the ones I like Where it was Dark, Cause None of Us Were Angels and I also Like Stay Away From The Haunted Heart...
can U tell me which one U choose