albus is EVIL incarnated evil old man

i detest old albus really do i have no respect for him at all mineva i hate as well lapdogs too

Oh look another misuse of the unbreakable vow, everytime you do that I'm going to leave a review calling you out for being a retarded piece of trash.

Another retarded assclown that's goes around shouting "unbreakable vow" completely ignoring the fact that it takes a bondsman. Listen you fucking shit for brains retard it's a magical vow A MAGICAL VOW, the unbreakable vow takes three people, THREE. Since there weren't three fucking people in the shack that means Sirius COULDN'T have made an unbreakable vow. If you can't be fucking bothered to actually learn about the universe you claim you're are writing in then delete this trash and stop fucking wasting your readers time. Asshole.

Ah, the whole the MC is actually a "male veela" nonsense, nothing screams "13yr old future sexual predator and rapist" like the "male veela" trope.

Seriously, there is so much of this story that's complete horseshit, but the fact that you actually want to try and claim the child of Andromeda fucking BLACK doesn't know Occlumancy just makes you look like a retarded assclown who doesn't know shit about Harry Potter

The grammar is an atrocious mess and makes the story unreadable.

It is wonderfull work. Thank you for your writing.

Overall that was a pretty good story. There was a LOT of technical info that left my brain spinning, but overall, good story.

This story is interesting so far and I'm curious to see where you take it, but enough with the descriptors. Every 2 seconds you're calling Harry by a different description. Just pick one and stick with it. Or better yet, just use his name or he. He's the only one in the dang story right now. I feel like I'm getting whiplash from the constant changes and if that's the way the rest of the story's going to be, I think I'm going to have to abandon it. In my opinion, it's poor writing.

Egyszer elolvastam, bőven elég volt. Sosem értettem, hogy miért kell egy jó sci-fit összebarmolni valami röhejes tündérmesével.

Really liking how different each one is even when using minor links with other stories. Well done!

And that's that. Super-Harry heir of Merlin, all four Founders, and more. Blah blah blah. The last paragraph mentions "his trunk's kitchen", so there's that as well. All The Tropes! Even for '09 this seems pretty dumb, forced, and over-the-top.

Why would Harry, or anyone, assume some random bank even HAD his parents' will? That's not a job banks usually handle! It might be in a vault or deposit box, but how would the bank employees know about that? Yet this NINE-YEAR-OLD, with no life experience at all, who thinks he's good enough to graduate high school in a year, somehow assumes that this bank has his parents' will. He's never even been to a normal bank, let alone a magical one, so where does that come from? He doesn't ask "Do you handle wills?" He simply assumes that they do and asks for a copy like that makes sense.

All the ugh! 1.25 chapters was all I could stomach. Even reading the "better" copy from the Google drive.

The version of this story on the Google drive is far better. None of this "the Potter heir", "the green-eyed wizard", "the shape-shifter" crap. Harry is just referred to as Harry, which is far less annoying than three-to-five word descriptors every two sentences. Not sure why this version is so different, but that one is MUCH better for this reason alone.

I feel like this chapter was a bit too rushed in its explanation and everything else about SG-1. I still love the story