Reviews for Love and Ambition
blue chapter 1 . 8/21
I love you're story
hironohime chapter 1 . 8/25/2012
Wow!, I so love this story and I'm really happy that you wrote this since I only found a few fics of RuHaru. I think it's difficult to keep Rukawa in character when writing story about maintaining love relation. Change of character's traits is really necessary to make the story more interesting and I think Rukawa is not that OOC here in this fic. Please keep up the good work!. I look forward to see more RuHaru fics!
MoonlightWaters chapter 1 . 5/26/2012
It's so touching! I really love it.

Good job!
aisacchan chapter 1 . 5/1/2012
Nice story! I love RuHaru
jam chapter 1 . 1/8/2012, it's official,.this is my ultimate favorite fanfiction! I felt the story..i cried reading it..especially at the part when Rukawa finally approached her and she started to cry.. Very beautiful, great j0b did just GREAT! :)
jam chapter 1 . 1/8/2012, it's official,.this is my ultimate favorite fanfiction! I felt the story..i cried reading it..especially at the part when Rukawa finally approached her and she started to cry.. Very beautiful, great j0b did just GREAT! :)
Lancedark chapter 1 . 11/27/2011
Although a bit of OOC (just a little for rukawa) I really like your story, please write more about rukawa and haruko! Thanks
umnia chapter 1 . 11/22/2011
oh, i love it soooooooo much , keep writing ruharu fics plz
lona1949 chapter 1 . 10/9/2011
so captivated fics keep on
gerzburg chapter 1 . 10/3/2011
beautiful! it was awesome, i felt every emotions in the story.. great!
lona1949 chapter 1 . 7/7/2011
its true beautiful fascinated romantic story of my best couple with highly emotional events so i was wondering when will continue your wonderful stories and just impressing us of your charming fanfics and before i forget thanks for sharing us your creations
lona1949 chapter 1 . 6/18/2011
its a fascinated story of love patience ambition sacrifices of my best couple ruharo and i yearning to read the next chapters about them and i wont to say for you well done and keep on
Kaiser Washington chapter 1 . 3/31/2010
This is very inconsistent. Ignoring the bicycle cliche (You probably intended it to have an effect - only, you missed it for the simple reason that the same scene can be found in dozens of other stories), this fic was still poorly constructed and the characters were poorly characterized, and by that I refer to the fact that you offered little justification for the way the characters were behaving. For instance, Haruko's always harbored deep feelings for Rukawa, and at a couple of points in the series she even mentions something to the effect that her feelings were one-sided. Why the sudden change?

And now to the matter of Rukawa actually noticing her. I found it incredible that a person like Rukawa, who generally doesn't like to think about things, should continually contemplate the mystery behind Haruko's apparent ubiquity. Because face it, Haruko is a very underwhelming character. She hasn't done anything (in the series, or in your story) to draw Rukawa's attention. As far as Rukawa is concerned, she's just another one of those fangirls. If a person has as many fangirls as Rukawa has, I should imagine that being impressed by a girl would require more from her than the simple act of existing. An emo Haruko is even worse. Put yourself in Rukawa's place. What kind of guy would find the sight of a girl whom he scarcely knows crying her eyes out for no apparent reason and doing everything that would otherwise qualify as a prelude to a suicide attempt, attractive? Unless he's irrationally empathetic, I guess, and Rukawa's obviously not empathetic, or the type that falls in love randomly and for no reason.

The scene you painted in which Rukawa impulsively pulls Haruko into an embrace and everyone accepts it as perfectly natural is unnatural in itself. Haruko obviously has a problem, and Rukawa, out of all people, is the most concerned about her. Shouldn't Akagi at least, being the protective older brother, have noticed if his sister had a problem that big? Everyone has problems, and everyone reacts to them differently. There is nothing special about that, nothing to kindle a fiery passion in anyone. Why should Rukawa, without even knowing what Haruko's problem was, automatically assume that it was something that a warm hug from him could resolve? Even if he had somehow been secretly harboring feelings for Haruko, a move like that would have still come across as brazen to the point of lecherous.

