|Reviews for Unfulfilled Destiny|
| Bigdickscity chapter 1 . 8/4/2009
Its pretty good and I hope to see more :)
Only problem is why you made them girls when they even say they are guys in the game. Other then that its pretty good.
| junyortrakr chapter 1 . 6/3/2009
Demon executors? I must admit, the name sounds stupid, so I doubt it would help their powers of intimidation. Then again, it they were demon executioners, I'd be a little more worried.
| Disturbed Insomniac chapter 1 . 6/2/2009
It's a little rushed but still interesting keep it up!
| The Insufferable One chapter 1 . 5/31/2009
Yo, Scar! . Good to see this again! Now, down to business...I don't have any problems with the story. You do need to work on sentance fluency, otherwise you'll end up sounding like a robot or foreigner (Ror). And I'm glad we both found evidence as to the twins' gender, aren't you? ;) (I got so freaked when they said "Bokuda". I thought they said "Bokuwa." Ror. Now, Why aren't you writing more? Oh, right... the "Primadorial" story...shit...v.v Well, If you write more, make sure to send it to me for editing!
| Rin Fang chapter 1 . 5/5/2009
Eh-heh... I'm sorry to break your bubble, but you know how Hauenkua has swingy hips and pretty hair and a girly voice but everyone knows he's a boy? Um, Dori and Gura... are male. It says in the game. Okay, review time! There's already a story like this, but as the author never bothered to finish it, I'm glad to see someone else picking up from Oboro's viewpoint. Sentence fluency could use a little work, but the grammar is great and the details are enough. This sounds very interesting, and I hope to read more, because I also prefer Dori and Gura as girls.