Reviews for Darkening Dusk
vampfrise chapter 2 . 9/5/2010
I felt slightly disgusted x.x But non-theless, it was good. You kept up with SMeyer's writing, alright x]
FangDust99 chapter 1 . 3/12/2010
I have to say, this made me laugh. A lot. Even though it was really gross and kinda messed up. It was funny none the less.

Just a few things I noticed in this first chapter:

The narration changes from past tense to present tense a few times.

There are a few typos in there as well, like a random quotation mark and an unneeded comma.

Other than that, though, this is the best twilight anti fiction that I have read so far! Off to read the next chapter and hopefully not laugh myself to death!

PS Nice use of chagrin! It's good to know you are keeping up with SM's style of writing! :)
Unicorns on Acid chapter 2 . 1/30/2010
Oh, I love this. I don't think that a fanfic other than My Immortal made me laugh this hard.
Draco09 chapter 1 . 1/27/2010
I couldn't stop laughing! Some of it was so unbelievably disgusting but I just kept on laughing! Especially at the part when Bella ate the toast XDD

Please update this story! It's hilarious! _
ProfessorOkazaki chapter 1 . 12/26/2009
The dialogue is amazing. *can't stop laughing*
masha.a chapter 2 . 12/24/2009
haha first troll story ive ever read. but... i like it
Megan chapter 1 . 12/15/2009
This is epic, pure win.

I love this xD

It is hilarious; Stephanie Meyer would be proud.

You said the word 'chagrin' 6 times, which is pretty accurate if you're writing like .

Well done on the first chapter, haha.
lol chapter 1 . 12/14/2009

just pure WIN xD
FunkehHumour chapter 1 . 11/21/2009
CANNOT stop laughing aha :D
Tiffanyy chapter 1 . 11/15/2009

Just no.

Your story is way too intelligent, and you can actually WRITE (unlike someone we know).

Other than that, great story! (I especially loved it when he jizzed on the toast. Awkward, yet amusing).
AlmightySeaKelp chapter 1 . 9/23/2009
Oh. My. God.

I love you. XD

... this is fairly accurate according to canon.
eii chapter 1 . 5/13/2009
this is far better than twilight.

at least this has a great sense of humour, twilight just sucks. :D
HannahElhan chapter 2 . 5/4/2009
that was interesting lmao
HannahElhan chapter 1 . 5/4/2009
That is amazing haha !

So funny.
Jane-Martin chapter 1 . 5/2/2009
*dies laughing*

Eww, the jizzing was wrong on so many levels, but it was funny as hell!
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