Great story, but getting the bad guy was too easy.

Great story

A lovely story.
It is nice to have the team spirit that seems to get missed on the programme sometimes.
It is true that sending Tony away at that time was probably the worst thing for him and I wonder whether Vance was really ignorant of that.

good story.

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Great story. The use of mirages and phantoms was an excellent tool for diving into the psyche of our favorite characters and giving the story multiple layers. I love your work, Moki. You are by far one of the most talented fan fic writers I have come across.

Why didn't DiNozzo make a floatation device out of his pants? That's why you take them off. You tie knots in both legs, then whip the pants over your head, filling the legs with air. It helps keep your head floating. Then there's floating period. You don't have to be kicking constantly.

I freaked out the entire time I read this chapter! and am still freaking out lol...

This is killing me...poor Tony :(

Great story! Really loved it.

This is a wonderful awesome story. I enjoyed reading it a lot. :D Thank you for sharing. :D

Great story!

Awesome story, it truly did feel like the show, nothing to OOC or whatever its called. Thanks for writing this, and good luck going into freelance writing. You got talent, I'm sure you can make it where ever you go with the writing. Thanks again, for a wonderful story!

I am so pleased that you are going to make a career out of writing. You are extremely good at it. You write with a keen eye to detail and the story line flows effortlessly. You have encapsulated the characteristics of the team so well that I can picture their every facial expression. Well done. I am really looking forward to reading more of your stories.

This a really great story! There are two things a like more than anything else. 1) The phantom's and delusions. 2) The last line at the beginning at each chapter. Although, I did start laughing when it was the same line three times in a row. :) I feel so bad about delusion Jenny telling Tony that he wasn't allowed to die a peaceful death, but had... no deserved to die in agony. It was sad. :( Keep writing!