|Reviews for New California Dreaming|
| lazyguy90 chapter 24 . 2/20
Great work on this story.
I'm really enjoying this.
Keep at it.
| jack the sparrow chapter 14 . 2/4
this fic has given me a hole new outlook of the NCR, I rely like it! :)
| jack the sparrow chapter 5 . 2/1
only 5 chapters in and I've already lamo like 7 times! XD
| jack the sparrow chapter 3 . 2/1
now this is my 2nd time (or going to be) reading this story, with that said, I really hope Coyle's perspective of this chapter of the BOS improves, and I really hope you get around to finishing this story ITS FUCKING AWSOME! XD
| jack the sparrow chapter 1 . 2/1
there's lore after like every paragraph, I love it! XD
| Mokrie Dela chapter 1 . 1/24
I won't go into details about the tiny errors i saw (PM me if you want me to do so).
I absolutely loved the opening. Straight into the middle of something. Bam! From the off i'm getting a straight sense of character. I'm writing a fallout FF, and i'm finding it hard to get the FEELING right. It's too vague, but i'm getting it full on here. I've played 3 and NV and a TINY bit of 1/2, so straight away, I'm feeling it.
Your characters feel well developed (apart from one or two instances, but they might in intentional)
I like the inclusion of a motorcycle, too - i'd planned that for mine, ever since seeing them in 3 and thinking "why hasn't anyone repaired them?"
The motorcycle and the sort of arrogance Coyle has ("It's called a vocabulary") is very effective in telling us that the NCR is developing well. A nice contrast you can play on here - referencing that, with Coyle almost comparing it with where he finds himself.
There's 20 chapters to go though here, so that'll take quite a while, but I think i've stumbled onto something I'm going to enjoy. Nice work!
| ShortytheZombie chapter 24 . 1/12
This is amazing. I just recently got into fan fictions, because I was craving another Fallout story. I was directed to this, and fell in love. This story is amazing, and seeing that it hasn't been updated in a year and a half legitimately brings a tear to my eye. If it's done for, please, at least write an ending. I need to know what happened to Cassidy Coyle.
| The SnKo chapter 19 . 1/3
Silence of The lames aha Took your easter egg and hit with a fryng pan
now decipher my easter egg
| The SnKo chapter 12 . 1/2
its amazing how you got everything in this story to be interwoven with canon so well. Its amazing the things i find when i remember my fanfiction life shouldnt revolve around narutoxhinata stories and to make things really wierd your my first.
now live with the knowlege that you have denied me a passage to heaven by taking my fallout fanfiction virginity out of wedlock.
Wish the story had recent updates but ohwell
| jack the sparrow chapter 16 . 12/30/2013
hey now, I find three-dogs limited record collection mighty damn good. :p
| Guile chapter 1 . 6/18/2013
This is good stuff. I'm not a huge fan of Fallout fanfiction (probably due to the MC lacking personality as Bethesda games tend to), but this guy is hilarious.
| krukov chapter 16 . 6/13/2013
i hope that this guy dies in a wave of nuclear fire. other than that good writing
| c-wolf chapter 24 . 6/5/2013
Too bad mr Anonymous didn't create a name so people could respond.
Typing in google reveals such things as a company named Armoury in Hong Kong, The Kremlin Armoury which was a royal arsenal in 1508, and some other interesting google submissions. By gosh, it's almost as if this has been another spelling.
| Anonymous chapter 22 . 6/5/2013
stop adding a fucking "u" to all these words, it's armory not "armoury", and I've seen it at least 3 other times, I personally like the story and you have much better grammar than most people on the internet, but at least run everything through a spell check before posting it online.
| DaLintyMan chapter 11 . 4/14/2013
I like the song very much.