Reviews for Troy's baby
hope chapter 8 . 6/14
You put mad instead of made.
No body chapter 6 . 7/8/2015
A 3yr old can do better than this,I will stop reading everything u write from now on
lizzytish-lover of everything8 chapter 7 . 2/3/2014
The word "I" needs to be capitalized. Sorry I'm a grammar nut.
Guest chapter 3 . 7/22/2013
good job
prettylittlepinklady chapter 15 . 6/3/2013
ummm... if she's eight months pregnant, I think people would have noticed a little earlier.
Guest chapter 10 . 4/12/2013
Okay chapter 10 DOES NOT HAPPEN in real life !
it just isn't what would happen mark getting her to dump troy kill the kid and rape her into pregnancy why is she so scared of him? Just phone the police or tell the school staff problem solved
Guest chapter 9 . 4/12/2013
Listen this really doesn't make much sense most of all chapter 9 and it's a bit to lovey dovey for the real world sorry I know it's a bit harsh
Guest chapter 31 . 3/27/2013
What is the sequel called
sarah chapter 6 . 3/7/2013
stupid make them longer
Crazy Tolkienite chapter 31 . 1/15/2013
Good story forgot to add a tip in my last review grammar. Also if u don't know very much info on something look it up. If u would like to be a better writer then I would recommend going to the library and barowing some books on how to write short stories/books
Hope this helped!
(Can't for the life of me remember how to spell barowing and spell check is not fixing it!)
Crazy Tolkienite chapter 29 . 1/15/2013
Ok so I love the story and I don't want to be mean but 1 check ur spelling! 2 in "the car ascendent" you kept changing Izzys age another thing capitalize names and punctuation and u'll have a AMAZING story
Hope this helps!
baby chapter 3 . 10/14/2012
rudsreteegd dgefregrdfgeergfderfygrf wvrdfhgrfri efdbrhwer wev wure rudhfe drsw
wwesjeasq ertdf eer ee hewdcw rs whesr rbhder 222
angelica chapter 7 . 10/14/2012
check all these because every bit of it read you have made spelling mistakes
angelica chapter 10 . 10/13/2012
this is how long i want you talking now dude
angelica chapter 6 . 10/13/2012
could you start doing more writing or are you a big baby
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