|Reviews for Defeat|
| Loner Kid chapter 1 . 1/5
U should put in their names if this is gonna involve them
| chadtayor020 chapter 1 . 8/10/2013
Nice little story. Could lead to romance.
| TenchiSaWaDa chapter 1 . 7/12/2011
Very nice, good set up
| Herdo chapter 1 . 9/18/2010
Yo! It's the first time I venture into this fandom and I am very bad at giving reviews but I will do my best.
First of all, I really recommend that you fix the summary. I'll be honest: it sucks. It don't tell me anything about what this story is about, pairing or warnings. How are you supposed to attract readers with something that don't even know how to describe itself in a short interesting way. Why could you write the summary of the story in the chapter but not in the summary, where it is supposed to be?
While I personally suck at grammar and spelling, I really didn't see any major problems that would have made me click on the red X. Perhaps add some more details/descriptions to help us get into the story/characters. And yeah, perhaps making it a bit longer, as I prefer to have 3000 - 1000 words long chapters.
Sorry to bother you when it was so long ago since you wrote this story but I just got the impulse to (try to) write an review.
Have a nice day and keep writing. Sorry once again for the horrible review.
| Ella3K chapter 1 . 10/7/2009
Nice and simple - just like manga
| Lady Darkross chapter 1 . 6/14/2009
Its romantic and i think its amazing. Keep doin' great!
| rutger5000 chapter 1 . 6/10/2009
I think it's good. good story-line, well written, no grammar or spelling mistakes. All in all a very good job. Are you going to continue?
| Ahm771 chapter 1 . 6/4/2009
first of all angel densetsu's also my fav
though i cannot see ikuno getting beat even by trick
very nice one
i also like takehisa/ikuno pairing
have a nice day
| Dragon's Lover1 chapter 1 . 6/2/2009
Do you believe that bad news should come before good news? I do. So here goes.
Number one, the chapter was short and appears as though you didn't proof read it. Doing it even once should help a lot. There's also a few grammatical errors you don't seem to have picked up on, such as the quote rules. But these are things that come with experience, so don't stress about them too much.
For the positive, welcome to second Angel Densetsu fanfic slot. *high five* Altogether you seem to have kept everyone in character, even if the Ikuno/Takehisa pairing isn't one I would've gone with. XD Good work so far, and I hope you keep going with this.
| WhispersInSilence chapter 1 . 6/2/2009
hi there! Finally, someone else who loves this manga and pairing!
This was adorable. It made me smile so much. Thanks for the lovely fic :D
| KuroAngelique chapter 1 . 6/1/2009
Considering I haven't watch the anime; I can't judge whether this story is in character or out of character.
But judging from the fact that I think, it is pretty well written; I'll say,
Well done :)
And if you are wondering why am I lurking in this fandom if I haven't watch the anime, I'm just doing adding stories in my community (which you soon will get a notification because I just added your story, keep up the good work! And try to get others to review it, cause if there's a new one shot that have more reviews than yours, then I might have to delete your story from my community")
Until then, take care :D