|Reviews for Ten and Taken|
| HAMUCHA chapter 5 . 12/13/2009
(And he didn’t know if he was horrified or happy that these damned whispers were opening his eyes to everything his brother had been through. All he knew now was he wanted something to suffer for it.)
I can't believe Sammy's so... un-intelligent aka stu*. It's hell. Of course it is horrible. But I'm glad he knows now. Go on Sam, make them suffer.
| HAMUCHA chapter 2 . 12/13/2009
(“Dean, I’m trying to work, man.” Sam motioned towards the water. “Just go play in the water and let me be. I’ll make sure your safe.” And Sam may have said the exact wrong thing because Dean’s smile fell right off his face and he gazed down at the grass.)
Aw, poor Dean (hugging little Dean).
| Carol81Brazil chapter 8 . 11/19/2009
Very good, love the end, that as exactly what i think that have to happen.
Kisses from Brazil.
| Rosetta Brunestud chapter 8 . 11/11/2009
ehehehe That was pretty good
Cute little Dean *-* He is anoying, but so sweet ehehehe
I loved that epilogue lol The boys on Disney... I can't even imagine that eheheh
I loved the fanfic, keep up the good work
| bhoney chapter 8 . 10/12/2009
Great epilogue! Love that Dean accidentally turned them both into kids this time. LOL
LOVED this: "Liar. Sam had calculated it. That look worked on Dean approximately forty percent of the time. Apparently not today though." *snickers* It's so Sam to have it figured out how often the look works.
This was a nice way of showing Sam's regressed age: "The woods felt more threatening than they had before. Sam shuffled closer to his brother. “I wish he’d hurry up. It’s creepy out there.”"
LOVED this: "“Well, I guess we’re going to Orlando, you damn idjits.” He held up his hand. “I don’t wanna hear another word about it. Damn kids…” He muttered." LOL I love Bobby, and I was both surprised and thrilled that he gave in so easily on the Disneyland thing. So sweet. (And a little sad, probably the only time the boys ever got to do something like that, kids or not.) I'd LOVE to see a tag to this, where we see them at Disneyland having fun.
Really great story-suspenseful, good characterization, nice banter, great brotherly moments, Bobby and Fugly, just great all around! I'm favoriting this!
| Guest chapter 7 . 10/12/2009
Oh, the image of Dean facing off against all the stuff after him was both brave and heart-breaking. Loved Sam's pride: "Dean was surrounded, but free. Sam felt pride creep over him. Ten year old Dean was loose? How the hell? A hiss caught Sam’s attention and his gaze was drawn down. His brother’s little pet was beside Dean, back arched and teeth bared, looking rabid, dangerous, and protective." Also love that Fugly is trying to protect her master.
Love Dean's belief in Sam: "“Sam’s coming…” Dean told the air. “You better get back. You won’t get the drop on him twice, you bastard.”"
I felt so bad for Dean when his pet died.
I especially loved this exchange: "Other than that, it was a good week, Sam.”
“Other than going to Walmart it was good week? Cheap new clothes was your low point? How do you figure that?” Sam’s brow knitted in confusion. “Dean you got kidnapped by demons on day one…”
“Yeah. And you kicked ass. That was great…” Dean smiled and looked away like he was engrossed in a fond memory.
“Okay.” Sam never could let something go when he didn’t understand. “Then we went to those awful motels…”
“Sammy, that was okay. We went swimming. We played cards. Picked up Fugly.” Dean seemed a little sad at that. “And then we came here to hang out with Bobby.”
“All while you were being tortured by demonic voices.” Sam sighed. He knew he should let it go, but when had he ever been able to do that. “And Fugly was a high point?”
Dean shrugged. “She was a good girl. And Fugly died saving our asses, so I can’t feel too sad about that.”
“Dean, you’ve been beat to hell all week…and the huntsman nabbed you.”
“And you kicked ass again. Like I said. Awesome. Sam, you need to get some perspective. I’m okay. You’re okay. We got to hang out all week. Bobby’s making us a huge breakfast. Like I said, a good week.”" This was SO Dean. He really does focus on, and take joy from, the little things in life. It's one of his most endearing qualities. He's really easy to please. I loved Sam saying he'd take him to Disneyland if it ever happened again (I'd love to see that!).
