|Reviews for Breath and Bones|
| Lil' Djinn chapter 10 . 2/5/2010
Wonderful ! So sad but so perfect ! You know, you should write love story with Dean because this fic was really really great and I'm gonne miss Beryl so much ! She was just great, and so good for Dean.
| supernaturaldeangirl89 chapter 10 . 2/3/2010
great story _
| bhoney chapter 10 . 1/7/2010
This was a lovely description: "His body ached, but his spirit ached more, bruised by heartache and good-byes."
I'm SO glad Beryl got to come back and tell Dean this: "“It’s very beautiful where I’m going. And very happy.” The sparkle turned to a mischievous glint. “I told you so, Dean Winchester.” She studied him closely. “You’re so special, Dean.”" I think it's something he needs to hear-that the afterlife isn't always something to be feared, that there truly is something better beyond this world. And, of course, he'll never see how special he is, though everyone else can see it.
I don't normally like romance in my SPN fics, so I was really hesitant when I saw there was going to be some in here. But you handled it very well-it was subtle and downplayed, didn't steal focus from the boys' relationship and bond, didn't take precedence over the plot. Well done. And I actually liked Beryl a lot, which is unusual for me with OFCs in SPN fics.
"“She’s gonna be okay, Dean,” Sam told him quietly, his voice low and confident. “She’ll be happy where she is.”" Yeah, that's good for Dean to hear. I'm glad Beryl was so ready to move on, and was able to do a good thing by helping them first. Also, really liked how she reached into that guy to pull the demon out. Very cool.
Great story-nice brotherly concern, suspense, an interesting plot, great characterization. I hope you'll do another story for us soon. Until then, I'm favoriting this one! Really enjoyable. It was like watching an episode. Great job!
| bhoney chapter 9 . 1/7/2010
"Sam swallowed hard, praying silently and a bit frantically, praying especially for his brother, for Dean…" Loved the mention of Sam praying, since we know he often did in the early seasons.
Great description: "a man of Sasquatchian proportions" *snickers*
Liked hearing Beryl's backstory, too. I felt sorry for her that she died so quickly. Too bad she didn't get hooked in with some hunters, maybe she could've done some good and lived a little longer.
Interesting turn of events here. Great action this chapter.
| bhoney chapter 8 . 1/7/2010
"Sam raised an eyebrow. “I don’t think so, Dean. She can walk through walls, remember? She won’t have to use the door.”" This has always bothered me on the show. Why can't the ghosts just go through the walls and still get in when the doors and windows are salted?
This made me laugh: "“Your wish is my command.”
Dean jumped back with a curse as Beryl materialized right beside him. “Dang it, woman! Don’t do that!”"
And this was great: "“Well yeah,” Dean replied with a slight grin. “Just look at you. You’re like an enormous, mutated, Sasquatch breed of bunny.” He glanced over his shoulder at Beryl, his grin going lopsided and flirty (which made Sam roll his eyes). “And just look at this cute little bunny here.”
“Dean. Can we drop the rabbit analogy?” Sam asked impatiently. “You know what I mean.”
Dean cleared his throat and affected an air of seriousness. “Yep. Sure do.” Then he broke out into a grin. “We’re rabid rabbits.”" *snickers* Cute.
SO glad someone finally took care of George, though a few more punches to his head wouldn't have hurt...he infuriates me, trying to protect and help the demons. Grr.
| bhoney chapter 7 . 1/7/2010
"Dean’s strong arms lifted Sam into a sitting position, one hand gently patting his back. Sam felt like a child again, which felt strangely good. He gripped Dean’s free arm and leaned into his brother’s sturdy shoulder, basking in the comfort of having a big brother, until the coughing ceased and he could breathe again." Aw...lovely brotherly moment.
This cracked me up: ""“That’s a great plan,” Beryl remarked dryly. “So specific, so detailed.”
“Woman.”" *snicker* I could so hear this exchange going down. LOL
"The whole “working together” idea reverberated through Dean’s brain. It was a remarkably calming thing to think about… Having people at his back, watching their backs, working as a unit. It was just the sort of thing Dean liked, the sort of thing that reminded him of the old days, of working hunts together with John and Sam. Good times…" Really insightful look into Dean's thoughts. For all his bluster, I think he definitely works better-and craves working-as part of a team.
I don't know that I trust George. Stupid toad.
| bhoney chapter 6 . 1/7/2010
This made me laugh: "It bothered Dean how attractive and endearing he found her to be-especially since she had been retaining pertinent information… And also possibly because she was dead." *snort*
"“He told you not to.” Sam shook his head, lips pressed tightly together. Dean recognized the look. “Does everyone always do what Dad says?” His voice was taut with pent-up frustration." Well, John is kinda intimidating, LOL. Sam's frustration was great.
"“Actually,” Dean spoke up, “I think it’s kinda cool. I mean, most people send flowers or cards to say ‘I love you.’” He grinned. “Dad sent a ghost.”
Sam looked askance at his brother, one dark eyebrow raised.
Dean chuckled. “I like this idea more and more. What better way to avoid chick flick moments and still show that you care? Send a ghostly guardian!” He could tell Sam was trying not to smile.
Sam failed, a boyish grin breaking out across his face, flashing white in Beryl’s luminescence. “Okay, so maybe it’s a cool idea.”" LOL It IS a cool idea. And I love that Dean could make Sam laugh, coax him out of his frustration with John.
