|Reviews for Undercover at Ouran|
| Julia chapter 17 . 8/20/2010
Good story... but there were grammer/spelling errors and name errors too like: Haruhi, Kaoru, Kyouya etc. probably- And the whole element fantasy thing was cool but kind of like avatar and the demi god thing too except it reminded me to much of Percy Jackson and the Olympians...
| LilHobbitBookWorm chapter 1 . 6/8/2010
I figured it was Kyo from Fruits Basket...very nice. Interesting.
| Coolcat103 chapter 16 . 10/25/2009
Cute! Luv it so keep goin!
| Dramaqueeine chapter 16 . 10/12/2009
Nice Job! Keep up the good work! VERY interesting!
| Alliebabwe chapter 15 . 8/10/2009
aw... thats so cute! is david water? i cant remember. thats so cte, though
| Trade Snark chapter 2 . 7/16/2009
Could you please watch your grammar/spelling?
Besides that, the story good so far. .
SamXwazXhere-You spelled advice wrong and you should check your grammar.
BL00DofTheViNE-You spelled offense wrong.
It's better to have grammar/spelling mistakes than Mary Sues.
| Parakosmic chapter 11 . 6/7/2009
i really like the story! but you have some serious spelling mistakes with the names
Right way to spell name- Haruhi
Wrong way to spell name- harohi
Wrong way- Kauru
Right way- Kaoru
I'm not bashing you, just trying to give some friendly advise to make your story better than it already is.
I believe you should get a Beta, and it just so happens i'm one so if you ever think about getting one, i'm free!
| BL00DofTheViNE chapter 1 . 6/4/2009
No offence, but your spelling is atrocious.
Please consider employing the services of a beta reader to ensure that your story is published free from errors. It is difficult to enjoy a story that is constantly marred by words that cannot be found in an english dictionary, and it can only gain you a wider audience if your story is easier to read.
I'd be willing to beta your work, if you're interested.
| xxXAngel of InsanityXxx chapter 8 . 5/24/2009
update soon please
| Nyarghh chapter 8 . 5/22/2009
nice little story ;D
you gots alot of spelling mistakes but that's ok ;D
do your best 3
-matt and kitty ;D