|Reviews for If You Cold Only See|
| Riikani chapter 10 . 12/14/2009
First: Use a freaking spell-check. It's full of dumb mistakes. Mutch? it's much...
Forword? it's forward...
Try to limit the amount of songs you use. There'll be no coherent story if you don't.
The idea was good, really, but it is done a little poor.
On last thing, this is so not worth the M-rate. It is at most T
| Sharpclaws chapter 10 . 11/27/2009
The story was looking good but wtf is with the ending? How can that be the ending and there's so many spelling mistakes that sometimes I don't know what the sentence means.
| weaponmistressbunny chapter 10 . 11/8/2009
wtf just happened? so confused! did she die? please explain!
| FloFlower1730 chapter 10 . 11/8/2009
the story was great... but the ending was just... shit... sorry
| C.A.M.E.O.1 and Only chapter 10 . 11/7/2009
HOLY SHIT! WTF JUST HAPPENED 2 TENTEN! Oh, no, POOR NEJI!
| weaponmistressbunny chapter 9 . 10/6/2009
i'm totally not trying to be mean or anything but i would strongly suggest you getting a beta or use spell check. the story is cute but with so many spelling errors it's hard to follow it sometimes. and the plot is a little weird. but i'm trying to be helpful and give a good critique.
update soon though :) because the story is cute.
| C.A.M.E.O.1 and Only chapter 7 . 9/5/2009
Ouch..Hope ur computer recovers!
| FloFlower1730 chapter 3 . 9/5/2009
Erm sorry but... there are many words that you've written,... weird... and not only the names also things like ''Wait(chapter 3) Human(also chapter 3) and many others.. it really confuses not native speakers so ould you please get a BETA and/or correct the spelling in the other chapters? It would be very nice of you.. oh yeah and update soon... the story is cool... but cliche
| Brittany chapter 3 . 9/2/2009
okay, first a spell check. TSUNADE - KAZAKAGE - HOKAGE - KONOHA - not konohi-if you did not mean to make those mistakes, okay but if you did it really confuses the story- i dont mean to be mean but i have watched this since the first episode and little mistakes like this just get on my nerves-not including the mistakes though all in all the story is pretty good-but try shippuden-it would have gone better with the setting of the story
| rain-of-the-soul chapter 1 . 8/26/2009
cute start. i like the disses. havinga mental; pic of sasuke acting like friggn sakrua was great! a few spelling errors and a bit short for my tastes but still a good start.
| C.A.M.E.O.1 and Only chapter 5 . 8/1/2009
...Wow, nice medley!
| weaponmistressbunny chapter 3 . 7/15/2009
spelling a little bit better, but the story just got confusing lol sorry. so the guys went to suna to escort the girls band back to konaha right? and they met the girls..why did tenten run off when she saw neji?
| High Queen Susan the Gentle chapter 2 . 7/3/2009
| angle-of-love22 chapter 2 . 6/24/2009
that was good
i really liked the 1st chapter
there are a few miss spells
but hey not biggy
| weaponmistressbunny chapter 2 . 6/21/2009
im a little confused. do they know the girls or not? cause in the first chapter neji knew tenten. is it because they have the hoodies on that they cant tell that its the girls? lol but wait they can see their hair. ok im confused lolol update lol