This was cute: "His words were cut off by a groan, which he managed to deepen just in time to prevent it from turning into an unmanly whimper." Oh, poor hurt Dean. Brilliant idea to have Beryl reach inside him and set the rib-really original! She does seem to have a bit of a thing for Dean. Wonder why. I mean, besides the obvious. I wonder if she's liked him ever since John told her about him.
| bhoney chapter 5 . 1/7/2010
"“Let me stay and distract them. You can-you can go for help.”
“Shut up, Dean,” Sam snapped." Love Dean's willingness to sacrifice himself, as always, for Sam's safety, and Sam's refusal to even consider it.
“Save yourself.” Yep, sounds like something Dean would mutter before passing out.
This cracked me up: “Radios randomly changing to classic rock stations, cheeseburgers and pies disappearing from the refrigerator… You’d be some ghost, Dean.” LOL
That Beryl really is coming in handy. Wonder what makes her so special. So, she knew John, eh? Curiouser and curiouser.
| bhoney chapter 4 . 1/7/2010
"Dean stepped forward and took the man’s jaw in his hand, glaring at him. “You think you can get away with trying to stab my brother?” He gave the guy’s face a shake. “I’ll kill you, you-”" Oh yeah, BAD move there, George! I couldn't believe George actually WANTED to be possessed, tried to stab Sam when he wasn't. Jerk. Too bad the creature's gone or it could eat him.
"“It’s Sam,” Sam replied casually, then quickly clapped a hand over his mouth. He glanced at Dean, shock and confusion written all over his face. “Dude are we talking to this ghost?" Sam's guilty reaction here totally cracked me up, the image of him clapping a hand over his mouth. *giggle*
This was great, too: "The ghost woman rolled her eyes and crossed her arms. “Men! And here I thought I actually missed the stupid creatures!”" *snicker* I think I like her. And it's kinda handy that the ghost can both lead them out and illuminate the way with her glowyness, all at once. LOL
| bhoney chapter 3 . 1/7/2010
Hiding weapons in the med kit was a BRILLIANT idea!
Loved the personification of pain here: "But Dean was beginning to learn that pain was a sadistic psycho with no concern for convenience."
"That was when he started coughing again. And couldn’t stop. And also couldn’t breathe.
“Dean!” Sam shouted. “Breathe, Dean!”
Dean gave his brother an “I’m trying, but I can’t, so don’t yell at me” look as he fought for air… air that wasn’t coming." Ah, have I mentioned that I love when Dean can't breathe? ;)
"“You know… The movie Ghost. Ditto.”
“Oh yeah.” There was a trace of a smile in Sam’s voice. “Ditto.”" Aw...
"“I kinda found myself thinking like you and Dad.”
“Thinking ‘bout blowing up that door, Sammy?” Dean asked with a grin.
Sam nodded. “Yeah.”" LOL Loved that! Shows just how well they know each other.
And I loved that Sam realized this: "Though he acted like it sometimes, Dean was no idiot. And he had to be one of the best hunters out there."
Also love that they took the demon down without even having to use any of their tools, just wits and Dean's awesome moves. ;)
| bhoney chapter 2 . 1/7/2010
Okay, I'd already left a review for ch. 1, so I'll put here the things I liked about it:
"Heck, he didn’t even know if he was headed in the right direction. But, by God, he was going to keep going until he found his brother-or died trying. He could do no less." Yep, that sounds like Dean alright.
“Just-just testing the strength of the walls down here. They’re, uh, they’re good and strong.” Perfect Dean voice, sounds just like him.
"“See? I’m getting better already?” he panted.
“Sure, Dean. You’re magic,” Sam retorted dryly." LOL This made me laugh, and rang so true to the boys' voices and banter.
"Sam got it, then. To Dean, this was about Sam’s life-it was about protecting it. It always was. “Dean-”" Ah, very true. Love how Dean's so concerned about Sam throughout these chapters.
In this chapter, I like how you threw in the unexpected here-thought we were dealing with a creature, only to have a demon show up. His name sounds oddly familiar, as if I've heard it before. Is it from lore, or an allusion to something?
I love stories where Dean has a hard time breathing, so that was great. Also, broken ribs on Dean always float my boat. I love how protective and concerned Sam's being in here. And I'm really intrigued to find out why the demon didn't just kill them. Wonder if the innocents they saved are going to come back in and try to help out.
| ukfan101 chapter 10 . 12/18/2009
such a bittersweet ending...where Dean and the ghost could have had something together only if...good job
| enviousxbeauty chapter 10 . 12/14/2009
I can't believe it is over. It was such a great story. Congrats on finishing it. Take care.
| januarysunshine13 chapter 10 . 12/13/2009
Good job with the felt bad for Beryl. But at least she got to help someone even after her death...Hope to see more stories of Supernatural from you!
| amyblair chapter 10 . 12/11/2009
I am so proud of you for finishing! It was a great tale to be told! I loved that you incorporated such a lovely ghost in this and made her so likable - and yet she still had to be put to rest.
Great job. I thought you did a fantastic job with the boys, giving each ample time to talk about what they were going through, what they were thinking and feeling and feeling the bond between both of them.
Just beautiful. It's been a pleasure.