|Reviews for Crash|
| monkeymouse7906 chapter 2 . 2/12
| dckdck422 chapter 2 . 12/8/2011
| iLOVEjasper138 chapter 2 . 5/26/2009
update it! My friend is making her own version, but she agrees that it's awesome :D
| Lilyana chapter 2 . 5/24/2009
I like the Edward/Bella switch off POV. Personally, I love EPOV stories just period, but I like what you've got going. It'd be neat if you do more than once a chapter if you have a particularly interesting arc in the story.
| Lilyana chapter 2 . 5/24/2009
It'd be so neat it Bella could be transformed into a half-vampire. Not now of course, it's way too soon. It's just, the series very lightly touched what happened when bitten by a half-breed. Nahuel's venom could have been concentrated at birth or his aunt could have been extra weak from taking care of her sister in the forest. It's just, I'm talking about ultimately, you know? It'd rock actually, because then he could keep his humanity and have a family and all that stuff sappy dreams are made of. I don't think he has to worry about hurting Bella like (full) vampire Edward does.
Still, it'd be neat, if Carlisle came across info like that, in say a: a letter from Elezar or Garrett or even the one who hid in the attic in book four. I mean since it was barely touched in the series you can really do anything you want.
Of course, you know that I'm just rambling, right? Think of it this way (please) your story has really (yes I mean it in a good way) got me thinking. Inspired really.
Ooh, no matter what, please update when you can, I'm so eager to see what happens next.
And, of course, if Bella wants to have a little flashback scene on her happily, proudly, dumping Mike's sorry rapist ass, well I just might cyber kiss ya'! ;) I'd love to say publicly but I could see an bleeping bleep like him saying something like "but we made love" and her horror at that. I'd hope to heavens she'd say, "made love, you raped me you asshole, and you're going to go to prison for it. Maybe someone there will *make love* to you." I just, while I'd love to see her toss him curbside-well, I'm actually hoping she already has because there's no way she should be letting him put an arm around her or kissing her-I just think he's enough of an asshole to put her on the spot like that.
| Lilyana chapter 1 . 5/24/2009
Oh please don't let Bella stay with Mike.
Please, pretty please.
He sucks and since I'm thinking he was the one who did this I'm hoping she dumped him right after that scene in the cafeteria. Dumped him. Don't let her fear him or (heavens help Bella) peer pressure. That so isn't like her. Don't let her try and pretend everything is gravy when it's lumpier than a craggly piece of rock.
| Holidai chapter 1 . 5/24/2009
Please tell me Carlisle did the rape kit. That when all was said and done he did because as long as it was taken properly charges can be filed later. If he didn't report it the thing would go into her files.
She needs to know that it wasn't her fault at all (which I think she might actually, *almost). If it was Mike (heck, whoever it was) I hope he gets what's coming to him-and no, I don't mean I hope Edward takes him to some secret cavern in the desert and drops in once a week to skin or amputate another piece of his (the rapist's) worthless body. (-Though that's a nice fantasy, chuckles darkly.) I just mean that a man like that walking around free is a monster likely to find another victim.
*Almost as in she almost believes it.
Not almost as in I think it's even slightly her fault.
Rape is rape-I know that.
P.S. Sorry, I don't mean to sound harsh. Shoulda, coulda, woulda,
my experience was very different than hers and I was so
traumatized I couldn't possibly deal but now, now I pray he
died in a car accident shortly after so he could ever target
and traumatize and scar another.
| Holidai chapter 2 . 5/24/2009
I'd love to see Bella and Edward bond. Confidants (and lovers but it's too soon for that). It's just, they both need someone to understand, to care. This Edward: can he read minds? If he can, not Bella's right?
I think if-and when-she and he finally are close and talking and meeting and (maybe exchanging notes that take some of the pain and risk out of talking) then maybe Edward will see another good thing in Carlisle. He helped someone (who will be;) important to Edward.
It sucks, what happened to her, there are no words, I know. Please don't think I'm glossing it over with the whole eventually lovers thing. It's just, if she's lucky enough to find someone she can be close to then that rocks in ways I can't even begin to describe. Please, don't let her push him away because she's feeling raw and overexposed and don't let him push her away because she's human.
Quite frankly I'd love to see them continue passing notes, hanging in the meadow, and ultimately taking some short road trip. A trip to get away and say goodbye (to frustrations, obstacles in the way of their happiness, etc.) I once drove nine hours to a specific beach and tore a journal into a million pieces and scattered the (eco-friendly) paper off a seaside cliff when the sky still shows night and the sun has barely risen enough to turn it blue. Then I swam and surfed until my best friend was finished with his letters (to his a**hole father) and let them float out to the ocean. We spent four days there-we told our family and friends we were staying with a couple who was willing to cover for us so no one worried. Just swimming, playing in the sand, running, surfing, and realizing that which hindered us was long gone like an old ocean wave. And there were a million more waves (our life in essence) just waiting for us (to be lived)...um, sorry? Laughs, I really didn't mean to blather on like that. I'm not gonna erase it though, I've got my hand bandaged and my erase key is sticking for some reason. So, how's this? Take the last 96% or so of what I said and consider it a big ol' grain of salt.
| Bufster chapter 2 . 5/20/2009
amazing plot, can't wait to see where you're going with it!
although, im a bit confused on how alice, emmett, jasper and rose came to be in the family.
was it before or after edward was born?
and when was esme turned into a vamp?
anyway, cant wait for more!
please update soon!
| Obsessivegeekybuffalosnowcones chapter 2 . 5/14/2009
I like it. Half human Edward is cool. And I agree that people shouldn't have to like their fathers. I like your style. You should write chapter three.
| shojobeat chapter 2 . 5/10/2009
i like the way ur wrighting it shows a main perpuos and i love this story!3
| The Amazing Orange chapter 2 . 5/4/2009
o my josh, i love it!
| Lovin-the-Handsome-Hobo chapter 2 . 5/2/2009
Edward is a half breed? I like...Cannot wait for more details as to what he is and isn't and why he's soo bitter as well as Bella's bitterness...
| ol2bob chapter 2 . 5/2/2009
lol... Edward in his forties is kinda weird... I mean.. when he was as century.. that seemed more in-tune with his immortality... in his 40s seems kind of weird... especially if he's acting like a teenager.. haha... still loving the story though!
| Ceastyle chapter 2 . 5/1/2009
As usual, your story is very good. I'm glad I found out about this new one ! It's nice to have different characters than usual and also that their relationships are so different that the ones in Twilght. I got one question though : Can Edward read minds or not ?
I look forward to read the next chapter !