|Reviews for To My Precious Daughter|
| a red door painted black chapter 1 . 6/11/2009
Wow, this is interesting and pretty good! I hope you continue this!
| Arktos chapter 1 . 5/15/2009
Wow, this is pretty good. It's interesting to see from Harry's perspective, especially considering that this is what Heather would have read on her way back to Silent Hill.
Now, for the constructive criticism. Even though this is supposed to be a journal, why is Harry writing in past tense? Is he summing up what happened over the course of a few days? That just struck me as odd. Another thing, using words like 'fulcrum' which not all of the readers would be familiar with distracts from the story, and I'd work on making the sentences flow just a bit better. This probably needed just another revision, and then it would have been fine.
| D. Natali chapter 1 . 5/15/2009
Oh wow, I have to say I'm surprised you decided to write another one, but very glad you did. So far, it's an awesome read-I like how it has a different "voice" than your SH2 one, tho it's hard to put my finger on what exactly is different about it.
(P.S.: did you get the e-mail I sent you awhile back? It had a certain file you wanted)