Reviews for Innocence
FlorLove152 chapter 1 . 1/10/2014
Continue .la historia es emocionante y linda TwT
Editor chapter 1 . 8/21/2013
well...for one thing, Bass never asks for help. He doesn't like being helped either. He also likes being alone, so he wouldn't ask anyone to join him, or join forces with anyone unless absolute necessity. The only ones he considers worthy of even fighting are strong navis. His face is also incredibly intimidating, so people and navis alike would avoid him usually, unless your mega man :) other than that you did great. I would read the next chapter if there was one.
huntar21 chapter 1 . 2/24/2012
can you please make the next chapters please..
Ai Star chapter 1 . 6/4/2011
wow just because she didn't have a Navi. meanies!

that's made her day! seeing her parents on her birthday and getting a PET.

LOL Bass is not happy! *laughs like crazy because of his reaction*

O_O okay Bass calm down how can a small girl do that?

still hating humans -_-' he's even mean to a little girl!

lol she got him on the name and at least she's not mocking him...

oh wait the children in her school would right?

Bass have a heart! 3 years... wow long!

LOL go against the fin guy! *ducks Bass' earth breaker and laughs*

O-O is that guy trying to get her expelled? poor girl.


O_O yay... she said no, but...

as usual he's mean!

I wonder how long it would take until he cracks?

This is a good start to the story, the plots good as well!

there are a couple of errors in the chapter:

it was hard for herself to drift of that night.

you accidently forgot to put a space between some of the sentences for example:

"Youtrapped me in here?" The cloaked Navi started attacking the walls

you also added an extra letter in this sentence:

"I've waited forever to finally have a Net Navi and I don't want to loose one." - lose

there's a word missing in this sentence:

She could still the ever present smirk on his face.

overall I like it! well done! good luck with the next chapter! w
Kozan Shoku chapter 1 . 2/22/2011
this story looks good. for the next chapter i think you should have bass compromise and only beat the living shit out of the navi.
NetNaviDarko415 chapter 1 . 11/2/2010
I wanna see how it turns out...plz make another one like this... especially my favorite Bass kicking some butt and being badass... U
ArkT chapter 1 . 9/10/2010
Cant wait fpr next chapter!
Blood Drenched Scorpion chapter 1 . 6/10/2010
Haha! I find it really funny to see Bass trapped in a PET. I guess that would make him REALLY pissed off. Oh yeah, I do find Bass to be a bit OOC when he tried to convince that navi, also when bass tried to negotiate with a human instead of swearing and throwing threats to them, this is during the bullying part.
aile-chan chapter 1 . 5/3/2010
please continue!
Life Element chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
Oh, those poor Navis
Sony Ninja chapter 1 . 7/9/2009
I really like this story its one of those you got to keep reading sort of stories, I think Eve is the perfect operator for Bass shes his complete oppsite and I think this could help him, as for his personality I'm not an expert but I think your pretty on key with he's a pet whose pissed off at humans for creating him only to try and delete him but maybe Eve can save him, I hope anyway please continue I really enjoy this
Felineguardian chapter 1 . 6/28/2009
I think this is an awesome story! Plz continue writing!
GrimMoody chapter 1 . 6/11/2009
Aw, this is so cute. I had a story remarkably similar to this in my head, but this right here is precious. Aww...

Well, the writing could be better, particularly the punctuation, but I love the story so much that I'm going to keep reading anyway, so please post more. :D
ColorlessScythe chapter 1 . 5/23/2009
I really like this story, I hope that Bass and Eve start getting along. Please update as soon as you can.
qwertzel chapter 1 . 5/13/2009
Awesome story. I need more! Very well written too. I'm glad you didn't OOC Bass. Most people do whenever they write about him.

Keep up the good work
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