I really like how, in this story, you did a good job finding a mix between "normal Dean stuck in a 10-year-old's body" and "Dean regressed mentally and physically to 10 years old." He had all the memories and awareness of normal Dean, but the lower resistance and emotional threshhold of a 10-year-old. It was an interesting mix.
Really, an enjoyable story. Loved Sam saving the day, taking down the huntsman. And Fugly, going out in a blaze of glory (not to mention irony! LOL).
| Kelcor chapter 8 . 10/11/2009
AWESOME! Loved this from beginning to end! :o) Great job! Must get ready for Thanksgiving dinner now! Thanks for the awesome read! :o)
| bhoney chapter 6 . 10/8/2009
Loved this, it cracked me up: "Sam bent down and grabbed him around the waist, tossing him over his shoulder...“When I am back to my normal self, you better run. You better run as far as your giant legs will take you and then keep running.” LOL
Loved Dean "playing dead," too. *snickers*
This was both sweet and sad: "Had his brother only slept when snuggled beside him? Well, that would be great blackmail material if it weren’t so damn pitiful." I can't help but feel that adult S4 Dean needed some of this comfort, too, only it just never got offered. :(
This was so sweet and endearing: "Dean was looking at him the way he used to look at their Dad. His big green eyes caught between adulation, categorical trust, and fear of being let down."
I had to love Sam for trying so hard: "He took out the journal and began cataloging the content of the whispers, taking in as much information as possible. Sam wasn’t sure what to do with it, but thought it might help him help his brother. Maybe he would confront Dean about what had heard when he was back to his normal self. Make him open up and talk to Sam about this stuff." But yeah, making adult Dean open up? Probably not so much. Kid Dean would definitely be more receptive to talking about stuff.
It's really an interesting twist that the huntsman can't hurt them if they can't see it. Of course Dean would take off running to save Sam and Bobby, even when they're trying to protect him. So Dean.
| bhoney chapter 5 . 10/8/2009
Love that Bobby totally caved to Dean's love for his "pet": "“Your brother said the damn thing was afraid of wild dogs. That she was scared last night. That she would feel safer inside.” Bobby wiped his brow. The older man shrugged. “Kid needed a distraction.”" *snort*
This cracked me up: "Next, they tried unsuccessfully to teach the wacabee to sit. Well, that was mainly Dean. The damn thing went into ‘dead’ mode whenever Sam got too close." LOL I really like the wacabee. Is that a "real" mythological creature, or did you make it up?
I also really like the idea of the huntsman. I'm using something similar in a story I'm doing, but yours is really different. I like that it links to its victims telepathically and uses hellhounds to help it. I especially like the whispering idea that only Dean can hear. Really like the amulets, too, very cool. Glad something opened Sam's eyes to all Dean went through in Hell.
| bhoney chapter 4 . 10/7/2009
"He was doing this for Dean – to make him happy or some crap like that. “I was just doing what he wanted.”" Aw...I like that Sam's trying to make Dean happy.
This made me laugh: "I don’t collect black cats that cross my path and I don’t take in those things either.”
This was hilarious: "“I ain’t worried about some damn rat, I’m worried about you.” Bobby gruffed out. Dean’s eyes went wide with offense. Sam sat, bemused, for the next five minutes as Dean explained with colorful gestures and language how much he hated rats, how much Fugly was not a rat – ‘she’s bigger’, ‘she has awesome spikes’, ‘she plays dead’ – and how fine he himself was." ROTFL That was great, loved Dean's defense of Fugly. *snorts*
Love Dean's "I prefer spending time with my girls," meaning the car and the creepy critter. ROTFL Priceless!
“It’s like the demons are whispering in my ear. Whenever I’m alone – at night when you’re asleep and whenever I’m in the bathroom. Even on the porch before. It’s awful.” He paused, looking down. “But, they’re not so loud when you’re with me.” Oh, poor Dean. I have a very bad feeling about that. Love that it's not so loud when Sam's with him. Very sweet.
| bhoney chapter 3 . 10/7/2009
Oh, this was a great chapter. I felt so bad for Dean when Sam ordered his breakfast. LOL Poor guy.
