|Reviews for Blood Lies|
| Riddle Wraith chapter 20 . 2/22
I liked it but I really fucking HATE all the "conclusions" Goku came to on how to deal with his son. Imprisoning him did NOT fucking help him, nor did the whipping. Helpless rage is about the worst feeling in the fucking world and I can tell you right now that it makes you want to fucking DESTROY the source of it whether you are actually physically capable of it or not. While I agree that the fight between them needed to happen, I don't feel that it would have really changed anything in Gohan. While I get that he had conflicting feelings on the matter, they shouldn't have changed so easily even with the way the fight ended. Eh, then again maybe I'm projecting but I don't feel that even staring death in the face would have killed his hatred for Goku even with the love he still felt for the man. The fact that he froze in fear and gave in so easily honestly disgusts me. Whatever though, it's your story and you can write it how you want.
| Riddle Wraith chapter 5 . 2/22
You seem to be a bit confused here so I'll let you in on a not-so-secret. Satan City (formerly Orange Star City) is not the same as West City wherein the main building of Capsule Corp. is actually located (a.k.a. where Bulma, Vegeta and the Briefs live and work). They are two different cities with hundreds if not thousands of miles between them. Just thought you should know as you seem not to. I doubt you'll change it just because I told you the facts but that's your problem and not mine.
| akc2019 chapter 19 . 2/21
I've read this fan fiction twice today just because it's so great! You're a really good writer compared to some who have 200 reviews. I enjoyed seeing Goku act more parental and Gohan acting more rebellious. I accidentally read the second story first but this helped ALOT.
| LILFOC chapter 20 . 2/21
This a good story but troublesome.
Here we have someone mentally ill and it feels like nobody tried to be understanding. It was just...look at Goku he must be right /
Honestly so many mistakes were ma few and frustratingly so because it feels like we got no resolution just that we'll. ..everyone thinks that Goku was right. Causing gohan to cracking just seemed overly cruel after thathe
But nevertheless this is weLloyd. Written evocative story. It's just frustrating that Goku is getting a free pass as usual and no one actually tried to understand or was even sympathetic to why gohan acted this way. It was like they almost construed his self harm as teenage Brattiness...not the best way to a mentally ill person
| zivlerad chapter 20 . 12/22/2015
guao heartwarming story that really touched my heart was is that it was indescribable , I love all the emotions ... really fascinate history, and terrible end , you've earned a follower , excellent ... by the way I speak Spanish is the use of a translator, why not hold me off as extraordinary story comment
| Aledhwen chapter 20 . 8/23/2015
First I must apologize because I Read This story greedily, without stopping for reviewing because I was so caught up in the story that I was downright addicted! I must say that I loved every part of it. I've been reading lots of DB fics and by far this one is one of the Most mature, sophisticated and interesting Ive Read so far. It's beautifully written, it's strong and deep, and as I read it while listening to emotional musics I lived the damn thing to its fullest. I love the way you depicted Gohans suffering, metaphorically with the hounds tearing him apart, and his need for physical pain is psychologically very credible (or at least I think, as I never experienced that kind of suffering.).
I read some reviews saying that Goku is a little bit out of character. Well I agree with that but it didn't bother me:,actually I liked it because he is indeed a little out of it but he COULD become like this :,after all he is a father, he has grown up, and his family is living something deep and serious so any "idiot" would I think mature up a little, besides I found in the later dbz series that Goku was much wiser: I could see that when he talks with Piccolo about the best strategy to beat Buu or the way he tells Piccolo that Gohan loves him when Piccolo asks him to Say hello to Gohan for him in the Otherworld. I dont know how to explain myself but I felt a better understanding of things and relationships in Goku si the way you depicted him in your story didnt bother me at all. And as i am a damn fluffy-hugs-comfort addict, i could not possibly not like it lol.
Maybe one or two critics: As a big fan of Piccolo (like many I think I kind of have a gargantuesque soft spot for him) AND a hug-fluff addict, I must admit I was slighty disappointed that there were not a little more going on between Gohan and Piccolo even if the first scene on the roof is absolutely cute and the second on the cliff made my heart melt and my stomach flutter when piccolo holds gohan. It was discrete, and beautify as Piccolos love for Gohan was clear but reserved. Buuit well I would have loved to read about a scene where Gohan actually cries in Piccolos arms and he comforts him. There again some would think it would be out of Piccolos character but I think its debatable : after all didn't Piccolo change from the moment he met Gohan? And in the series I always thought it would not be so shocking to see them hug as their bond is so strong. Anyway, if you have time some day, I really hope you will write a story around them two or even just a scene like this between them two.
