Reviews for Troy's baby
lizzytish-lover of everything8 chapter 7 . 2/3/2014
The word "I" needs to be capitalized. Sorry I'm a grammar nut.
Guest chapter 3 . 7/22/2013
good job
prettylittlepinklady chapter 15 . 6/3/2013
ummm... if she's eight months pregnant, I think people would have noticed a little earlier.
Guest chapter 10 . 4/12/2013
Okay chapter 10 DOES NOT HAPPEN in real life !
it just isn't what would happen mark getting her to dump troy kill the kid and rape her into pregnancy why is she so scared of him? Just phone the police or tell the school staff problem solved
Guest chapter 9 . 4/12/2013
Listen this really doesn't make much sense most of all chapter 9 and it's a bit to lovey dovey for the real world sorry I know it's a bit harsh
Guest chapter 31 . 3/27/2013
What is the sequel called
sarah chapter 6 . 3/7/2013
stupid make them longer
Crazy Tolkienite chapter 31 . 1/15/2013
Good story forgot to add a tip in my last review grammar. Also if u don't know very much info on something look it up. If u would like to be a better writer then I would recommend going to the library and barowing some books on how to write short stories/books
Hope this helped!
(Can't for the life of me remember how to spell barowing and spell check is not fixing it!)
Crazy Tolkienite chapter 29 . 1/15/2013
Ok so I love the story and I don't want to be mean but 1 check ur spelling! 2 in "the car ascendent" you kept changing Izzys age another thing capitalize names and punctuation and u'll have a AMAZING story
Hope this helps!
GoatsRuleLambsDrool
baby chapter 3 . 10/14/2012
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wwesjeasq ertdf eer ee hewdcw rs whesr rbhder 222
angelica chapter 7 . 10/14/2012
check all these because every bit of it read you have made spelling mistakes
angelica chapter 10 . 10/13/2012
this is how long i want you talking now dude
angelica chapter 6 . 10/13/2012
could you start doing more writing or are you a big baby
WTF were u thinking are u 3 chapter 31 . 12/11/2011
! is this story a joke? ahahahahah, who wrote this? my 5 year old niece could write something better than this... AHAHAHAH, this is soooo bad
Aly x chapter 3 . 9/9/2011
This story is awful. I don't even know where to start.

First, your grammar and spelling is absolutley terrible. Plus, you don't even capitalize the first letter of a name.

Second, the chapters are too short and there isn't even a plot in the story.

Third, I don't get how Troy gets tired from playing basketball and falls to the ground and the Gabriella just comes and says, "I love you." and he gets back up and plays basketball. How can he play if he's so "tired"? I also don't understand how Gabriella says, "Troy.." and he says, "Yeah?", and then she just starts singing out of nowhere like wtf. Also, when Gabriella was getting a ultrasound and Troy goes like, "You can do this! I have faith in you!" Why is he saying that? He acts like she's trying to win a marathon or something; she's just figuring out what the sex of the baby is. She doesn't need support for that. Also, I don't understand how Troy's parents don't know that Gabriella is pregnant. It's kind of obvious. I mean, if siomeone's stomach gets fat, almost every other part of the body will get fat.

You have to fix this story. It makes no sense. Don't take this the wrong way. I'm just telling you what's wrong with this story.
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