But this was hilarious: "“Nice job there, Sammy.” Dean snickered. “You zero. Dead mutant rodent one.”" LOL Dean was so cute and endearing, with his excitement over Fugly, and how he kept poking it with the stick and was enthralled with how it kept playing dead. He was cracking me up. And then he insisted they let it recover from its "Sam-trauma," LOL. Hilarious!
But I'm worried that Dean seems to be moving around slowly and stuff. Doesn't bode well.
| bhoney chapter 2 . 10/7/2009
Dean kinda broke my heart in here a little, with how sure he was Sam was going to dump him off at Bobby's, and then how dejected he was when Sam wouldn't swim with him. Glad Sam came around and played cards with him, at least. It was so obvious that he wanted Sam's attention, and so sad that Sam was too wrapped up in work to give it to him. Probably how John was a lot of the time, too.
Loved that Sam blessed the pool water. Very cool touch that I wouldnt' have thought of.
And the scene at the diner was fun, too, with Dean telling Sophia what a great brother Sam is.
| bhoney chapter 1 . 10/7/2009
Oh, this was an awesome start! I'm so glad I found your stuff.
Loved this image of ten-year-old Dean: "Sam, you still have to do what I say." *snickers*
Loved that Sam has a countdown going of the hours till Dean's normal again. And Bobby laughing at the idea of Sam trying to deal with mini-Dean was cute, too.
I love that Sam has to MAKE Dean get new clothes, like it's a punishment or something, LOL: "He was annoying and obnoxious and he could live with having new clothes for that week. God knew everything else his brother owned had once been someone elses."
“Walmart’s a dangerous place. I thought you read the papers. Bad things happen at the Walmart.” This cracked me up. Love Dean's insistence that Walmart is a hotbed of evil, LOL. But then...turns out he's right. *snort*
This cracked me up: "Damn, Sam hated Walmart. He pushed down on the pedal, accelerating. He was going to salt and burn every store between Nebraska and the Atlantic. First, though, he was getting his brother back. And if he saw so much as a bruise on his brother, those bastards would be lucky if all Sam did was send them back to hell." LOVE protective Sam. And I love the way you're weaving humor throughout this story. Totally didn't expect Dean to get snatched by demons, I was expecting this to be fluff. Nice twist. Glad Dean got rescued this chapter, too, I don't like to think of little kids being hurt and kidnapped, even if they are sorta adults.
Love that Sam calls the demons brother-nappers. And I LOVED this: "“My brother, he’s so gonna kick your ass.” Dean bit out. The corners of Sam’s mouth twitched up. Yeah, Dean had that right." Loved Dean's confidence in his little (big) brother. And Sam's fury at how the demons were treating Dean. I do wish that Sam had refuted the statements the demons made to Dean, about Sam not really wanting him around, especially with how strained things were between the boys in season 4.
Loved this image: "“Shit.” Sam murmured. He bent down and picked his brother up cradling to his chest. “You’re safe now, Dean. I’m gonna take care of you, but we gotta go.” He still half expected a smartass remark at his statements, thought Dean might complain about being too old for this type of treatment when he actually was ten, but Dean just put his arms around Sam’s neck and buried his face into his shoulder." And loved Dean snuggling next to Sam when they got to the motel. Poor Dean, being afraid of going back to Hell when he dies. :( I did wish Sam had been a little more comforting and touchy-feely emo making Dean feel better, but sadly, this was in keeping with his character in S4.
Loved this ending: "“Sammy, I could never be scared of an emo bitch like you.” Dean snuggled down into the bed. “Shut up already, ‘m sleepy.” Sam brushed his hand through his brother’s hair. He'd keep his brother safe and close as long as he could." Aw...
I haven't been reading much fic set in S4, cuz the boys' relationship was kinda depressing for me. But I'm really enjoying this so far.
| jespretender chapter 8 . 10/7/2009
lovely story, I really loved the supernatural pet too! and the epilogue was really cute!
| mouse8 chapter 8 . 10/4/2009
This SO needs a sequel - I want to read de-aged Sam and Dean with Bobby at Disneyworld! This was a wonderful story - I loved de-aged and hurt Dean and the protective instincts that brings out in Sam.