|Reviews for My Smile Still Stays On|
| Sachita chapter 1 . 3/2/2011
Beautiful story and I think you captured Mason quite well.
I love those little descriptions you put in the story- they all make everything so very believable. Great job! Kudos to you :)
| Veritas Found chapter 1 . 5/21/2009
Before I even get to the review:
"This is unbeta-ed. But it should be a-okay to read considering English is my first language and all..."
You would be surprised. xD I could elaborate, but I'm gonna be respectful of some of the 'younger' writers I work with and leave it at that. You would just really, really be surprised. xD
Anywho, you were right, and that really wasn't a problem for you (if this fic is anything to go by, you'd be a real treat for a beta). The only thing I noticed was when you were listing the hooch; you put a comma after Jim Beam that doesn't need to be there, but that's all I noticed. C
I love this little bit of introspection; you've got Mason's voice down perfectly, and I love how you captured the emotion from that episode.
"He’s an idiot, he knows. He’s an idiot for wasting away the way he has, for trying to make up for it when there’s no time left to do so, but he’s gotta try anyway, right?
Fucked if he’s gonna let George staple or file (or who-the-fuck-cares-about-this-shit-anyway) the remainder of her undead life away."
Love that bit; excellent insight there, and I love your wording. All in all, great lil' fic you've got here.