|Reviews for Daughter of Artemis?|
| bishumda chapter 1 . 1/22
make it longer
| Marie chapter 1 . 9/19/2011
Write more plz
| chloeeeee chapter 1 . 4/28/2011
it doesnt reeally say anything about morgan being the son of artemis
| Lady Artemis chapter 1 . 1/30/2011
I am utterly spammed by this piece of "literature". Not only do you assume I would ever associate with the vile creatures known as the male species, your idea completely lacks originality. I honestly don't know how Lord Apollo can allow such a blemish on the face of his domain. Perhaps he leaves it in order to spite me. Either way, were you not just a petty little child, I would curse you to be eaten alive by hunting hounds just as I did to the foolish mortal man who spied me bathing in ancient times.
(However, you shall be grudgingly welcomed into the hunt anytime you wish to repent.)
| Overcome chapter 1 . 1/30/2011
I like your story. Are you gonna write more?
| Sethking chapter 1 . 6/8/2010
-Kid of Artemis, wouldn't be calling people hot
-Percy is well OOC, and not in a good way
-Why is a daughter of Artemis hanging around with someone like that?
-Please don't make her a Mary Sue.
| a.t chapter 1 . 5/3/2010
keep updating 05-21-09
| queenly chapter 1 . 1/23/2010
No. No. No.
Everyone has already suggested what I'm going to point out. So either you shape it up or you delete this. Everyone's been nice and I'm too tired to give you a flame/harsh CC.
So please. Be merciful on the eyes.
| ItsNotSymmetrical chapter 1 . 10/15/2009
Well first of all, a lot of child of Artemis fics are kinda... bad. Yours included.
-I mean Percy is OOC.
-would a child of Artemis even think about hanging with someone like Mayleigh?
-too descriptive in the clothing.
| Vivian-Daughter of Artemis chapter 1 . 8/11/2009
I enjoyed reading your story. Thanks for writing it.
| Kay Celestine chapter 1 . 8/6/2009
-A dose of reality
-Characters that are not so OOC
-For the main character to act like a daughter of Artemis, rather than Aphrodite
** A beta
| Element Wolf chapter 1 . 8/6/2009
*Cough, cough* Okay *sigh* let's get to business. For one, Percy is WAY OOC. He wouldn't just walk up to Morgan and say, "Hey, are you Morgan Adams?" That's a big no-no, okay? Percy knows what to do when he has found a half-blood, and it wouldn't be going up to them and giving them the stalker vibe. And Mayleigh? That is a Mary-Sue kind of name. Just try and stick with names that are normal or that people have actualy named their kids. There not enough description. And wouldn't she feel, um, I don't know, OKWARD if a guy just came up to her and asked her if she was Morgan? And how would he know it's her right off the bat anyway? Oh, and this is not a good way to start: "I thought all this time my life was normal. I thought that I was just a normal girl with normal friends and normal parents. But that couldn't be farther from the truth." It sounds cheesy. And the plot is over-used. A daughter of Artemis? I don't reallymind the idea, but please, if you write it, try your best to keep it from sucking.
| AEthereal Devastation chapter 1 . 6/14/2009
Start by getting Artemis' daughter to camp, then let the story start rolling. I look forward to reading once that happens. Update as fast as is humanely possible. I don't hear typing!
| Kat-tun-lvr chapter 1 . 5/23/2009
I do agree that you need to proof read, but since it is your first story I think it was a good start. My first language is French so grammar isn't my thing. I still get flamed sometimes, but don't take everyone's reviews to heart, they are just trying to help you.
Good luck in the next chapter!
| Lady Hestia chapter 1 . 5/22/2009
okay, this is terrible. I saw that Zoe nightshade revewd. she is so right, but she was too polite! THIS SUCKS! Mary-Sue names! Mayleigh?