And God I wish I wrote as well as you. I actually recently deleted all my stories because I thought they were so lame and fluffy...
Anyway thank you for giving me such a good time reading this, I'm running to read the second part!
| CrimsonWild chapter 1 . 5/10/2015
I just finished reading this whole story and I loved it. I'm not normally one for self harm stories, but this one was awesome, you got to see Goku acting as more of a Dad then you would normally see and I think that is what got me the most. Plus the writing was just awesome. Great work!
| Roxas chapter 1 . 2/28/2014
As your 100th reviewer, I would like to say a few things. First off, very good story, well themes, good grammar and overall fantastic. However, I'd have expected that constantly being grounded would have finally pushed Gohan over the edge. And I hate how Goku didn't get his comeuppance from Gohan. I really wanted Gohan to beat up Goku, but oh well. Good story, even though I don't agree with all of it.
| Sica01 chapter 20 . 5/10/2013
After reading this whole story in just one day I must say I loved every minute reading it. At first I thought this was going to be another story where Gohan commits suicide because of what happened at the Cell Games, glad it didn't even though it got pretty close to it. This story is overall very well constructed, certainly one of my favorite stories of FF. The best thing in this story must be Gohan's character how well described his feelings towards others are and how perfect his character development was near the end and in the beginning of the sequel. One thing that still kinda blocked me from picturing the story in my mind were Gohan's looks (especially his hair), this is 4-5 years after Cell Games where the original story makes a 7 year skip. So are Gohan's looks more focused on the Cell Games or on the High School Gohan?
One more thing I'd like to add is that even though how well constructed the story was, my disbelief of it actually happening also helped block me from picturing it in my mind. It is just that Gohan, Goku and Vegeta are so heavely out of character. Especially that Goku is being very strict where Vegeta is getting kinda soft and helps Goku out with Gohan. Nonetheless this story was still great.
I hope you'll update 'Retributions' soon, your writing is wonderfull and you certainly earned a spot in my favorite authors list.
Also couldn't help to notice (and you've mentioned it) that there are Linkin Park lyrics in the titles, especially the last 3 titles which are from "Somewhere I Belong" one of my favorite songs of Liking Park and fitting to the story, come to think of it, more of their songs fit this story. Now I actually want to know which chapter titles are quoted lyrics from Linkin Park .
This is the end of a long review, thank you for writing this and for writing a sequel. I hope to see you soon and start updating Retributions, I'll be waiting till then!
| android727 chapter 20 . 3/12/2013
Amazing my fav angsty one !
| AuroraDragon chapter 20 . 2/6/2013
FINALLY! The first step to healing is always the hardest. I knew all gohan needed was to be able to know he was loved. physical contact to heal emotional and spiritual pain... he now can begin to live like he DESERVES.
| AuroraDragon chapter 19 . 2/6/2013
Poor gohan! poor goku! so much could of been prevented... i hate that this has come to blows, but gohan is a warrior, as much as he hates to hurt people, as he's a gentle soul, he is also half fighter, and sometimes a man has to do what a man has to do... (not that i'm a man- man when did i get so good at psychology?)
| AuroraDragon chapter 13 . 2/6/2013
SO STUPID! I really don't like how they are handling gohan! more force will make it worse! he's terrified, and they are using intimidation tactics! not helping at all! What gohan needs is for all but the one who caused the problem to leave the room (goku) and to not crowd him, but not leave him alone to brood either. then if he insists on fighting, to hold him, phisical contact and to not let go untill he stops struggling to run away and/or fight. after that to talk, and talk, don't ask questions don't stop holding him, to let him know you are there and to not let go, to not leave, to not let him ignore goku. then he needs to reassure him verbaly that he's not leaving, over and over again until he cracks or/and falls asleep. then he needs to be there the next day, and the next day, fishing swimming, playing and each night to talk. until gohan starts to talk back and speaking of his own will. it will take a long time, four years of suffering doesn't go away with just a hug. but that is what gohan NEEDS.
| The Bloody Artist chapter 20 . 11/30/2012
SEQUEL! PLZ? If not, then could I pick up where you left off please?
| LolipopofDEATH chapter 20 . 8/25/2012
It bothered me too that Goku decided to stay in Otherworld and everyone was just 'okay' with it. Anyways, this is a really nice story. I really like reading Gohan torture fics and I have to say this is one of the best there is. Great job!