Reviews for But what about me?
jk chapter 3 . 7/19
first off...Edward and his monster are separate people in the same body? LOL that's fucking stupid. Edward is a vampire ..its not Edward AND his vampire...
and he took off her pants and started "jerking" at her? sooo he didn't rape her? he jerked her? LOL what the fuck does that even mean?
jk chapter 2 . 7/19
I don't get it, why would he rape bella?
and he said her blood was singing to him soooo he took off her pants? ohhh makes perfect sense. and Edward saying v card? ya it doesn't sound right...characters have to have their OWN identity you cant have each character just sound like YOU
Jazznique chapter 19 . 4/20
This is a good story but I have a few problems with it. I think Bella is a bit too trusting of everyone seeing as she was raped. She doesn't seem traumatized at all i.e letting people touch her and be close to her and not to mention how easy it seemed it was to talk about her rape. There is one story in particular i read about Bella being rape, by Jacob, and i thought the way she was depressed and traumatized and just broken (spirit wise) was perfectly described. It actually brought tears to my eyes reading how much pain she was in and how much it hurt (emotionally) to even hug Alice or Esme, let alone Edward. Every little touch reminded her of what happened to her and sent her into a total breakdown. Another thing with your story that doesn't sit right with me is Rosalies reaction. I feel like even though Edward is her brother, she would have tried to kill him just because he did to someone else what caused her to loose everything. I wouldn't think she'd be encouraging him to get to know the girl he raped. Also Esme wouldn't encourage Edward to be around Bella either. Now that I think about it i don't think Emmett wouldn't either because of what Rose went thru. Like I said i like this story it's just not, I don't know, emotionally scarring. If that makes sense. I've never been raped so I don't know exactly how it feels but like I've said, I've read stories that described the pain so well that i felt like I was living it while reading. I wish I could remember the name of that story I've been looking for it for ages. Charlie even shoots Jacob when he tries to visit Bella at the Cullens house and then Bella has another breakdown because Edward saw the rape via Jacob's thoughts. Sorry my review is so long i have just been reading this story waiting till i get to the end to review but when I read about Rose telling Edward to give Bella some time, I just felt like it wasn't right.
jk chapter 3 . 3/30/2015
he undid his pants...and started jerking at her? what the fuck does that mean? then she screamed In pain...from what?
was he jerking off? sooo he didn't rape her? your writing is fucking horrible I have no idea how you expect people to follow this bullshit
jk chapter 2 . 3/30/2015
yaaaa cause Edward would say v card!
ya right

and Edward sees bella the girl he raped and he just says ...alice...
that's it! what the fuck
jk chapter 1 . 3/30/2015
this is Edward right? youd think he would be more concerned with smelling her or I don't know biting her! but he goes right for her pants? that doesn't make any fucking sense!
Misty chapter 2 . 12/2/2014
I have to be honest here... I couldn't be bothered to read chapter 2 after the ignorant babble that was the first chapter... There is so much that is wrong with this story so far!
Firstly, the plot is so twisted! Falling in love with her rapist! Could have made it work if there was a deeper more intricate... It was a long shot however.
Second, you just throw that rape in there, no emotions or anything come through... Her mother just took it so damn casually?! And she has NO REACTION?! What the hell! Not only is the language you used so incredibly basic, but to top it off you write such ignorant rubbish, trying to just spice up your story and basically insulting anyone who has been raped. You clearly do not know the trauma and grief people go through. You're 18?! I find that very hard to believe. Reading this chapter I would deduce that you're around 12 if that.
Please build a stronger plot base if you intend to continue writing, improve you language and really think about your characters, feel what they would feel, write from your heart. This is so boring to read! Put some heart into it!
Don't even get me started on the disgusting Edward Cullen! He rapes her then he is kust bothered that he took her V-card?! Really? You really have some growing up to do!
Bipolarfaerie chapter 20 . 7/23/2014
I hate the name personally, sorry. I would think Edward would probably want to name her after his own mother, Elizabeth, or even Renesmee would have worked. As for the boy, (I still don't know why no one seems to do this...) I think Masen would have been perfect. It's a tie to Edward's original surname, and if I'm being honest, it's just plain-fucking cute. Just a thought...
Techy Ride chapter 24 . 9/3/2013
Qhy is it horror
It isnt that scary
Ava Whitlock chapter 3 . 3/2/2012
I couldn't get through the first chapter of story...

It is really, REALLY pathetic...

Please stop writing and spare us...
darkangel0212 chapter 1 . 1/12/2012
good job on your stories
Just-another-teenage-dirtbag chapter 2 . 12/26/2011
Ok now I'm going to try and put this as politly as possible; this story is rubbish.

I'm sorry to put it so bluntly but it's the truth, and I mean come on the way you wrote Bella's mum's reaction was shite. 'Bella you were raped. go live with your dad.' SERIOUSLY? And then Edwards reaction to seeing Bella again 'Oh look theres the girl I raped and took her V-card.' are you f-ing kidding me? Sorry if I seemed mean it's just I don't like to waste my time on fics that are totaly unrealsitic, poorly written and no consideration to those people who do have to endure stuff like rape and abuse.
Just-another-teenage-dirtbag chapter 2 . 12/26/2011
Ok now I'm going to try and put this as politly as possible; this story is rubbish.

I'm sorry to put it so bluntly but it's the truth, and I mean come on the way you wrote Bella's mum's reaction was shite. 'Bella you were raped. go live with your dad.' SERIOUSLY? And then Edwards reaction to seeing Bella again 'Oh look theres the girl I raped and took her V-card.' are you f-ing kidding me? Sorry if I seemed mean it's just I don't like to waste my time on fics that are totaly unrealsitic, poorly written and no consideration to those people who do have to endure stuff like rape and abuse.
I hate angst chapter 23 . 8/21/2011
this was the most stupid story ever! I hate it, it sucked.

VERY POORLY WRITTEN.

COMPLEAT WESTE OF TIME
Ashkake chapter 1 . 8/19/2011
Um... Did you think this story through? It's like you made it up on the spot. I'm actually disappointed in this story. I skipped around a bit in every chapter, and honestly...

You didn't do so hot. Are you sure you're 18? You write too unrealistically and cliched for one. Hopefully you'll do better as you get older.

P.s. If you wanna get a hold of me my username is AshKake. I was too lazy to log in.
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