I don't have anything against the pairing. The point is that this story could have been much better if you had provided reasonable justification for Haruko's behaving like an emo when she had already reconciled herself to the fact that her feelings for Rukawa would remain one-sided, and Rukawa's suddenly noticing Haruko, out of all the girls he had never noticed before, and instantly becoming attracted to her. There is clearly no logical reason for Rukawa to be falling in love with Haruko in your fic all of a sudden. There was no character development at all. The thing is you expect your readers to accept things the way they are in your story without considering HOW they came about in the first place. Which brings me back to my first sentence: This fic is very inconsistent.

Assuming for a moment that you had done all of that, offered perfect justification for the characters' behaviors and everything else, the drama that you built up so conspicuously on the Rukawa-Haruko front should have been more imposing. It should have lasted longer to have had any lasting meaning at all. After all that melodrama it is suddenly revealed that Rukawa loves Haruko as much as she loves him. That renders Haruko's emo thoughts perfectly groundless, and the entire first half of the story a complete joke. You could have either dragged the drama along for a while before ending the fic on a subtle note of hopefulness, or gone even deeper and made it more angsty and left it at that. If you wanted it to end the way you ended it here, you should have cut down on the drama. It's incongrous.

And finally, I'll point out a few conceptual errors you made. Rukawa's willingness to let go of his America dreams to be with Haruko is not a stirring display of selflessness. It is not a sacrifice because Rukawa values being with Haruko more than he does fulfilling his basketball dreams in America. (You mentioned it here: "... you became my priority, above all things." When you give something up in favor of something more valuable, it's not a sacrifice. Similarly, Haruko's willingness to let Rukawa go to America is not a sacrifice either.

"Thanks for understanding. I'm so lucky to have you."

He is lucky to have her because...? Because she's willing to let him go to America? Ignoring the fact that this sounds suspiciously like Rukawa wanted Haruko to let him go all along, it still doesn't make sense. He thinks himself lucky to have Haruko because she let him go. Suppose she didn't want to let him go, as she had every right to do. Rukawa was willing to comply - he already said so. He would have stayed back and not felt "unlucky" at all.

And finally, I don't really have a problem with this, because there could be something I don't understand about it, why does Haruko cry even when she has Rukawa? I would have thought that at least the happy ending would have been tear-free.

Apart from that there were some grammatical errors - the kind that you need to watch out for. The dialogues were mechanical. You need to make them sound more spontaneous, as if they were coming from real people.

This was NOT a flame. All the mush and cliches aside, RuHaru is a nice pairing. As you might have noticed, reading this review and everything, it's very hard to write a RuHaru fic in which both Ru and Haru are in character and have a perfectly valid reason to be in love with each other (at least as far as Rukawa is concerned). You don't have to delete this fic - by all means, keep it. I'm sure it has its own kind of charm that the mush lovers of this world can appreciate. Just be mindful whenever you're writing another RuHaru fic. Good luck.
Star7 chapter 1 . 2/21/2010
Nice fic, well written, interesting. Got a little bit lost once the idea of America came into it. You might have been better off just stopping after their chaste little hug in the basketball court imo.

Kaede's emotions at that point came on a little too strongly too. You did a great job of keeping him in character for most of the opening section and then - BOOM! - flood of emotion. Love her, want her, want to hold her, kiss her, yadda yadda. A moment ago he was confused and had no idea what he was doing :/ Where did all that sap suddenly come from?

Really like the way that the girl at the beginning is not obviously named as Haruko. And that she's not exactly staring at him, but is. That's a really nice scene.

Her sadness is really well portrayed; however the reason for it is pretty lame. She's obviously in considerable emotional conflict through the fic and I think you should have given it more importance than just "she's bothered by Rukawa's love of basketball" which was a bit of a let down tbh.

Overall, nice job. Could do with some improvement :)
Hipolita chapter 1 . 1/18/2010
I really loves this fic!

IM fall in love aboute the couple Rukawa x Haruko.

But please, forgive my english.

My native languague is spanish.

Kisses and B. Rgds!
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