Reviews for 1923, The Only Fault
RedB chapter 1 . 3/16
Can you make a spin off or an au out of this? I just hate the thought that neither of them got their wish or happiness. Thanks for reading this and considering.
P.S Its hard to not cry when you are in front of kids and families
Guest chapter 1 . 12/27/2016
(spoilers!)

that was emotional...:'[

i loved the plot, and the characters emotion, and the story, it was amazing!

i understand that some people like sad endings...im not one of them lol. half way through i deemed this fic 'one of the best ever! must read again someday' but then the ending...god...i just wanted Ed to have a happy ending :'[ ..now...i deem it 'to heartbreaking to ever reread'

i understand you were trying to go for a sad ending...and dang XD ...you succeeded!

i didn't understand who you were talking about at the end, it said something like 'he trys to find him in every new lover he takes' new lover? so its not AlterRoy your talking about... so im not sure if its Ed or Roy your talking about then, both maybe?

P.S. i was really hoping Ed was either going to jump off the boat, or AlterRoy was going to be waiting for Ed on the boat...sigh...but no...no happy ending :'[

-ZeyTheFox-
Vanne-the-bookworm chapter 1 . 10/24/2016
This story is amazing! No, amazing doesn't even cut it. This story held the exact tempo and rhythm of the 2003 FMA. The realistic tone and emotions of the story reminded me exactly of FMA and the pacing was same as well. Each sentence is filled to the brim with emotion, every sentence seemed to hold a hidden meaning, despite it not being obvious until the story comes to a conclusion. I love how Ed never really gave himself completely over to Alter Roy, simply because he wasn't Amestris' Roy.

I simply love the ending. It holds connotations to FMAs ending and final message: Life isn't fair and you can give as much as you want and get nothing in return. Ed, Al (and Amestris Roy) are also very much in character - you've captured Ed's complex character beautifully and I love the emphasis on Ed and Al's brotherly love. Although it wasn't mentioned in FMA03's anime, I think Amestris Roy would give advice to Ed, subtly or not. So, I also love Amestris' Roy's depiction here.

All in all, this is a magnificent story. I have yet to come across a story with the same depth and with the same realism. You've done an amazing job on this story so, thank you for writing this.
darkdoomhoney chapter 1 . 8/7/2016
This killed me. T_T
jmtothemusic chapter 1 . 5/6/2016
That was so depressing and so amazing at the same time. I was reading the beautiful scene with the wine and grinning like a moron while listening to "La Vie En Rose"- you set the mood perfectly in every scene btw. I shed a tear when Roy confessed he'd abandon her for Ed. Beautifully written, tragic, and quite the creative story. This was a treasure I wasn't expecting! I truly was not expecting to learn so much about love, loss, and the past in one night, and I feel different somehow after reading this. You truly have a gift. Thank you, and never stop writing. :D
Terry chapter 1 . 4/28/2016
Heartwrenching, but very very well done.
Karen chapter 1 . 3/14/2016
Oh goshhhh
Such a beautiful story
So sweet at the beginning and heart breaking in the end
I just noticed this was made on 2009...and it was 6,7 years ago and you already made such a beautiful story that time
I do hope at one point edward would be selfish but if he does...he wont be edward we know right
Care to make another one like this pleaseee
I really love how you write and all the emotions in here ~~~
Ash N Brock chapter 1 . 2/2/2016
This is one of the best fics out there! I'm so happy to have come across this one.
I love your delicate writing style, how you convey tender moments, how each sentence is wrapped in emotion. It's so delicate. I really enjoyed how you didn't spell everything out for the reader - that there were elements that were implied and not everything was explicitly explained. The POV was good and a welcome change. The change in "tempo" - not sure out to describe it - with shorter sentences and then longer ones was also great :). The flashbacks were interspersed well too!

I really loved the build-up and suspense to Ed falling in love, how he manages his emotions and tries to control them but then they get the better of him. I also liked how you built up to their sex scenes, especially since they were tastefully done, and again a lot is left to the reader's imagination. I thought that you cleverly avoided the clichéd "angry break-up", and wrote something that was far deeper and much more touching, and I felt that Ed & Al's reactions were rather in character.

As regards the ending, I was so sad and I love that this story made me upset. How the reader "spirals" with Edward, following his emotions and desires, and so when they're dashed for him, we can only join him in his dejection. Even though I would have loved a happy ending I think the ending is perfect as it is: touching, bittersweet, real life. Ed free of his love, which is wonderful for him, but Roy is not free and unhappy (that's how I read it); and the last poem is wonderful, a summary of both of their feelings including those of potentially Amestris Roy.

Have you thought of writing a similar story, perhaps a kind of "sequel", where Ed & Al manage to make it back to Amestris and Ed can finally be happy with his love? (I know, wishful thinking on my part!) I guess the great thing about this story is that I'm left thinking, "what if Roy had seen him in the café?", "what if Ed & Al made it back?" and just aching for it to happen.

Top story, you're a great writer and looking forward to reading more of your work. Phew, gonna round it up, this is a long review!
Kennygirlgreen chapter 1 . 12/23/2015
This messed me up man. But it was beautiful
Green Comb chapter 1 . 9/15/2015
I'm rereading this and I'm thinking "it's that story isn't it" but I can't stop reading it because it's just so beautifully written and it just pulls me into Ed's emotions and I just end up blubbering at the end again. Its so bittersweet and filled with "what ifs" and amazing.
Thank you for writing this story.
Amestri chapter 1 . 8/24/2015
God I just can't stop crying, all of this was just incredible.
The end is sad, of course, but far more realistic than what you can read nowadays.
Wish the could be more stuff like this one on this website.
Luxuria Vanagloria Azzarox chapter 1 . 7/18/2015
/sobs
/bawls
/depressingly eats chocolate ice cream

WHY?!
SennoTsubasa chapter 1 . 2/19/2015
I SAW THAT COMING! I SO TOTALLY SAW THE ANGST! YOU WERE SETTING IT ALL UP! I COULD LITERALLY FEEL THE FORESHADOWING YOU DID...SOMEWHERE. and i was so hoping for a happy ending. but yeah, anyways, thank you for making me bawl my eyes out. thank you. it was gorgeous. enviously so. i hope that i will be able to write at you level one day. and i absolutely ADORE the second person. I've come across a few before, but they were awful and you've most likely ruined second person prose forever for me since none will compare. anyways. thank you. for bringing this into the world, just... thank you.
Angsty Magee chapter 1 . 2/2/2015
...I want to review, but I have nothing adequate to say. Brilliant? I...fuck.
Anon chapter 1 . 1/9/2015
Oh my god. So incredibly well written, captivating & heartbreaking. Bravo.
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