|Reviews for Becoming the Beast|
| penny4him chapter 2 . 6/1/2009
Dark, yes, but very well-written. You've so clearly portrayed the bitterness and anger Kaiyel carries with her. Where is the line between justice and savagery? Issildra has found forgiveness from her goddess, but her sister cannot forgive her. Your story is very thought-provoking and I hope you will continue it.
| Thazienne chapter 1 . 5/12/2009
I really like the idea of your story. Kaiyel seems very disturbed but grounded. Your characterization of her is obviously very well thought out. A few of your other characters like her mother could be better (she must be fairly tough herself to give birth to a half-orc and survive) but I did love the description of her eyes. Another place you could improve on is setting. Fantasy realms give you a chance to make extraordinary places unfathomable in the real world and make good stories, great ones. But all in all a pretty good opening chapter with a very different breed of monster.