Reviews for But what about me?
jk chapter 3 . 3/30
he undid his pants...and started jerking at her? what the fuck does that mean? then she screamed In pain...from what?
was he jerking off? sooo he didn't rape her? your writing is fucking horrible I have no idea how you expect people to follow this bullshit
jk chapter 2 . 3/30
yaaaa cause Edward would say v card!
ya right

and Edward sees bella the girl he raped and he just says ...alice...
that's it! what the fuck
jk chapter 1 . 3/30
this is Edward right? youd think he would be more concerned with smelling her or I don't know biting her! but he goes right for her pants? that doesn't make any fucking sense!
Misty chapter 2 . 12/2/2014
I have to be honest here... I couldn't be bothered to read chapter 2 after the ignorant babble that was the first chapter... There is so much that is wrong with this story so far!
Firstly, the plot is so twisted! Falling in love with her rapist! Could have made it work if there was a deeper more intricate... It was a long shot however.
Second, you just throw that rape in there, no emotions or anything come through... Her mother just took it so damn casually?! And she has NO REACTION?! What the hell! Not only is the language you used so incredibly basic, but to top it off you write such ignorant rubbish, trying to just spice up your story and basically insulting anyone who has been raped. You clearly do not know the trauma and grief people go through. You're 18?! I find that very hard to believe. Reading this chapter I would deduce that you're around 12 if that.
Please build a stronger plot base if you intend to continue writing, improve you language and really think about your characters, feel what they would feel, write from your heart. This is so boring to read! Put some heart into it!
Don't even get me started on the disgusting Edward Cullen! He rapes her then he is kust bothered that he took her V-card?! Really? You really have some growing up to do!
Bipolarfaerie chapter 20 . 7/23/2014
I hate the name personally, sorry. I would think Edward would probably want to name her after his own mother, Elizabeth, or even Renesmee would have worked. As for the boy, (I still don't know why no one seems to do this...) I think Masen would have been perfect. It's a tie to Edward's original surname, and if I'm being honest, it's just plain-fucking cute. Just a thought...
Techy Ride Cullen chapter 24 . 9/3/2013
Qhy is it horror
It isnt that scary
Ava Whitlock chapter 3 . 3/2/2012
I couldn't get through the first chapter of story...

It is really, REALLY pathetic...

Please stop writing and spare us...
darkangel0212 chapter 1 . 1/12/2012
good job on your stories
Just-another-teenage-dirtbag chapter 2 . 12/26/2011
Ok now I'm going to try and put this as politly as possible; this story is rubbish.

I'm sorry to put it so bluntly but it's the truth, and I mean come on the way you wrote Bella's mum's reaction was shite. 'Bella you were raped. go live with your dad.' SERIOUSLY? And then Edwards reaction to seeing Bella again 'Oh look theres the girl I raped and took her V-card.' are you f-ing kidding me? Sorry if I seemed mean it's just I don't like to waste my time on fics that are totaly unrealsitic, poorly written and no consideration to those people who do have to endure stuff like rape and abuse.
Just-another-teenage-dirtbag chapter 2 . 12/26/2011
Ok now I'm going to try and put this as politly as possible; this story is rubbish.

I'm sorry to put it so bluntly but it's the truth, and I mean come on the way you wrote Bella's mum's reaction was shite. 'Bella you were raped. go live with your dad.' SERIOUSLY? And then Edwards reaction to seeing Bella again 'Oh look theres the girl I raped and took her V-card.' are you f-ing kidding me? Sorry if I seemed mean it's just I don't like to waste my time on fics that are totaly unrealsitic, poorly written and no consideration to those people who do have to endure stuff like rape and abuse.
I hate angst chapter 23 . 8/21/2011
this was the most stupid story ever! I hate it, it sucked.

VERY POORLY WRITTEN.

COMPLEAT WESTE OF TIME
Ashkake chapter 1 . 8/19/2011
Um... Did you think this story through? It's like you made it up on the spot. I'm actually disappointed in this story. I skipped around a bit in every chapter, and honestly...

You didn't do so hot. Are you sure you're 18? You write too unrealistically and cliched for one. Hopefully you'll do better as you get older.

P.s. If you wanna get a hold of me my username is AshKake. I was too lazy to log in.
mars planet chapter 1 . 6/18/2011
Okay, there is something seriously wrong with your story. Your premise is just plain creepy and not in a good way...

First of all, couldn't Renee make herself a cup of coffee in her own house, it ain't that difficult. And I think that no matter how selfish a mother, no mother would send her kid at midnight for a cup of coffee.

Second, using an iPod during the night on the streets? Way to be street smart Bella. You would figure that her being someone who has actually lived in a city would know that's a big no-no. Then again, she cut through a dark alleyway... I'm pretty sure this is how slasher and porn films begin... Tragically stupid.

Third, you beta isn't doing you any favors, the spelling and grammar in this thing is atrocious, I can see it and English is my second language.

Fourth, I've never been raped, but I'm pretty sure that I wouldn't eventually fall in love with the person who caused me so much mental anguish. This is just wrong and pretty ignorant of you. You should try researching before unleashing your writing into the poor populace, it isnt so difficult now a days... I'm pretty sure you can type rape on Google and you would get accounts of rape victims (let's say it all together: VICTIMS, I wasn't sure you got that) and tons of support sites where you could be a responsible and GOOD writer and research the subject you are writing about.

Fifth, parental compassion much? I'm pretty sure something like that could've sent Bella into a panic attack just by telling her her mother is getting rid of her, instead she just nods. Real realistic of you, mate, you really hit the nail with that one gritty and hard reaction...

Sixth, there's no way I can nicely put this, and believe me, I tried. I even was good enough to put a list of reasons why you suck, but the cold, hard truth is that you suck. You are supposed to be eighteen but by the quality of the writing (and I'm not talking technicality-wise) I would've pegged you for twelve or thirteen. I mean you wrote this crap a couple of years ago, but aren't you embarassed to be linked to this sad piece of writing? I know I would be...

Lastly, this one is not for you, but for the rest of ignorant losers that actually thought this was a good idea... You guys make me loose my faith in humanity, good job!
teamedward147 chapter 8 . 5/26/2011
OMG U MADE BELLA PREGNANT DIDNT U!LOVE THE STORY!
reviewer chapter 24 . 4/18/2011
Omg that story was amazing haha it made me laugh and cry...so great job with it. It was probably the best story I've read in such a long time

..I'm not logged in but I'm vampiressuckandwerewolvesbite. It both mine and my friends take a look at our story...although its not twilight unfortunately my friend isn't a fan
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