|Reviews for The Graduation Class|
| hankbernathmsn chapter 15 . 3/6
'...soon silenced by an application of spiral stairway beneath..." some word or words are missing in this phrase
| Burn Note chapter 15 . 11/8/2013
On Graumunchen's dialoge: It should be :"Alles in Ordung", you wrote ordning, which is a typo.
Then later "Sehr gut, alles in Befehl", were it should be 'Ordnung' again, otherwise he's saying "very well, everything in command" which doesn't make much sense. Finally, it should be "Fahren Sie fort", otherwise it reads like "please go up" instead of "please go on". Also note the capitalisation on 'Sie'.
So, after I finished nitpicking, I gotta say I really like the story so far. I'm kinda surprised it hasn't got more views.
| GuesssWho chapter 23 . 10/15/2012
Love the SotL references there.
| GuesssWho chapter 20 . 10/15/2012
I love the rat conversation.
| Vaneria Potter chapter 4 . 9/15/2012
Although getting a rental of any kind from Hertz could be considered very like murder, especially at ten pm after a fourteen-hour flight.
| Wandering Zephyr chapter 15 . 5/13/2012
Vectoring them through Vimes' garden? With all the traps and whatnot he's set up in there? That is *cruel*! But yes, as close to a "live fire" exercise as is possible to get, so it serves its purpose.
Best chapter so far in my opinion! It's also an interesting approach alternating current and flashback chapters, one that makes a nice change in my opinion. Humour seems a little more in the background this time round, but considering the subjects...
| Wandering Zephyr chapter 6 . 5/11/2012
...Sugar? I almost think Cruces was lying! Considering his actions in "Men at Arms" (gonne or not), I wouldn't put it past him...
| Nimbus Llewelyn chapter 28 . 8/27/2011
Ah, interesting. You might want to read the song of the lioness quadrilogy for a similar story (the deception being successful).
| Freyalyn chapter 28 . 8/24/2011
And I think we all know who you mean by 'the other'. Thank you for sharing this with us, though it must be a bit of a downer having to plan to rewrite some of this.
| cklammer chapter 27 . 8/30/2009
All in all a very enjoyable read. Everything just "feels" right and "in line" with TP's work - great stuff.
Only I have got two beefs with the tale:
* About half passages in german language in chapter 9 (or so) are wrong and/or do not make sense. As a german native I'd like to offer my help to you.
* One I really felt uncomfortable with was the Zulu names chosen for the Kwa'Zulu characters: it is pretty obvious that they are not real but chosen in order to "have a laugh". The Boor and Howandalandian-Morpokian names are on the other hand real English and Dutch names. Maybe I am to sensitive but this difference in naming the beforementioned strikes me as inherently racist. Let me make it clear: I am not saying that you did that on purpose but I am saying that I feel that this is a mistake on your part.
| fledge chapter 26 . 7/2/2009
A very thorough description of military history. You certainly know your stuff. And so it's GENERAL Perks already, is it? How far up the ladder has Mal climbed in the meantime?
So finally Jocasta is (back) in the capable hands of her (not so) old teacher - a nice development indeed.
Off the topic, but I'd like to remind you: You still owe us all the story of that less than intelligent student assassin who wanted to inhume a tribe of pictsies...
| fledge chapter 25 . 6/30/2009
Terry himself couldn't have done this any better. Vetinary is certainly much better than he lets on, after all. And Sam is priceless as well.
And of course, learning without constant fear is really a lot more effective...
| fledge chapter 24 . 6/30/2009
Thanks for mentioning my humble ideas. Let's hope the construction of this chapter doesn't take too long. It must be ratehr difficult writing, what with aal those constant time shifts.
Before this comment gets longer than this so-called chapter, I'd better finsh, I expect...
| fledge chapter 23 . 6/30/2009
Another item of bitter, tragic aspect. But then that's what makes this story so extraordinary. Anyone can rant on about absurdities, it's the mix of tragedy and comedy that makes a tale special. Once again, those names are incredible(1). But N'Khazi? I seem to be missing something here.
A pretty idea to give Lucinda a second chance. Do I sense a complete, new concept for a complete, new story here?
Did you cook up that shitty fable by yourself? It's an absolute hoot!
(1) Or N'Kredibl, perhaps.
| fledge chapter 22 . 6/30/2009
cochoneadora! - Is there a language you are NOT familiar with?
another admirable chapter indeed. A very dire portrait of Hugglestones, which counterpoints the sarcastic tone wonderpully. Reall, such schools - or such heads - ought to be done away with in any universe.
Another thing I'd like to congratulate you on is your inventiveness of names, particularly the Kwa'Zulu ones...