|Reviews for Time Out!|
| iloveyugiohGX93 chapter 2 . 10/12/2014
| Toya chapter 2 . 3/4/2013
PLEASE update i love your story
| Guest chapter 2 . 1/6/2013
Where's the next?
| Suki Doll chapter 2 . 7/2/2009
Aww this seems so cute! I hope you continue it!
| Yoru chapter 2 . 5/23/2009
THis is really funny! But why is your first chapter the same as your second?
| Please Recycle chapter 1 . 4/30/2009
You're supposed to have separate paragraphs for every new person speaking. If you don't, it's really confusing and hard to read. Also, the random bits of Japanese are kind of weird... Like Meiko shouting "Baka!" You wouldn't see a Japanese dubbed anime character saying "Idiot!" in English suddenly, and you wouldn't see an English dubbed anime character say "Baka!" either. That just kind of annoys me, 'cause it's random!
Anyway, I like the story so far... I want to know, how old is Len in this? If he's 14, he really seems kind of childish and irresponsible... O.o...
I hope you fix the dialogue error (I'll still be happy if you keep the random Japanese phrases, though) in future chapters! I like it so far!
| fukuji mihoko chapter 1 . 4/30/2009
I lol'd at the bit about bad dye jobs and strange hats xD
Makes me want to buy a bright yellow hat
Meiko is so irresponsible when she's drunk xD
Most other girls would be distracted by shoes & stuff, but she's distracted by alcohol xD
Twas nicely written, but in some places a few random nouns were capitalised.
All in all, I liked it xP
I hope Len gets his silly self found soon