Reviews for Naruto: The Lavender PreChronicles
nbcaihbsd chapter 2 . 4/2/2013
i loves how kakashi did catch HInata XD... so funny.. wow.. great story
hinatasgreatestfan chapter 2 . 1/7/2011
Need chapter 3!
NekoStriker101 chapter 2 . 5/7/2010
aw man!
i wanna read more xP!
SilentShanin chapter 2 . 5/7/2010
You HAVE to continue it! It's so AWSOME!
hinatafan711 chapter 2 . 4/1/2010
This is a cute story and i thimk its really good. im a big hinata fan so i really like these kind of fics but a lot of them tend to focus on naruto and sasuke more and hinata becomes a secondary character but yours has a nice balance so far and i like it.

Pretty update your story? With a cherry on top? And sprinkles?

-hinafan-
chaosglory626 chapter 2 . 8/24/2009
Sakura always seemed useless on the team, I mean sure she is smart, but with all the shit that team gets into her brains didn't seem to be very useful. I'm glad you at least justified the team changes. Most people who do these kind of NaruHina AUs don't think about how changing the teams would affect how things were actually decided.
Paucius chapter 2 . 7/11/2009
JAJAJA, I read your message, and I must said that I feel flattered, dont worry the more you write the more reviews you will get and will help yo to improve your style, just give it time, for some reason some writers jump for nothing to the fame in just a couple of days, and others take time to gain their loyal readers, dont get depress if you had few reviews, I can understand how important is for a author to have reviews but as long as you keep your good work, the reviews will grow in quantity and quality, just be patient but for i can see, you know this better than me from your other fanfics (The Sitter).

As for this chapter I like how you make the teams, the process, and you made look that Hinata had a crush on Sasuke, I also like the easy and slow pace in your story, that is appropriate to the actual situation, just take note that there will be times that you will need to describe the facts with more intensity and feeling, jajaja, but who am I to say such things, write the way you feel more natural, and dont give up.

I know how much an author needs a review, (as I said before) sadly Im not a reviewer type reader (shame on me) so, unless you write a superb chapter that shock my core, or one that make me throw up, the most I write are lines like this

Good chapter, keep going

Or something like that, but I will try to review as much as my laziness allow me and try be as critic as I can, and as some said in the other reviews, is always good to have a Beta, anyway keep the good work and remember that you write for you first and second to us. (in other words we are lucky ones that you let us read your stories)
XxL0V3islik3aR0S3xX chapter 2 . 7/6/2009
This is really good so far! i know you are doin it by character but please don't make hinata always swoon over naruto during missions and stuff. also is hinata goin to be strong in this?
Lawlizilla chapter 2 . 7/2/2009
This story shows a lot of potentiol, keep up the good work!
singxawayuki chapter 2 . 7/1/2009
HELLO.

remember me? xD formerly or something. xD

haha i love this!

YAY HINA-CHAN! :D

sasukes mean o-o

sakuras annoying.

blahblah.

UPDATE SOON PLEASE!

(:
Rose Tiger chapter 2 . 7/1/2009
I just hope everyone will get along. Especially Naruto with Hinata. Please keep going.
NaruHina Love birds chapter 2 . 7/1/2009
Nice chapter

I wonder what's the reaction one them when they read a certain orange book?
XxX-Lost-In-Translation-XxX chapter 2 . 7/1/2009
It was good...but I'm going to be honest./_\

You need a beta reader for the following reasons:

Grammer Errors

Translation help

Flow

Transitions

Word uage

Placement of key phrases

and other .

[I would gladly volunteer for the job,bot sadly I don'i meet 's writing guidelines (I only joined so I could review stories)]
PZldfn chapter 2 . 7/1/2009
Great story, as you said from chapter one there are many of these stories out there. However many of them don't have the level comity that your does. I have to say that I laughed a good dozen times though out chapters 1 and 2. As for mistakes that you made the only one I can see is that you sometimes put "on" instead of "in" for describing where they are. An example of it is "She took a shower on the family’s bath house". I think there are couple more like that but that its. Anyways as I said before, this is a really great story and hope you update soon.
Gravity The Wizard chapter 2 . 6/30/2009
Nice Update! I wish Hinata-chan woulda taken out a dagger and killed the Emo-teme would have saved alot of pain later on.
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